for The Autumn Swan7/18/2016 c10 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
I read the original of this story and once you decleared your desire to do a redo I chose to sit back and see what happened. Now that you've gotten almost 80,000 words in, I have caught up with you and like what you're doing with this. Your characters are thoughtful about their connection and it grows slowly, which is realistically the only way I can see something happening for Harry. In this, if little else where relationships are concerned, JKR got it right. you found a great way to celebrate Harry's birthday and although I wonder if the Dursleys would be OK going to a Chinese/Scottish fusion restaurant under any circumstances, I did like the set-up a lot. You're obviously preoccupied with other things given the delay since the last chapter but I hope to see another soon and thank you for your hard work on this version as well as the original.
I read the original of this story and once you decleared your desire to do a redo I chose to sit back and see what happened. Now that you've gotten almost 80,000 words in, I have caught up with you and like what you're doing with this. Your characters are thoughtful about their connection and it grows slowly, which is realistically the only way I can see something happening for Harry. In this, if little else where relationships are concerned, JKR got it right. you found a great way to celebrate Harry's birthday and although I wonder if the Dursleys would be OK going to a Chinese/Scottish fusion restaurant under any circumstances, I did like the set-up a lot. You're obviously preoccupied with other things given the delay since the last chapter but I hope to see another soon and thank you for your hard work on this version as well as the original.
7/11/2016 c10 ankvasker
Two things.
First off, this is by far the best chapter so far, including every chapter from the original story. I dunno, I just really like how they spend time together outside of school.
Second, you said there was a poll about what would happen to Hedwig in this story, what was the result off that?
Love your story and really really hope you update again soon!
Two things.
First off, this is by far the best chapter so far, including every chapter from the original story. I dunno, I just really like how they spend time together outside of school.
Second, you said there was a poll about what would happen to Hedwig in this story, what was the result off that?
Love your story and really really hope you update again soon!
6/20/2016 c1 pettrip
I relly like the pace and the flow of the stoy. And it is well organize, but i cant seem to see on how you would be able to inject the darker tones of the harry potter canon, are you going kill or injure at least one member of the Chang family?
Overall you did a good job and still waiting for the next chapter
I relly like the pace and the flow of the stoy. And it is well organize, but i cant seem to see on how you would be able to inject the darker tones of the harry potter canon, are you going kill or injure at least one member of the Chang family?
Overall you did a good job and still waiting for the next chapter
5/14/2016 c10 doughxDude87
My first review for your work.
This story is so good I spent an unhealthy amount of time reading both of your stories in 2 or 3 days. Needless to say I was hooked.
I'm impressed how much more grammatically sound the reboot is compared to the first one (not that the first one was bad, but it was much more noticeable)
I'm really curious on how you plan to move the story forward.
I wanted to see Cho sneak out and follow Harry to Sirius during Hogsmeade but I like this as well.
The one thing that I felt was a little strange last story was Helena, it just seemed a little strange to me but at least she was interesting enough.
Anyways keep up the good work.
My first review for your work.
This story is so good I spent an unhealthy amount of time reading both of your stories in 2 or 3 days. Needless to say I was hooked.
I'm impressed how much more grammatically sound the reboot is compared to the first one (not that the first one was bad, but it was much more noticeable)
I'm really curious on how you plan to move the story forward.
I wanted to see Cho sneak out and follow Harry to Sirius during Hogsmeade but I like this as well.
The one thing that I felt was a little strange last story was Helena, it just seemed a little strange to me but at least she was interesting enough.
Anyways keep up the good work.
4/17/2016 c10 
5LightJakRises
I think your writing style isn't as smooth as last time but i like some of the changes you brought in so i wouldn't mind seeing the end.
5LightJakRisesI think your writing style isn't as smooth as last time but i like some of the changes you brought in so i wouldn't mind seeing the end.
3/27/2016 c10 5Sentinel07
I hope this is updated soon. This is an excellent story, one I hope to see completed some time. :)
Speaking of which, I kind of wonder at what point you intend to end it story-wise.
5Sentinel07I hope this is updated soon. This is an excellent story, one I hope to see completed some time. :)
Speaking of which, I kind of wonder at what point you intend to end it story-wise.
1/29/2016 c10 Jen
Thanks
Thanks
1/27/2016 c10 Shalk Zailackar
I have just finished reading up to chapter 9 and I like what I see so far. I also have to agree that from the little I read of your previous version of this story I like what your alternate version presents. One thing I noticed is that it is a lot more streamlined and smoother or something. Although there are times when you skip scenes that I would have found interesting, such as more meetings throughout the year, or more of what his summer was like. Although on that note, I really liked what you did for his meeting on his birthday.
One thing you may want to enlighten on is what Hermione meant by sending no post except for a pitiful birthday card. If she really didn't I think Harry might be quite a bit more upset then he was in the original book.
I have just finished reading up to chapter 9 and I like what I see so far. I also have to agree that from the little I read of your previous version of this story I like what your alternate version presents. One thing I noticed is that it is a lot more streamlined and smoother or something. Although there are times when you skip scenes that I would have found interesting, such as more meetings throughout the year, or more of what his summer was like. Although on that note, I really liked what you did for his meeting on his birthday.
One thing you may want to enlighten on is what Hermione meant by sending no post except for a pitiful birthday card. If she really didn't I think Harry might be quite a bit more upset then he was in the original book.
1/27/2016 c3 Shalk Zailackar
I just felt I should say that Harry not practicing for the dance seems rather crazy, especially for a girl that he likes and has for awhile. Even if he felt nervous I should think that he would have felt even worse about the upcoming dance if he had not practiced then he would feel nervous about practicing.
I just felt I should say that Harry not practicing for the dance seems rather crazy, especially for a girl that he likes and has for awhile. Even if he felt nervous I should think that he would have felt even worse about the upcoming dance if he had not practiced then he would feel nervous about practicing.
1/17/2016 c10 1Secundum
Just read through the whole story-liked it. Here's hoping that the updates keep coming.
1SecundumJust read through the whole story-liked it. Here's hoping that the updates keep coming.
12/27/2015 c6 blazingsunorange
I finished the original version you wrote previous to this, and I can't believe you're making an updated version! It's really coincidental, because I happened to run across watching Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire today, and I really wanted to read some Harry&Cho fanfic after I finished watching the movie (since I'm a big shipper, and it depresses me that they didn't end up together in the books/movies). I'm definitely going to read this-I already read up to chapter five in one go! The changes, so far, are really nice, and I have no problems at all with how you're modifying it and how you're adding more scenes and such, so have fun with it as you go! X)
I finished the original version you wrote previous to this, and I can't believe you're making an updated version! It's really coincidental, because I happened to run across watching Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire today, and I really wanted to read some Harry&Cho fanfic after I finished watching the movie (since I'm a big shipper, and it depresses me that they didn't end up together in the books/movies). I'm definitely going to read this-I already read up to chapter five in one go! The changes, so far, are really nice, and I have no problems at all with how you're modifying it and how you're adding more scenes and such, so have fun with it as you go! X)