for Goron Boots7/12/2012 c1 
33Running Ninja
Wow, I went into this thinking it was a oneshot, but then Dawn showed up. I was really surprised they just left the temple I'd expect the hero to keep on trucking after a near death experience, but with the goron boots out of commission that's not really an option, so it makes sense, but it might be good to mention that.
Wait, did Link ever get the goron boots off? As soon as they left the temple that's all I was wondering about.
33Running NinjaWow, I went into this thinking it was a oneshot, but then Dawn showed up. I was really surprised they just left the temple I'd expect the hero to keep on trucking after a near death experience, but with the goron boots out of commission that's not really an option, so it makes sense, but it might be good to mention that.
Wait, did Link ever get the goron boots off? As soon as they left the temple that's all I was wondering about.
5/17/2012 c1 aaronautics413
This is a great little piece of fan fiction, I'd love to read more! It's funny to think of Link as a bit of a player. Haha, maybe you imagine yourself as Dawn?
A few notes:
- You described Dawn after she dressed at the inn but never before. I'd like to get more of a sense of this Dawn character before that. What was she wearing? What made her look manly? What was she wearing after she got dressed at the inn that made her look more like a woman?
- Use of parenthesis could be a style choice of yours but commas are usually the accepted grammatical choice for dependent clauses and the like
I liked it, keep writing. You have a clear and interesting voice to your writing that made me want to keep reading, and the fact that it was about Link just made it all the more awesome.
Aaronautics
This is a great little piece of fan fiction, I'd love to read more! It's funny to think of Link as a bit of a player. Haha, maybe you imagine yourself as Dawn?
A few notes:
- You described Dawn after she dressed at the inn but never before. I'd like to get more of a sense of this Dawn character before that. What was she wearing? What made her look manly? What was she wearing after she got dressed at the inn that made her look more like a woman?
- Use of parenthesis could be a style choice of yours but commas are usually the accepted grammatical choice for dependent clauses and the like
I liked it, keep writing. You have a clear and interesting voice to your writing that made me want to keep reading, and the fact that it was about Link just made it all the more awesome.
Aaronautics