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8/21/2012 c48 Suz
I am not sure if you are the type to like genuine critical feedback, but here goes... I enjoyed the story, it was an interesting take on their relationship. I thought some of the characters were a little 2 dimensional, but the main issue that impaired my total enjoyment was the very high number of grammatical errors. Not only spelling mistakes, but words that spellcheck wouldn't catch, like quite and quiet, or assessed and accessed being used incorrectly. Your writing would benefit a lot from getting yourself a good Beta reader. There were also quite a large number of words used out of context. It seemed like you were trying to mix it up and expand the vocabulary, which is great, but quite often the word didn't mean what you intended. Keep the dictionary handy and keep it up! Thought the story ended at an odd time, but will assume you are planning a sequel for this story too. Thanks for writing.
8/22/2012 c48 1CTBabe1202
Amanda-

Thanks for sharing this beautiful story- I waited until it was complete before I began to read and I was not disappointed. The love the flows though your characters comes though the chapters you write, and I found myself staying up very late to read just one more chapter. I fell like the ending was abrupt- but I am hoping that means at some point you will give us a sequel that will let us know who is after Carlos and what happens the beautiful couple. I look forward to your next story.

Thanks,

Renee
8/21/2012 c48 1eppie12
Lovely chapter Amanda. I'm just so sorry to see the story end.
8/19/2012 c48 M
hey love ur story

at the end of what does it mean to trust steph was shot is she goin die
squeal names what does it mean to live, what does it mean to love, what does it mean to fight for who you love
8/20/2012 c48 62Karren
NOOOOOOO its over! WAAAAAAA!

But i loved every minute of it and i do want to know who was shooting at "Ranger" and i want to see Ram get his collar lol . You did a very good job on this story and i cant wait to read your sequel when you start it!

GREAT JOB!
8/19/2012 c48 ellliemae789
I really enjoyed this story and I cant wait to read your stories in the future.
8/19/2012 c48 BabeCakeLvr
Great story and ending...rhinestone collar! bravo
8/17/2012 c48 bgrgrmpy
AACK! we will find out who is after everyone right? an epilogue?another story? good story and so glad Steph, Ranger and the guys found each other.
8/17/2012 c48 Guest
Wonderful story I really enjoyed it
8/17/2012 c48 Crystal
This was such a great story. Thank you for sharing with us!
8/19/2012 c48 3abigail03
I have very much enjoyed this story! I am sad to see it come o an end but know that all good things usually do. :) maybe, you will write a continuation or sequal sometime. I would love to hear when Steph receives the collar and gives it o Ram, lol.
8/18/2012 c48 Atlanta Babe
I hope you left the the hit on Carlos and the possible new Rangeman client unresolved so that you can write a sequel to this story! Great job, I hate to see the story end, for now..hint, hint.
8/17/2012 c48 susangw
Loved this story. Looking forward to what you post next.
8/17/2012 c48 deviates322
Fabulous story! I loved Carlos and Steph in this story. I'm looking forward to more from you in the near future :) Liz
8/17/2012 c48 jbabe
Loved it from beginning to end. Thank you!
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