for Danny Phantom A tick in time5/24/2012 c1 
63Oak Leaf Ninja
Heya! Welcome to ff! A few pointers:
1.Danny would NEVER reveal his secret right on the spot to some random chick.
2.Smaller paragraphs. They help.
3.I sense a Mary Sue...
But minus a few other things, GREAT JOB FOR YOUR FIRST STORY! It takes a lot of guts to post things on FF! Hope to see more from ya soon!
63Oak Leaf NinjaHeya! Welcome to ff! A few pointers:
1.Danny would NEVER reveal his secret right on the spot to some random chick.
2.Smaller paragraphs. They help.
3.I sense a Mary Sue...
But minus a few other things, GREAT JOB FOR YOUR FIRST STORY! It takes a lot of guts to post things on FF! Hope to see more from ya soon!
5/24/2012 c1 1c3llar door
Meh, Danny would never go up to some random girl and go. "Oh BTW, I'm Danny Phantom"
1c3llar doorMeh, Danny would never go up to some random girl and go. "Oh BTW, I'm Danny Phantom"