for The Autumn Swan2/26/2012 c1 
7Tracer28
That's a shame I really like the first story but I understand that its hard to write a story that you have no idea what direction its going to take, I'm looking forward to your new plotline and story!
7Tracer28That's a shame I really like the first story but I understand that its hard to write a story that you have no idea what direction its going to take, I'm looking forward to your new plotline and story!
2/25/2012 c1 chaosrin
'time for her to Harry Potter' needs to be reworked.
It would be nice if you include Cho insome of Harry's heroism instead on the sideline. Again glad to have you back
'time for her to Harry Potter' needs to be reworked.
It would be nice if you include Cho insome of Harry's heroism instead on the sideline. Again glad to have you back
2/25/2012 c1 262wingo
Words cannot describe how glad I am that you decided to get back to the basics with "Autumn Swan," because I really enjoyed the first version up until Hedwig turned out to be some kind of fairy princess, and I just lost interest. I find that every author's take upon Harry and Cho's relationship to be different, and I'm greatly looking forward to yours.
Your spelling, grammar, and punctuation are good, but I noticed a few flaws here and there:
"There will be changes, though I am confident they will not dieter from the spirit of the original version."
There is no i in "deter."
"Or was she."
That is an interrogative sentence, thus it should end with a question mark, not a period.
262wingoWords cannot describe how glad I am that you decided to get back to the basics with "Autumn Swan," because I really enjoyed the first version up until Hedwig turned out to be some kind of fairy princess, and I just lost interest. I find that every author's take upon Harry and Cho's relationship to be different, and I'm greatly looking forward to yours.
Your spelling, grammar, and punctuation are good, but I noticed a few flaws here and there:
"There will be changes, though I am confident they will not dieter from the spirit of the original version."
There is no i in "deter."
"Or was she."
That is an interrogative sentence, thus it should end with a question mark, not a period.
2/25/2012 c1 21czgohan
A couple of things, first I am sorry to hear about your grandparents. We recently lost my grandmother on my fathers side, both of my grandfathers years ago. So my best to you and yours.
I am also sorry to see the other one go, but great start to the re-boot.
All the best.
21czgohanA couple of things, first I am sorry to hear about your grandparents. We recently lost my grandmother on my fathers side, both of my grandfathers years ago. So my best to you and yours.
I am also sorry to see the other one go, but great start to the re-boot.
All the best.
2/25/2012 c1 6Kazama the shell bullet
Nice to see you back I looked at your story nad status and for a year I waited to this day to see your story. Though a great start and quite a different start on how your doing it. Though great job coming back and my condolscenes on your grandparents I hope they lived a long life to the fullest seeing teh things they hoped seeing.
6Kazama the shell bulletNice to see you back I looked at your story nad status and for a year I waited to this day to see your story. Though a great start and quite a different start on how your doing it. Though great job coming back and my condolscenes on your grandparents I hope they lived a long life to the fullest seeing teh things they hoped seeing.
2/25/2012 c1 TurboWiz70
love love love love love love
LOVE THIS! I can't wait to see how this goes!
~Love Turbo
love love love love love love
LOVE THIS! I can't wait to see how this goes!
~Love Turbo
2/25/2012 c1 sylworm
I'm sorry for your loss.
It's lovely, and I'm glad the name doesn't include reboot in it. Very glad.
Only two real mistakes. You said " three hooded figures were four Slytherin students." Which is... not possible.
Also, the last two paragraphs weren't really that great, though the rest was. I must ask, will Hot!Girl!Hedwig be back?
I'm sorry for your loss.
It's lovely, and I'm glad the name doesn't include reboot in it. Very glad.
Only two real mistakes. You said " three hooded figures were four Slytherin students." Which is... not possible.
Also, the last two paragraphs weren't really that great, though the rest was. I must ask, will Hot!Girl!Hedwig be back?