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4/11/2016 c1 Dino-Rogue
Aww, poor Zack! Maya did hurt him pretty badly when she broke up with him in Graduation On Deck. But ah, this song was perfect for the piece. Which, by the way, is very lovely.

I am, however, going to have to disagree with you on one thing. Maya may be Zack's first real, longterm love/girlfriend, but in no way is she the first woman he cared about. Just wanted to get that one out there... :)
7/8/2013 c1 Sparklediva
love this story drama
4/19/2012 c1 6owlhero
I love this story. There's a dream and a touch of fantasy horror in it. I almost thought it was dream until about halfway through.

It amamzing how you tranferred Zack's lost and guilt into the worst possible nightmare for him. How his memories became twisted and turned his worst qualities against him.

The lyrics counteract with Maya's spirit, mocking Zack down to his very soul. Its amazing how a classic song correlates to today.

The lightning quick environmental change was frightening.

The synbolism is pretty good as well with the forest being an echo of Zack's mind and his loneliness. As his mind was maybe trying to tell him something.

The elements in the story such as imagery, the chnage in color to further Zack's mental state, description were not overdone. There's not much that can be improved upon what you had already.
4/16/2012 c1 tiger
Whoa...fasinating. this is good, the song really set thr mood, even if the lyrics didnt exactly fit it. The imagry was solid, just the right amout of creeiness, and perhaps a look into Zack's mind as well. Great job!

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