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1/9/2023 c42 tylerbraden13
New year and still as good as ever. Hope you're doing well and still writing
12/24/2022 c1 roderickdiaz
I hate when they write kun and stuff like that in an English novel
10/29/2022 c8 Jefehorus Rincon
In Fanfiction and Wattpad stories about Naruto, there is a widely used cliché ad nauseam that sometimes provokes an internal conflict in me.
In most, Naruto is rejected by his parents as he has the soul of the Nine-Tails sealed within him, with some of the chakra manifesting shortly after the sealing, leading Minato to believe that the Nine-Tails has taken over the son. of the.
First of all, it doesn't make sense. Minato is and was said to be a master of the Sealing Style or Fuinjutsu, one of the best alongside Jiraiya. I know it is to give background to the plot of the story, but Minato being a master of sealing, in theory he should not fall into the idea that the fox took over his son, taking into account that the Shinigami was the one who sealed the fox and it was the Shinigami himself who made the last seals to seal the fox in the three children.
Always in these kinds of stories they put Naruto being hated by the people arguing that he is the reincarnation of the fox. It would be more likely that Danzo using Shisui's Kotoamatsukami would cast a powerful Genjutsu on the boy's parents, some other adults, and making them believe that Naruto is the devil himself incarnate.
It's more believable that way. Some would argue that Shisui died years later, but also a member of the main branch Kurama Clan, using his rare bloodline limit or Kekkei Genkai cast a Genjutsu of the same magnitude or purpose, only to be reaffirmed by Danzo later using the Shisui's dojutsu. Thus, he has the Jinchuriki despised by the village, a perfect scapegoat and possibly a future tool.
I don't know, those are my ideals. It is possible that over time, or by divine acts of the script, the strength of the Kotoamatsukami's chakra will weaken over time, until it reminds people of reality and not the reality projected by a high-caliber illusion.
10/9/2022 c42 Damien
I just read all the story chapters during the weekend! It was great, really fun! Thank you and hope to read more in the near future :)
10/6/2022 c1 adonaysantosromero
Amigo cuando actualizas
10/3/2022 c7 12JensenDaniels32
Naruto could have just used the substitution jutsu to get away from Master Bob.
9/16/2022 c3 demigodninja21
I feel you're overestimating how powerful Makarov is. I'm pretty sure that if Makarov and Gildarts fought while Makarov would win it would not be easy. To say that no one can hold a candle to him makes it sound like he could defeat anyone in only a few hits.
8/19/2022 c33 7KishxnWrld
You made Naruto forget he could've simply put the keys in a scroll, give it to a toad... then keep them at Mt Myoboku for safe keeping? Let me guess, Zeref finds the keys? Someone else? Jesus Christ. The biggest plot hole is that all of this could've been negated had he just done that in the first place.
8/18/2022 c15 KishxnWrld
Why would you demand to know everything about someone you just met? Nobody does that, this makes no sense. Why are you writing Naruto to play along with this when you KNOW he's a ninja and they value their secrets? The excuse of Naruto not being like other ninja is invalid here considering you wrote him doing shit he's not done in the canon, killing included. Here, he's more of a shinobi then ever.

All this basically amounts to "Hey, we just met but tell me every secret you have so I can trust you. huh? oh don't worry about ours, you don't need to know"

Erza literally at the spearhead of this but she didn't even tell him about her past lol, HE had to share his AND deduce hers before she confirmed it. Make this make sense.
8/14/2022 c42 HelloEver22
Main I am really glad I came across this again, and it’s looking better than ever! Please continue!
8/5/2022 c42 8Quathis
I was re-reading things, and wasn't sure I had read this last chapter, so here is my review. Fantastic finish of the Edolas arc with a literal bang thanks to Kurama. I'm guessing the magic is mellowing out both Kurama and Naruto while using his chakra. Slow change but getting noticeable. That "oh crap" moment at the end when Naruto wasn't heading back with the rest was a nice comedic moment to end on. Until next time.
7/29/2022 c42 asingh123
Soooooo...

What actually is changed/impacted by Naruto's presence...

imo... even though the fic is quite good and presented well... But after reading all this...

Nothing has really changed (most likely Zancrow will be fighting Natsu again ... Like Laxus... and Gajeel) ... All is going as canon despite dropping a big meteor sized stone in the river

Was really happy when Ultear was captured... and then Meldy came... But then that happened... and there goes my happiness in arc of time

I thought... What exactly has Naruto done... he hasn't really done anything impactful in 400K words that actually diverts from Canon... Not even a little...

I think it would be much better... if Naruto acted as wandering mage... You know fighting OC dark guilds and making name travelling with little blue haired student... And join FT occasionally to quash a dark guild or 2... and later join FT permanent... Maybe at tenrojima or after timeskip or something...

Heck his other world connection and incomplete task could have been used as something that doesn't allowed him to participate in 1 or 2 battles... If the rules weren't so inflexible and strenuous...

In any case... Thanks for the fic
7/28/2022 c27 asingh123
Yep.. this chap was boring

Sure, it was entertaining to a point... But this is literally shadowing canon...

I expected Laxus to not even go through this whole arc after the beating he got from Naruto
7/8/2022 c5 christinaalicer2004
Wewz, now looking back, I never seen the members of fairy tail kill their enemies
7/7/2022 c42 madstack
The story was great. Thanks for writing it.

However, I can't bring myself to follow it. By the time you release another chapter, I will probably forget pretty much everything about the plot. Maybe, if you live long enough to finish it, I will come back to read it to my grandchildren or something.

Still, stellar writing and good job on not losing the thread of the plot over the years.
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