for Happy Filthy7/24/2015 c2 
10Alaster Boneman
not a bad chapter but some times your gramma and wording a little of but considering how rushed you said this chapter was im not surprised. also that bit with Gendry thinking about what might happen to ayra if something were to happen to him was very well done although the torture seen he imagined was a bit confusing.
I hope you don't put a love triangle in this, I really dis like love triangles.
Yours Alaster Boneman
10Alaster Bonemannot a bad chapter but some times your gramma and wording a little of but considering how rushed you said this chapter was im not surprised. also that bit with Gendry thinking about what might happen to ayra if something were to happen to him was very well done although the torture seen he imagined was a bit confusing.
I hope you don't put a love triangle in this, I really dis like love triangles.
Yours Alaster Boneman
7/24/2015 c1 Alaster Boneman
this was an alright start to the fan fiction and an interesting take on the wolf packs (aka Ayra, Gendry and hot pie) Journey to Harrenhal I like the seen were the three work together to help the horse its sometimes hard to remember the kindness and compassion that use to live with in her heart before well every started dyeing around her.
their were some very nice character moments in this. and I am interested in were you go with this.
however their is a slight flaw and that is this chapter is a little crowed in the paragraph's. like some times you have two character speck with in the same sent age or the spacing leaves makes it confusing to some times know who is speaking and when.
other wise a good start.
Yours Alaster Boneman
this was an alright start to the fan fiction and an interesting take on the wolf packs (aka Ayra, Gendry and hot pie) Journey to Harrenhal I like the seen were the three work together to help the horse its sometimes hard to remember the kindness and compassion that use to live with in her heart before well every started dyeing around her.
their were some very nice character moments in this. and I am interested in were you go with this.
however their is a slight flaw and that is this chapter is a little crowed in the paragraph's. like some times you have two character speck with in the same sent age or the spacing leaves makes it confusing to some times know who is speaking and when.
other wise a good start.
Yours Alaster Boneman
6/6/2013 c3 1Shrilaraune
Where is the next chapter? Despite the mistakes and misusage here and there, I've actually quite enjoyed this. Stylistically you are fine, it's just little things that you need at this point. A beta would serve you quite well. Keep it up.
1ShrilarauneWhere is the next chapter? Despite the mistakes and misusage here and there, I've actually quite enjoyed this. Stylistically you are fine, it's just little things that you need at this point. A beta would serve you quite well. Keep it up.
3/1/2013 c2 21YouFoundMeAgainXx
i love this.
Well you've got me, and hey, when winter does come, we can always eat Hot Pie.
omg what a line! amazing!
21YouFoundMeAgainXxi love this.
Well you've got me, and hey, when winter does come, we can always eat Hot Pie.
omg what a line! amazing!
11/28/2012 c3 Pandi007
Hi, really enjoying this story- I like how dark the last chapter was, and that arya has stayed in character, not just jumped into G's arms for the sake of a quick romance, but is building... Hope to read more soon! Thanks!
Hi, really enjoying this story- I like how dark the last chapter was, and that arya has stayed in character, not just jumped into G's arms for the sake of a quick romance, but is building... Hope to read more soon! Thanks!
10/21/2012 c3 13nox-alatus
I'm curious as to where this is going. This chapter, though it had its moments, had a darker tone than the other two. Hmm... gotta wonder why Arya withdrew from Gendry. And he started the wolf, so cute. Can't wait another update :)
13nox-alatusI'm curious as to where this is going. This chapter, though it had its moments, had a darker tone than the other two. Hmm... gotta wonder why Arya withdrew from Gendry. And he started the wolf, so cute. Can't wait another update :)
10/21/2012 c2 nox-alatus
"And in the mean time, you've got me and Hot Pie." Then he stopped, "Well you've got me, and hey, when winter does come we can always eat Hot Pie."
Best. Line. Ever.
I normally don't get into Gendry/Arya friendship fics, but this one is super cute. I like it a lot. :)
"And in the mean time, you've got me and Hot Pie." Then he stopped, "Well you've got me, and hey, when winter does come we can always eat Hot Pie."
Best. Line. Ever.
I normally don't get into Gendry/Arya friendship fics, but this one is super cute. I like it a lot. :)
10/14/2012 c1 Guest
I'm so glad you updated this story. Please keep updating (more regularly) so I can see how it all unfolds.
I'm so glad you updated this story. Please keep updating (more regularly) so I can see how it all unfolds.
10/4/2012 c3 Krizz
I like this, and hope for more :)
I like this, and hope for more :)
10/4/2012 c3 1mnemosneme
Well... I really like the story, but as I didn't see the secod season of the show everything looks strange to me (in my mind cannon is book cannon), but I guess it's not so different.
I like the one sidedness and don't see Veleth as a dull character, still I think that given the context of the story, se shouldn't be able so keep her childhood or good luck... The only thing I can criticize is that Arya is a cupbearer. Shouldn't she be a little bit cleaner?
On the whole, I really liked this story and will be waiting for the next chapter! Thanks!
1mnemosnemeWell... I really like the story, but as I didn't see the secod season of the show everything looks strange to me (in my mind cannon is book cannon), but I guess it's not so different.
I like the one sidedness and don't see Veleth as a dull character, still I think that given the context of the story, se shouldn't be able so keep her childhood or good luck... The only thing I can criticize is that Arya is a cupbearer. Shouldn't she be a little bit cleaner?
On the whole, I really liked this story and will be waiting for the next chapter! Thanks!
7/31/2012 c2 whatsgucci
i thought it flowed alright. though i worry about where this is going. it's a bit cliche right now, with jealousy and protectiveness and denial. though i can hardly call Arya a cliche.
i thought it flowed alright. though i worry about where this is going. it's a bit cliche right now, with jealousy and protectiveness and denial. though i can hardly call Arya a cliche.