for Zim meets Robin1/29/2021 c4 Guest
Im sorry but somehow reading this makes my brain hurts but what do yiu expect r8?
Im sorry but somehow reading this makes my brain hurts but what do yiu expect r8?
8/20/2012 c6 
5The Sandman's Daughter
"Yo, Danny Fenton he just fourteen, when his parents built a very strange machine."
XD YAY! DANNY!
5The Sandman's Daughter"Yo, Danny Fenton he just fourteen, when his parents built a very strange machine."
XD YAY! DANNY!
8/20/2012 c4 The Sandman's Daughter
I've noticed that you tend to misplace commas. They create a "comma splice" and create a choppy, incoherent sentence.
I've noticed that you tend to misplace commas. They create a "comma splice" and create a choppy, incoherent sentence.
8/20/2012 c3 The Sandman's Daughter
Your dialogue is off. Ask Twins for help on this but mainly double space between new lines of speaking from a different character.
Your dialogue is off. Ask Twins for help on this but mainly double space between new lines of speaking from a different character.
8/20/2012 c2 The Sandman's Daughter
****Always capitalize "I" or "I'm"****
I can't figure out if the story is present or past tense... It flips around too much...
Anywho...*grabs Gir and runs*
****Always capitalize "I" or "I'm"****
I can't figure out if the story is present or past tense... It flips around too much...
Anywho...*grabs Gir and runs*
8/20/2012 c1 The Sandman's Daughter
Be careful of "your" versus "you're". Many people get confused on this.
Also, your tenses weren't always correctly used.
On another note: OMG GIR! I LOVE GIR! XD
Be careful of "your" versus "you're". Many people get confused on this.
Also, your tenses weren't always correctly used.
On another note: OMG GIR! I LOVE GIR! XD
8/2/2012 c4 10Overlord-Zenorac
pretty damn good especially the detAIL TO THE cartoon and the script. i salute you.
10Overlord-Zenoracpretty damn good especially the detAIL TO THE cartoon and the script. i salute you.
7/10/2012 c15 Twinkie-Defense-M.M.W
Great chapter! You really have talent. :) I liked your new and improved too. Hope to read more!
Great chapter! You really have talent. :) I liked your new and improved too. Hope to read more!
6/11/2012 c13 18ItNeedsMoreGays
Whoa, such an awesome and intense chapter! I love it! :) Keep up the great work!
18ItNeedsMoreGaysWhoa, such an awesome and intense chapter! I love it! :) Keep up the great work!
5/2/2012 c6 CMR Rosa
Great chapter, will Dib befriend the teen titans and get revenge on his classments?
Great chapter, will Dib befriend the teen titans and get revenge on his classments?