for My Lover?6/12/2012 c3 
3PunkKaworu
Girl, you need to punctuate!
You misspled words like write and again and you dont put apostrphey need to indent, because the words are all jambled. And most of all, YOU NEED TO USE COMMAS!
3PunkKaworuGirl, you need to punctuate!
You misspled words like write and again and you dont put apostrphey need to indent, because the words are all jambled. And most of all, YOU NEED TO USE COMMAS!
5/6/2012 c1 2xXSlaytonMalfoyXx
It's cute but got some constructive criticism:
- put the story into paragraphs so it's not in a block, it makes it easier to not lose your point while reading =){trust me, I got this same review before so don't feel bad xD}
- also, try using ' for the thoughts and the " for sayings. and give some more info to not make the story so rushed =)
/Anyways! Cute story, on alert now~
2xXSlaytonMalfoyXxIt's cute but got some constructive criticism:
- put the story into paragraphs so it's not in a block, it makes it easier to not lose your point while reading =){trust me, I got this same review before so don't feel bad xD}
- also, try using ' for the thoughts and the " for sayings. and give some more info to not make the story so rushed =)
/Anyways! Cute story, on alert now~