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dirty blond hair.
HOLY SHIT! THAT'S MY ACTUAL HAIR COLOR!
dirty blond hair.
HOLY SHIT! THAT'S MY ACTUAL HAIR COLOR!
9/10/2014 c1 Patrick
Just found out that you make not next chapter in 2 f#%$n gears
Just found out that you make not next chapter in 2 f#%$n gears
8/31/2014 c2 Patrick
Please make more chapters
Please make more chapters
8/31/2014 c1 Patrick
Please make next chapter and make this six and kat love fanfiction
Please make next chapter and make this six and kat love fanfiction
7/29/2014 c2 Spartan552
Nice true kat survived or should have. The armor could the needle down. It's no more than loosing an eye which true is still painful but she's a spartan the augmentations were worse
(So I like halo I'm not alone) so good job you. Need to make another chapter
Nice true kat survived or should have. The armor could the needle down. It's no more than loosing an eye which true is still painful but she's a spartan the augmentations were worse
(So I like halo I'm not alone) so good job you. Need to make another chapter
3/23/2014 c2 shadowstorm254
awsome first two
MAKE MORE !
awsome first two
MAKE MORE !
5/30/2013 c2 Shadowofdarkness
Hey cool nice and yes it is called a needle rifle (actually needle rifler) loved the story keep going
Hey cool nice and yes it is called a needle rifle (actually needle rifler) loved the story keep going
2/17/2013 c1 
21KtyouVsWriting
This story got me confused from the start. So, Kat just miraculously survived?
21KtyouVsWritingThis story got me confused from the start. So, Kat just miraculously survived?
12/16/2012 c1 coolcat3002002
hi again excellent work sharkie!
Not trying to be rude or anything but ayane458 I am shark's sister and it is actually her story NOT yours . I apologize if this is rude or offensive in any way at all!
wibble goose bums, a raT
hi again excellent work sharkie!
Not trying to be rude or anything but ayane458 I am shark's sister and it is actually her story NOT yours . I apologize if this is rude or offensive in any way at all!
wibble goose bums, a raT
5/29/2012 c1 Glass5775
I thought it was pretty good, but I just didn't feel like you gave the whole story. And in all of the campaign missions, Kat never used a sniper rifle. Jun was the only sniper in the group, not necessarily counting noble- six.
I thought it was pretty good, but I just didn't feel like you gave the whole story. And in all of the campaign missions, Kat never used a sniper rifle. Jun was the only sniper in the group, not necessarily counting noble- six.
4/22/2012 c1 9Cima1305
This is interesting! I hope Kat's got a good story to tell! And yeah, I agree with the above review. It's wouldn't be that hard for her to get a sniper rifle from the other marines or dead Spartan II's. Six's potty mouth is also a little jarring, but it's cool as long as you don't overdo it. Hope to see more soon!
9Cima1305This is interesting! I hope Kat's got a good story to tell! And yeah, I agree with the above review. It's wouldn't be that hard for her to get a sniper rifle from the other marines or dead Spartan II's. Six's potty mouth is also a little jarring, but it's cool as long as you don't overdo it. Hope to see more soon!
4/20/2012 c1 14Ayane458
Hey, Shark! (I'm just gonna call you that, it takes to long to spell out your 'full' name.
First thing I'd like to talk about is the summary and title. Title's good, nice and simple, but I would suggest capitalising the first letters, like 'Beyond Lone Wolf'. It's a presentation thing. It just makes everything look prettier.
And summary. You've made a big mistake with yours -it's just your A/N and it sounds like your defensive about the quality of your story, which makes potential readers think there's something to /be/ defensive about. I would suggest changing it to something more relevant to the story, and probably add an 'AU where Noble Team lives' or some such thing.
On to the story itself. The first chapter is indeed very short, which is probably made worse by the long A/Ns -there's nothing particularly wrong with the A/Ns, it's just that when they're about the length of a third of the chapter... well, it looks shorter.
By fanfic standards, I must say you're quite good with syntax etc. Unlike some stories I've read, you seem to have a handle on basic grammar and I don't believe I saw a single spelling mistake. However, I suggest you read over your work -there are a few errors with tense, especially. For example,
'Their plasma rifles trying to wear down my armour but luckily it didn't because I was rolling and ducking away from their weak energy fire.'
'trying' should be 'tried'.
You could also take out a few unnecessary things -'blue or should I say black sky' could be just 'black sky' and the effect would be much neater. I would also suggest you remove some of the ... from Six's last speech, as it flows better and readers aren't constantly having to add pauses when they read.
Also, there's no need to worry about Kat having a sniper, really. You might want to mention it in passing like you did at the end, but no need to make a big enough deal of it to mention it twice in the A/N and summary -Kat's a Spartan. She's trained in every weapon, and that means that if she thinks she needs a sniper rifle she'll use one.
Overall, it's reasonably interesting, but a little spit 'n' polish would make it a lot more attractive.
Any questions, just PM me.
Good luck!
14Ayane458Hey, Shark! (I'm just gonna call you that, it takes to long to spell out your 'full' name.
First thing I'd like to talk about is the summary and title. Title's good, nice and simple, but I would suggest capitalising the first letters, like 'Beyond Lone Wolf'. It's a presentation thing. It just makes everything look prettier.
And summary. You've made a big mistake with yours -it's just your A/N and it sounds like your defensive about the quality of your story, which makes potential readers think there's something to /be/ defensive about. I would suggest changing it to something more relevant to the story, and probably add an 'AU where Noble Team lives' or some such thing.
On to the story itself. The first chapter is indeed very short, which is probably made worse by the long A/Ns -there's nothing particularly wrong with the A/Ns, it's just that when they're about the length of a third of the chapter... well, it looks shorter.
By fanfic standards, I must say you're quite good with syntax etc. Unlike some stories I've read, you seem to have a handle on basic grammar and I don't believe I saw a single spelling mistake. However, I suggest you read over your work -there are a few errors with tense, especially. For example,
'Their plasma rifles trying to wear down my armour but luckily it didn't because I was rolling and ducking away from their weak energy fire.'
'trying' should be 'tried'.
You could also take out a few unnecessary things -'blue or should I say black sky' could be just 'black sky' and the effect would be much neater. I would also suggest you remove some of the ... from Six's last speech, as it flows better and readers aren't constantly having to add pauses when they read.
Also, there's no need to worry about Kat having a sniper, really. You might want to mention it in passing like you did at the end, but no need to make a big enough deal of it to mention it twice in the A/N and summary -Kat's a Spartan. She's trained in every weapon, and that means that if she thinks she needs a sniper rifle she'll use one.
Overall, it's reasonably interesting, but a little spit 'n' polish would make it a lot more attractive.
Any questions, just PM me.
Good luck!