for Mass Effect: Human Revolution1/19 c22 Guest
Bro, se que es muy tarde para darte mi opinión, y me encanta lo que escribes, pero no me digas que una mujer se pone celosa de otros incluido un androide y después me sales con lo de que no será un interés romántico por lo de subvertir la trama. Tali es precisamente el personaje para emparejar Con Jensen y espero que nadie tenga que explicar porque es el caso. Solo ventilando Adoro lo que has hecho aquí.
Bro, se que es muy tarde para darte mi opinión, y me encanta lo que escribes, pero no me digas que una mujer se pone celosa de otros incluido un androide y después me sales con lo de que no será un interés romántico por lo de subvertir la trama. Tali es precisamente el personaje para emparejar Con Jensen y espero que nadie tenga que explicar porque es el caso. Solo ventilando Adoro lo que has hecho aquí.
12/8/2020 c31 Guest
I saw what you did with that one characters dialogue in the preview. You got that from the main villain of the Crow. I LOVE IT! Picked this up a couple of days ago, and it is fantastic. I’ll see you at the end of it!
I saw what you did with that one characters dialogue in the preview. You got that from the main villain of the Crow. I LOVE IT! Picked this up a couple of days ago, and it is fantastic. I’ll see you at the end of it!
11/19/2020 c13 
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Overall, I like the tone set by killing Shepard, but I gotta say it feels like a wasted character. They still affect the story at large, but at the same time, it would've been even more interesting to see the interactions she could've caused in the story. I also feel like it could've alienated a large portion of your reader base by setting a somewhat bleak tone and killing a (somewhat) beloved character in what seemed like completely anti-climatic death.
6XXxxxadisxxxXXOverall, I like the tone set by killing Shepard, but I gotta say it feels like a wasted character. They still affect the story at large, but at the same time, it would've been even more interesting to see the interactions she could've caused in the story. I also feel like it could've alienated a large portion of your reader base by setting a somewhat bleak tone and killing a (somewhat) beloved character in what seemed like completely anti-climatic death.
10/19/2020 c90 Ostentatiousnessness
So I’ve just been reading through the earliest chapters of this, and I’ve gotta say: I love ho you laid down a lot of the initial narrative threads that are only paying out now in those first chapters. Bravo
So I’ve just been reading through the earliest chapters of this, and I’ve gotta say: I love ho you laid down a lot of the initial narrative threads that are only paying out now in those first chapters. Bravo
10/14/2020 c46 Ostentatiousnessness
Din’t think I don’t appreciate what you did there, because I did.
The SERPENT rifle being one of the things to kill the ANGELS permanently, very nicely done.
Din’t think I don’t appreciate what you did there, because I did.
The SERPENT rifle being one of the things to kill the ANGELS permanently, very nicely done.
9/27/2020 c52 7Insaneauthor050701
you know I really love this story I really do. it's just like I said in an earlier review, there's so much going on it's pretty much impossible to know what's going on. I like some intrigue and mystery but this fic is crammed full of so many half explained arcs and backstories it's more than a little overwhelming. and then there's scenes where the writing makes little sense to draw suspense/mystery/horror and it's hard to pin down facts. you do a fair amount of exposition which is nice it's just there's so much about the tools in the story that create chaos and make things hard to process. I'm still reading, obviously but things could stand to be a mite more comprehensible
7Insaneauthor050701you know I really love this story I really do. it's just like I said in an earlier review, there's so much going on it's pretty much impossible to know what's going on. I like some intrigue and mystery but this fic is crammed full of so many half explained arcs and backstories it's more than a little overwhelming. and then there's scenes where the writing makes little sense to draw suspense/mystery/horror and it's hard to pin down facts. you do a fair amount of exposition which is nice it's just there's so much about the tools in the story that create chaos and make things hard to process. I'm still reading, obviously but things could stand to be a mite more comprehensible
9/27/2020 c50 Insaneauthor050701
I swear everything is complicated a million times over it's almost impossible to keep track of everything
I swear everything is complicated a million times over it's almost impossible to keep track of everything
9/27/2020 c48 Insaneauthor050701
that's not how aria got power dammit this whole chapter I was like oh well so what sooner or later a krogan will take over and kill the jester and then aria but no apparently the jester is aria which doesn't make a lick of damn sense to me and now I surely want her dead
that's not how aria got power dammit this whole chapter I was like oh well so what sooner or later a krogan will take over and kill the jester and then aria but no apparently the jester is aria which doesn't make a lick of damn sense to me and now I surely want her dead
9/26/2020 c40 Insaneauthor050701
you really just gonna offhandedly say that Jack takes out 100 mechs and 40 enemy personnel? That's kinda crazy
you really just gonna offhandedly say that Jack takes out 100 mechs and 40 enemy personnel? That's kinda crazy
9/26/2020 c38 Insaneauthor050701
I thought you need the chip or whatever to get sucked in the dream worlds. how did elsa get sucked in
I thought you need the chip or whatever to get sucked in the dream worlds. how did elsa get sucked in