for Opening of Closed Hearts
241/20/2021 c10 Sonia Hdz Q
Do you know something? I just been reading this story since yesterday night, and today, 9 hours late, I can let it go, I'm not sleep nothing, I can stop my self. It's that good. Congratulation
Do you know something? I just been reading this story since yesterday night, and today, 9 hours late, I can let it go, I'm not sleep nothing, I can stop my self. It's that good. Congratulation
11/16/2020 c48 KellyGirl
Amanda, I enjoyed this the second time just as much as the first! It was a great plot with great character development. Sure people are gonna give you a hard time on the grammar, but there’s no debating your gift for story telling. Thanks again for this. Please keep writing. Please think about writing more of this fanfic for us, if real life permits. Be well!
Amanda, I enjoyed this the second time just as much as the first! It was a great plot with great character development. Sure people are gonna give you a hard time on the grammar, but there’s no debating your gift for story telling. Thanks again for this. Please keep writing. Please think about writing more of this fanfic for us, if real life permits. Be well!
1/22/2020 c48 Tommy14
I just finished rereading this story and enjoyed it as much as the first time I read it. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I just finished rereading this story and enjoyed it as much as the first time I read it. Thank you for sharing this with us.
8/25/2019 c48 Guest
acceptable · trustworthy · reliable · dependable · sure · good · valid · feasible · viable · tenable · sustainable · maintainable
believable · plausible · able to hold water · within the bounds of possibility · reasonable · sound · compelling · persuasive · suasive · assuasive · verisimilar
Parts of this story were all these variations of Credible. Some stuck out as very much not along any of these lines. The whole character of Bobby fell short when he was made to be a medic with super powers of anything medical. Medics are EMT's. Not nurses or doctors or physical therapists. With everything else he was doing and allowed to do, it's more surprising that he didn't run the image scanning machines, too.
I read up until Ranger asked Stephanie to move in with him after only knowing her for a super short period of time.
There were, also, a great many monsters in this story that had to be controlled by super internal powers of those in charge of keeping them under lock and key. Was this supposed to be a fantasy story?
Be careful of your word choices. There were words used that mean something completely different than what you had intended.
You repeated things and the story was very drawn out.
Oh, I nearly forgot. Refrain from using actual dates and years (numbers) in your stories. It makes them more adaptable to today and yesterday. Remember, JE had book 1 published in 1994 and the characters (main) were in their thirty-something years already. She doesn't put actual years in her stories, but includes the technology of the time (which dates the stories). Just some suggestions, years after you wrote this. I hope you are still out there writing and learning.
acceptable · trustworthy · reliable · dependable · sure · good · valid · feasible · viable · tenable · sustainable · maintainable
believable · plausible · able to hold water · within the bounds of possibility · reasonable · sound · compelling · persuasive · suasive · assuasive · verisimilar
Parts of this story were all these variations of Credible. Some stuck out as very much not along any of these lines. The whole character of Bobby fell short when he was made to be a medic with super powers of anything medical. Medics are EMT's. Not nurses or doctors or physical therapists. With everything else he was doing and allowed to do, it's more surprising that he didn't run the image scanning machines, too.
I read up until Ranger asked Stephanie to move in with him after only knowing her for a super short period of time.
There were, also, a great many monsters in this story that had to be controlled by super internal powers of those in charge of keeping them under lock and key. Was this supposed to be a fantasy story?
Be careful of your word choices. There were words used that mean something completely different than what you had intended.
You repeated things and the story was very drawn out.
Oh, I nearly forgot. Refrain from using actual dates and years (numbers) in your stories. It makes them more adaptable to today and yesterday. Remember, JE had book 1 published in 1994 and the characters (main) were in their thirty-something years already. She doesn't put actual years in her stories, but includes the technology of the time (which dates the stories). Just some suggestions, years after you wrote this. I hope you are still out there writing and learning.
8/25/2019 c23 third time
baron
[ˈberən]
NOUN
a member of the lowest order of the British nobility. The term “Baron” is not used as a form of address in Britain, barons usually being referred to as “Lord.”.
synonyms:
noble · nobleman · aristocrat · peer · lord
a member of a foreign nobility having a rank similar to that of a baron.
historical
a person who held lands or property from the sovereign or a powerful overlord.
synonyms:
ruler · sovereign · lord · overlord · dynast · leader · monarch · [more]
an important or powerful person in a specified business or industry.
"a press baron"
synonyms:
magnate · tycoon · mogul · captain of industry · nabob · grandee · mandarin · [more]
baron
[ˈberən]
NOUN
a member of the lowest order of the British nobility. The term “Baron” is not used as a form of address in Britain, barons usually being referred to as “Lord.”.
synonyms:
noble · nobleman · aristocrat · peer · lord
a member of a foreign nobility having a rank similar to that of a baron.
historical
a person who held lands or property from the sovereign or a powerful overlord.
synonyms:
ruler · sovereign · lord · overlord · dynast · leader · monarch · [more]
an important or powerful person in a specified business or industry.
"a press baron"
synonyms:
magnate · tycoon · mogul · captain of industry · nabob · grandee · mandarin · [more]
2/20/2019 c48 tanyaleigh
Loved it! I enjoyed it much better this way than the push pull of her and Joe and Ranger. I'm off to look for the sequel! : )
Loved it! I enjoyed it much better this way than the push pull of her and Joe and Ranger. I'm off to look for the sequel! : )
2/19/2019 c14 tanyaleigh
I admit at first I was struggling with the story because of my preconceived notions of the characters... It was hard to let go and just absorb the story... But, I'm really starting to dig it! Its very well written and flows well.
I admit at first I was struggling with the story because of my preconceived notions of the characters... It was hard to let go and just absorb the story... But, I'm really starting to dig it! Its very well written and flows well.
1/23/2019 c48 Blistful2006
This story was awesome from start to finish. A lot darker for the guys but it’s was perfect
This story was awesome from start to finish. A lot darker for the guys but it’s was perfect