for That Clicking Noise Machines Make1/22/2013 c4 
17taco's bell
I loved it! Unfortunately, I don't have much thoughtful commentary, sorry. It's just, I came from your Darcy story, and then I saw this, and yeah, I really really like this. Update soon, and thanks for sharing!
17taco's bellI loved it! Unfortunately, I don't have much thoughtful commentary, sorry. It's just, I came from your Darcy story, and then I saw this, and yeah, I really really like this. Update soon, and thanks for sharing!
5/7/2012 c4 45servantofclio
There should definitely be more Lynn and EDI talking in the future, because the possibilities for mortifying Joker are just too good.
45servantofclioThere should definitely be more Lynn and EDI talking in the future, because the possibilities for mortifying Joker are just too good.
5/7/2012 c4 birdymain
=D
=D
5/6/2012 c4 liad
Yes! Glad to see you continue! Interesting brother and sister interaction. Lol siblings are meant to embarrass each other. Mmm... she was close to talking to Garrus.
Yes! Glad to see you continue! Interesting brother and sister interaction. Lol siblings are meant to embarrass each other. Mmm... she was close to talking to Garrus.
4/12/2012 c3 Red Dame
Awesome story you have going! I like the clarification as to why your character was there. Can't wait to see the future situations to come. I just loved how you wrote the characters interaction.
Awesome story you have going! I like the clarification as to why your character was there. Can't wait to see the future situations to come. I just loved how you wrote the characters interaction.
4/11/2012 c3 servantofclio
I think in this chapter it's generally clear from context who's talking (plus, if the characters' voices are distinct enough, it's easy to tell). I like that she has spine enough to tell them off.
I think in this chapter it's generally clear from context who's talking (plus, if the characters' voices are distinct enough, it's easy to tell). I like that she has spine enough to tell them off.
4/10/2012 c2 Turian fan3
I'm enjoying this so far it's well composed, and while that may not seem like the best praise it's one of the things I look for the most :D I would be ever so grateful if you kept updating the story as I am eager to see how things turn out.
p.s. Happy birthday
I'm enjoying this so far it's well composed, and while that may not seem like the best praise it's one of the things I look for the most :D I would be ever so grateful if you kept updating the story as I am eager to see how things turn out.
p.s. Happy birthday
4/9/2012 c2 servantofclio
Well, I'd say so far your lead character is quite likable. It'll be interesting to see how she fits in with the rest of the crew. I think this is a good start.
Well, I'd say so far your lead character is quite likable. It'll be interesting to see how she fits in with the rest of the crew. I think this is a good start.
4/8/2012 c2 Red Dame
First off Happy Late Birhtday!
I like the pace of your story so far. It isn't too rushed and I feel this character will be written well. I know I wouldn't want to read a Shepard-like OC. That would be redundant. So I look forward to another chapter and see where you will take this.
I know you have the right idea for your character. Keep it up!
First off Happy Late Birhtday!
I like the pace of your story so far. It isn't too rushed and I feel this character will be written well. I know I wouldn't want to read a Shepard-like OC. That would be redundant. So I look forward to another chapter and see where you will take this.
I know you have the right idea for your character. Keep it up!