for A monster we've created4/28/2012 c1 
7ThalieXVII
I love the psychology in this! All of Patroklos' emotions are well explained and make sense! Very good story!
7ThalieXVIII love the psychology in this! All of Patroklos' emotions are well explained and make sense! Very good story!
4/27/2012 c1 5BlackInkedPen
Hi. I have deep respect with your fics. I'm not sure why this was overlooked and not given reviews. This is really good. I like Patroklos' shifts of emotions as his conscience got hold of him and then, Graf Dumas manipulated him. Then, conscience tried to rise up again in him. Then, the Graf's words waver him again. The transitions are so smooth and natural although the emotions are very contradicting.
I have one particular line in your story that I really like.
"He does not doubt the Graf's words, but perhaps there were innocents hiding within this nest of vipers." Not so sure why. But although it was neither emotional nor explosive, it really struck me. Maybe, it was the play of words.
Also, I love how you portrayed his disgust to the point of nausea after he killed the boy. Anyway, in short, good job!
5BlackInkedPenHi. I have deep respect with your fics. I'm not sure why this was overlooked and not given reviews. This is really good. I like Patroklos' shifts of emotions as his conscience got hold of him and then, Graf Dumas manipulated him. Then, conscience tried to rise up again in him. Then, the Graf's words waver him again. The transitions are so smooth and natural although the emotions are very contradicting.
I have one particular line in your story that I really like.
"He does not doubt the Graf's words, but perhaps there were innocents hiding within this nest of vipers." Not so sure why. But although it was neither emotional nor explosive, it really struck me. Maybe, it was the play of words.
Also, I love how you portrayed his disgust to the point of nausea after he killed the boy. Anyway, in short, good job!