for Pokemon: Heated Relations6/5/2013 c1 lolz
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4/18/2012 c1 
1Nauran
Tsk tsk tsk... Ixnay the OCs and you'd have something a LOT of people would enjoy reading.
Then again, the way you write isn't too fun to read right now anyway. Your style is really bland.
It's just one line after another with absolutely no substance. Fill some paragraphs in. Describe the scene, the characters, their feelings, the environment. Let us feel what the characters are feeling, instead of writing "this happened, then this, and then...". You get what I mean.
Hope I was helpful... Who am I kidding? Of COURSE I was helpful!
1NauranTsk tsk tsk... Ixnay the OCs and you'd have something a LOT of people would enjoy reading.
Then again, the way you write isn't too fun to read right now anyway. Your style is really bland.
It's just one line after another with absolutely no substance. Fill some paragraphs in. Describe the scene, the characters, their feelings, the environment. Let us feel what the characters are feeling, instead of writing "this happened, then this, and then...". You get what I mean.
Hope I was helpful... Who am I kidding? Of COURSE I was helpful!