for The Last Pirate3/18/2017 c1 Guest
Great story! Maybe book III ?
Great story! Maybe book III ?
3/1/2016 c8 Guest
It was a good story. I liked it. It would have been nice to see a flashback of Marcus the father. With the Skyland fics that have Marcus as a character, I mainly see him as Marcus the hero, or Marcus Mila's "husband" (were they married? I don't think it specified). It would have been interesting to see Marcus with his kids before he disappeared. Something small, like him playing with little Mahad or him holding baby Lena. Anyway, I am just blabbering. Still loved it!
It was a good story. I liked it. It would have been nice to see a flashback of Marcus the father. With the Skyland fics that have Marcus as a character, I mainly see him as Marcus the hero, or Marcus Mila's "husband" (were they married? I don't think it specified). It would have been interesting to see Marcus with his kids before he disappeared. Something small, like him playing with little Mahad or him holding baby Lena. Anyway, I am just blabbering. Still loved it!
4/28/2013 c8 Guest
I lived it although it was kind of sad!
I lived it although it was kind of sad!
10/24/2012 c8 westernlady
Great Job, I can acually see the characters, from the calm Mila, to the grumpy Cortes, to the wise Vector. I know I couldn't do so well. (yes, I'm working on an Apache Shadow seijin code talker) Bravo!
Great Job, I can acually see the characters, from the calm Mila, to the grumpy Cortes, to the wise Vector. I know I couldn't do so well. (yes, I'm working on an Apache Shadow seijin code talker) Bravo!
7/26/2012 c5 
93hyperpsychomaniac
So just FYI the first 'guest' review was me and for some reason I hadn't logged in. But anyway... :/
This is getting good. I like that you had Mila visiting puerto angel and then going back to Babylonia afterwards, and that it was not so much her idea as 'well this is for the best.' I did have slight issues with her running off and hiding on her own accord when the rebellion fell apart, but if like you had it in this fic had been the case I would probably be more sympathetic.
The only thing I think you could have done a bit better was a bit more detail in the pirates dislike for her. Maybe someone actually confronting her rather than them all just giving sidelong glances. On this same note, I think Cortes would be a bit more than his usual grumpy self (although I did enjoy mahad picking on him ). If the rebellions downfall was as bad as you've described then I would expect him to be closer to shattered than grumpy. I'd also expect him to have a few choice words to say about Marcus.
Asides from that I am really enjoying and definitely intend to keep on reading. :)
93hyperpsychomaniacSo just FYI the first 'guest' review was me and for some reason I hadn't logged in. But anyway... :/
This is getting good. I like that you had Mila visiting puerto angel and then going back to Babylonia afterwards, and that it was not so much her idea as 'well this is for the best.' I did have slight issues with her running off and hiding on her own accord when the rebellion fell apart, but if like you had it in this fic had been the case I would probably be more sympathetic.
The only thing I think you could have done a bit better was a bit more detail in the pirates dislike for her. Maybe someone actually confronting her rather than them all just giving sidelong glances. On this same note, I think Cortes would be a bit more than his usual grumpy self (although I did enjoy mahad picking on him ). If the rebellions downfall was as bad as you've described then I would expect him to be closer to shattered than grumpy. I'd also expect him to have a few choice words to say about Marcus.
Asides from that I am really enjoying and definitely intend to keep on reading. :)
7/17/2012 c4 Guest
sweet chapter!
sweet chapter!
6/1/2012 c1 40Kunaigirl
Finally found some time to review. Though I was afraid to read the story (because I was afraid it would switch to Lena and Mahad ") I think it's a pretty good one. Like always are the descriptions amazing and it just explains a lot that's left open by the series themselves. Yup, I cannot wait to read more of your work. XD
40KunaigirlFinally found some time to review. Though I was afraid to read the story (because I was afraid it would switch to Lena and Mahad ") I think it's a pretty good one. Like always are the descriptions amazing and it just explains a lot that's left open by the series themselves. Yup, I cannot wait to read more of your work. XD
5/28/2012 c1 Guest
So I finally ended up reading some fanfic... XD this was quite good. I particularly like how you hinted at mila having suspicions about how her parents died when she was young. Also enjoyed the bit about the boomerang. Yes, that definitely sounds like something a father might give his son a little too early... Especially if Marcus was anything like mahad. XD
I hope you plan to put some stuff in about how the other rebels react to the rebellion failing. Would be good to see more perspectives. ;)
So I finally ended up reading some fanfic... XD this was quite good. I particularly like how you hinted at mila having suspicions about how her parents died when she was young. Also enjoyed the bit about the boomerang. Yes, that definitely sounds like something a father might give his son a little too early... Especially if Marcus was anything like mahad. XD
I hope you plan to put some stuff in about how the other rebels react to the rebellion failing. Would be good to see more perspectives. ;)