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5/3/2012 c1 2Sofi Weiny
I enjoyed the overall story but...the story's a little bit too short in my opinion. I think it would have been better if you would elaborate on the story more such as describing the scene on how Hao invited himself over for breakfast. Surely it would be an amusing scene to read don't you think? You could also write on how the super concentrated caffeine Faust made ended up in the kitchen and used as the ingredients for the pancakes. And well...I think that's all from me. Just in case...this review had no offense intended.
3/18/2012 c1 1SK-fan7
OH NO! I WON'T GO TO PATCH VILLAGE IF THE CAFFEINE IS BANNED FROM THERE OR I WILL DIE! Hahah funny idea xD Although it would have been nice to make it longer...

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