
5/13/2012 c15
11Blue is the New Red
Not bad. The classic mall situation, what could go wrong?
Oh wait...
As for making the up coming tournement... I'd say kill somebody...
Okay, maybe not, I'll think about this though.

Not bad. The classic mall situation, what could go wrong?
Oh wait...
As for making the up coming tournement... I'd say kill somebody...
Okay, maybe not, I'll think about this though.
4/27/2012 c14
5PichuAuraGuardian18
DID YOU SAY...shopping? THE HORROR! AHHHHHHHHHH! RUN, GAVIN, RUN! YOU TOO, PICHU! This was a pretty good chapter. Can't wait for the next one! Update soon!

DID YOU SAY...shopping? THE HORROR! AHHHHHHHHHH! RUN, GAVIN, RUN! YOU TOO, PICHU! This was a pretty good chapter. Can't wait for the next one! Update soon!
4/26/2012 c14 Guest
Hm. Just a little tid bit, probably would be a good idea to focus on your grades... You'd be surprised how patent people on FanFiction are.
But yeah, that's just me, you can do whatever you want. :)
Michal has a connection to Mew, wonder what that's all about... I guess we'll find out later, right? I'll be waiting.
The Shiny Gengar
Hm. Just a little tid bit, probably would be a good idea to focus on your grades... You'd be surprised how patent people on FanFiction are.
But yeah, that's just me, you can do whatever you want. :)
Michal has a connection to Mew, wonder what that's all about... I guess we'll find out later, right? I'll be waiting.
The Shiny Gengar
4/26/2012 c14
32TheCartoonFanatic01
A short chapter, but it's not rushed. In fact, it was still awesome!
Keep it up! :D

A short chapter, but it's not rushed. In fact, it was still awesome!
Keep it up! :D
4/13/2012 c13
32TheCartoonFanatic01
This really looks good. Can't wait to see what the upcoming competition's gonna bring.
Update ASAP!

This really looks good. Can't wait to see what the upcoming competition's gonna bring.
Update ASAP!
4/13/2012 c1 The Shiny Gengar
Ahem, sorry, accidentally clicked the submit button (stupid iPod)
Anyways
Tobuscus, it's a bit of a random time to talk about Tobuscus...
But yeah, like I said in my previous review, it's good to see this actually going somewhere. With a competition and all, it'll be cool to see how you work with having to write so many battles (it's a pain sometimes, trust me)
I'll admit that you have indeed improved since your first chapter, your writing style has really gotten better and such, so yeah, good job.
The Shiny Gengar
Ahem, sorry, accidentally clicked the submit button (stupid iPod)
Anyways
Tobuscus, it's a bit of a random time to talk about Tobuscus...
But yeah, like I said in my previous review, it's good to see this actually going somewhere. With a competition and all, it'll be cool to see how you work with having to write so many battles (it's a pain sometimes, trust me)
I'll admit that you have indeed improved since your first chapter, your writing style has really gotten better and such, so yeah, good job.
The Shiny Gengar
4/13/2012 c13
11Blue is the New Red
Tobuscus, it's a bit of a random time to talk about Tobuscus...
But yeah, like I said in my previous review, it's good to see this actually go

Tobuscus, it's a bit of a random time to talk about Tobuscus...
But yeah, like I said in my previous review, it's good to see this actually go
4/13/2012 c13
5PichuAuraGuardian18
Awesome chapter! Oh, Michael needs a Thunderstone for Thunder to evolve into a Raichu! Probably you should have Paul, Gary, and some of Ash, May, and Dawn's biggest rivals show up! And maybe you should have the girl from Michael's past show up with another guy, but she's also now madly in love with Michael!

Awesome chapter! Oh, Michael needs a Thunderstone for Thunder to evolve into a Raichu! Probably you should have Paul, Gary, and some of Ash, May, and Dawn's biggest rivals show up! And maybe you should have the girl from Michael's past show up with another guy, but she's also now madly in love with Michael!
4/11/2012 c12 PichuAuraGuardian18
The bet is on! I thought that this was a pretty good chapter and that now that you have a plot, it will get even better! Keep up the good work! And poor Brock...
The bet is on! I thought that this was a pretty good chapter and that now that you have a plot, it will get even better! Keep up the good work! And poor Brock...
4/11/2012 c12
11Blue is the New Red
It's good to hear that you're starting to develop a plot, and this Legendary Protection thing sounds like it's going to play a bigger part later on. It's good, because I didn't see this really going anywhere.
Good luck! :D
The Shiny Gengar

It's good to hear that you're starting to develop a plot, and this Legendary Protection thing sounds like it's going to play a bigger part later on. It's good, because I didn't see this really going anywhere.
Good luck! :D
The Shiny Gengar
4/5/2012 c11
1gregonator1
Wait, if Michael is based on you and if your author notes you have yourself talking to Michael, does that mean you're talking to yourself?

Wait, if Michael is based on you and if your author notes you have yourself talking to Michael, does that mean you're talking to yourself?
3/29/2012 c11
5PichuAuraGuardian18
Awkward is right! Anyways, great chapter! I really can't wait for the next one! Update soon!

Awkward is right! Anyways, great chapter! I really can't wait for the next one! Update soon!