for So Much for No Strings Attached7/15 c1 PixiefiedMagic
I started reading this last year, forgot about it as you do when waiting for updates. I got further this time and although im still enjoying the story, im getting increasingly frustrated by the errors in it. Words are wrong, names are wrong, missing words and misplaced words, errors that are really pulling your story down. I cant work out if English isnt your main language or not, but please please get it rewritten with a Beta. As i said before, this is an excellent story with amazing plot twists. But its hard to read with all the errors. I want to read it through to the end but it gets harder each chapter. Ive spent more time trying to work out what you mean than what is actually written. If i knew the process of becoming a Beta i would volunteer myself as your story is not getting the attention it deserves. Please take this into consideration when you update.
I started reading this last year, forgot about it as you do when waiting for updates. I got further this time and although im still enjoying the story, im getting increasingly frustrated by the errors in it. Words are wrong, names are wrong, missing words and misplaced words, errors that are really pulling your story down. I cant work out if English isnt your main language or not, but please please get it rewritten with a Beta. As i said before, this is an excellent story with amazing plot twists. But its hard to read with all the errors. I want to read it through to the end but it gets harder each chapter. Ive spent more time trying to work out what you mean than what is actually written. If i knew the process of becoming a Beta i would volunteer myself as your story is not getting the attention it deserves. Please take this into consideration when you update.
6/18 c1 paulritter928
why must a LGBT view be snuck into a story just come out and say it in the description! if nobody reads it then leave it. having harry potter sexually assaulted in the begining of the first chapter of the story. even JKR kept harry straight she admitted dumbledore was gay. some people are just sick
why must a LGBT view be snuck into a story just come out and say it in the description! if nobody reads it then leave it. having harry potter sexually assaulted in the begining of the first chapter of the story. even JKR kept harry straight she admitted dumbledore was gay. some people are just sick
12/30/2022 c65 
1bella Damon and klaus
how old is harry supposed to be in this story,I thought the ages were different
1bella Damon and klaushow old is harry supposed to be in this story,I thought the ages were different
8/16/2022 c1 Guest
this is dumb and would never happen
this is dumb and would never happen
8/15/2022 c67 ShyPandaTrash
Ok question this is my second reading and I almost forgot how inconsistent Harry's and the other's age's are. Is he Seventeen or Fourteen.
Someone please tell me so I have a proper timeline!
Ok question this is my second reading and I almost forgot how inconsistent Harry's and the other's age's are. Is he Seventeen or Fourteen.
Someone please tell me so I have a proper timeline!
4/16/2022 c110 Myrashae
thank you for writing such a great story. I look forward to seeing how it ends. I think the relationships between the main characters is well thought out and executed.. I also like the fact that although Dumbledore's death is a major climax in the story the aftermath is still interesting and holds my focus. all that said I do have couple of things to point out that took away for a great story. I don't know you have a beta or not but you really need one for spelling grammatical errors as was a consistency. for example Harry age has been all over the place in this chapter you have home starting Hogwarts at 13 but then a couple of sentences later you talk about second year and him being 12. sometimes you have as 16/17 but others he is 15/16. you also changed Molly's middle name half way through. I do offer my services as a beta if you are interested in go back fixing these mistakes.
looking forward to your next installment.
'razur
thank you for writing such a great story. I look forward to seeing how it ends. I think the relationships between the main characters is well thought out and executed.. I also like the fact that although Dumbledore's death is a major climax in the story the aftermath is still interesting and holds my focus. all that said I do have couple of things to point out that took away for a great story. I don't know you have a beta or not but you really need one for spelling grammatical errors as was a consistency. for example Harry age has been all over the place in this chapter you have home starting Hogwarts at 13 but then a couple of sentences later you talk about second year and him being 12. sometimes you have as 16/17 but others he is 15/16. you also changed Molly's middle name half way through. I do offer my services as a beta if you are interested in go back fixing these mistakes.
looking forward to your next installment.
'razur
4/15/2022 c1 PixiefiedMagic
Please understand that this is constructive criticism, in your profile it states that you are 18 and in Uni. So if this started in 2012, you must be at least 28 now. Ok, your spelling is atrocious, it really detracts from the story and has me stopping and starting as I try to get the gist of the sentence. You really really need to get a Beta or proofreader as this is an excellent story. The plot is brilliant, the twists are really well thought out and fast paced. You include minor characters and give them a bigger role than J K did which is really thought provoking and I’m really enjoying your story. The only thing that lets it down is the spelling and grammar which just stops it being a Fanfic classic and that’s really a shame. However I’m looking forward to seeing where this goes as it’s obvious that you still have a lot planned and I’ll be along for the ride.
Please understand that this is constructive criticism, in your profile it states that you are 18 and in Uni. So if this started in 2012, you must be at least 28 now. Ok, your spelling is atrocious, it really detracts from the story and has me stopping and starting as I try to get the gist of the sentence. You really really need to get a Beta or proofreader as this is an excellent story. The plot is brilliant, the twists are really well thought out and fast paced. You include minor characters and give them a bigger role than J K did which is really thought provoking and I’m really enjoying your story. The only thing that lets it down is the spelling and grammar which just stops it being a Fanfic classic and that’s really a shame. However I’m looking forward to seeing where this goes as it’s obvious that you still have a lot planned and I’ll be along for the ride.
4/9/2022 c110 NightAngel99
There are several typos within this chapter. Some are misspelling and some have the wrong name or age. I do like how things are going and I look forward to the next chapter.
There are several typos within this chapter. Some are misspelling and some have the wrong name or age. I do like how things are going and I look forward to the next chapter.