for Mizore in Love!3/24/2012 c2 Guest
Awesome! What does desu mean? Anyway please update I really wanna no who the person is who razor wrote to
Awesome! What does desu mean? Anyway please update I really wanna no who the person is who razor wrote to
3/23/2012 c1 Guest
Luv it! It was every thing I wanted it to be like. Mizore finally found love! Please keep updating this story's awesome
Luv it! It was every thing I wanted it to be like. Mizore finally found love! Please keep updating this story's awesome
3/20/2012 c2 Hades3113
Nice work once again. I can't help but notice how much emphasis you've put on Razor's identity as a monster. Im assuming it must be pretty original or interesting. So don't leave us twisting in the wind here be sure to update soon!
Nice work once again. I can't help but notice how much emphasis you've put on Razor's identity as a monster. Im assuming it must be pretty original or interesting. So don't leave us twisting in the wind here be sure to update soon!
3/20/2012 c2 
5DoomKnight1of24
Dude, although it's great that you brought out another chapter, I beg of you: please, please, ple-hease don't turn this guy into a Gary-Stu. I'm saying this because I myself am noticing a borderline-development towards this direction, and I'm probably gonna cry or something if you that happens...
5DoomKnight1of24Dude, although it's great that you brought out another chapter, I beg of you: please, please, ple-hease don't turn this guy into a Gary-Stu. I'm saying this because I myself am noticing a borderline-development towards this direction, and I'm probably gonna cry or something if you that happens...
3/15/2012 c1 DoomKnight1of24
This is actually a pretty solid story. Me like.
Since this is a short story (so far) I'll make this review short as well:
You went pretty directly for the romance. That's not inevitably a bad thing, but if their relationship develops too quickly, it might feel wrong and artificial, know what I mean? That's what I have seen happen to other writers, anyway.
The OC is pretty good so far, I myself have not seen anything that bothered me with it. No Gary Stu-ish tendencies, and no over-the-top superpowers. That's already a lot at Rosa+Vamp.
Most of the gang seem in character, except maybe Mizore? I don't see her as the jumpy type (she pulled her claws on the guy when he simply approached her), but maybe that's just me.
Lookin' forward to more, anyway. This story stands already above most other OC-fics here.
This is actually a pretty solid story. Me like.
Since this is a short story (so far) I'll make this review short as well:
You went pretty directly for the romance. That's not inevitably a bad thing, but if their relationship develops too quickly, it might feel wrong and artificial, know what I mean? That's what I have seen happen to other writers, anyway.
The OC is pretty good so far, I myself have not seen anything that bothered me with it. No Gary Stu-ish tendencies, and no over-the-top superpowers. That's already a lot at Rosa+Vamp.
Most of the gang seem in character, except maybe Mizore? I don't see her as the jumpy type (she pulled her claws on the guy when he simply approached her), but maybe that's just me.
Lookin' forward to more, anyway. This story stands already above most other OC-fics here.
3/14/2012 c1 6BlackCatSasuke
NICE!
this is gonna go far. honestly I never would have thought of something like this. I do have a little question though...Is Razor Gin'c cousin, brother, or old friend? I guess I'll just have to keep reeding.
keep up the good work.
BlackCatSasuke out! :P
6BlackCatSasukeNICE!
this is gonna go far. honestly I never would have thought of something like this. I do have a little question though...Is Razor Gin'c cousin, brother, or old friend? I guess I'll just have to keep reeding.
keep up the good work.
BlackCatSasuke out! :P
3/12/2012 c1 Hades3113
Very nice! You should make all chaptes about this length, update regularly, maybe add a little more detail, and you'll have a nice group of readers in no time!
Very nice! You should make all chaptes about this length, update regularly, maybe add a little more detail, and you'll have a nice group of readers in no time!
3/12/2012 c1 5EternalEsper995
this is surprisingly good it's not rushed...it's very detailed for me some other stories weren't very...well straight forward.
the plot seems cool(HAH...pun!)and to me very original i just can't seem to find a good OCxMizore fanfic anywhere!(well...thats easy to find anyway)the ending was cool(pun again! i'm on a roll!)Keep going!
5EternalEsper995this is surprisingly good it's not rushed...it's very detailed for me some other stories weren't very...well straight forward.
the plot seems cool(HAH...pun!)and to me very original i just can't seem to find a good OCxMizore fanfic anywhere!(well...thats easy to find anyway)the ending was cool(pun again! i'm on a roll!)Keep going!