for Are you leaving me?3/28/2016 c26 Danielle
Oh poor Gale. they should be happy together. Althought it was a great story can't wait to read more.
Oh poor Gale. they should be happy together. Althought it was a great story can't wait to read more.
2/24/2016 c20 Guest
MISLED
MISLED
11/28/2015 c58 U will never now
What about Cato clove glimmer and marvel
What about Cato clove glimmer and marvel
8/29/2013 c31 RHI
love CLATO
love CLATO
2/15/2013 c56 
2Haddopa
Yes please do another Prim and Rory chapter. Plus just started reading and love there message names. How they die and then there name. LOL
2HaddopaYes please do another Prim and Rory chapter. Plus just started reading and love there message names. How they die and then there name. LOL
2/8/2013 c1 1Salt the Snail
This is definitly a strange and different concept than any I've seen yet. Seems like a good start, I like it.
1Salt the SnailThis is definitly a strange and different concept than any I've seen yet. Seems like a good start, I like it.
1/27/2013 c58 Grace
I loved it
I loved it
12/28/2012 c1 2DancerForLife1122
I like the idea of this story quite cute and sweet. But I was very confuse as to what was happening in this chapter. I like the idea of the forms but doing two at a time is a bit slow.
2DancerForLife1122I like the idea of this story quite cute and sweet. But I was very confuse as to what was happening in this chapter. I like the idea of the forms but doing two at a time is a bit slow.
9/3/2012 c59 Guest
Cool!
Cool!
8/14/2012 c1 2TheWriterOnFire
This was a really good chapter, and the idea is really unique.
Plot: This idea is truly original. I've never seen anything like it before, and I like it a lot. It kind of like a happy Hunger Games, and I'm interested to see how you carry on with the story.
Writing: The writing her was quite good, it had a nice flow and was descriptive. I do think however that you could have put more emotion into your writing; there was a lot of showing and not telling here if you know what mean. It was also kind of hard to follow your dialogue during the Reaping, since you used a lot of pronouns in sequence. This made it difficult to know which girl or boy was talking since it was just "she" or "he".
Grammar: There were some grammar mistakes here, but not significant ones. Once, you were writing a sentence and has the word "the" then a space and it dropped of into a comma. I know you meant to put a word there, I believe it was when you were describing the process of how things work in the very beginning. Also, the word instead is one word, not in stead.
Enjoyment: I enjoyed this; I wasnt on the edge of my seat, but it was a fun, lighthearted chapter that had a new idea and concept. I think you could have put mores suspense, there was hardly no suspense whatsoever because you basically know that all the character's from the books are going to be Reaped.
Alright, I grant this chapter a...B! With some fixing it could become an A and don't take me wrong, it was really good!
TK
2TheWriterOnFireThis was a really good chapter, and the idea is really unique.
Plot: This idea is truly original. I've never seen anything like it before, and I like it a lot. It kind of like a happy Hunger Games, and I'm interested to see how you carry on with the story.
Writing: The writing her was quite good, it had a nice flow and was descriptive. I do think however that you could have put more emotion into your writing; there was a lot of showing and not telling here if you know what mean. It was also kind of hard to follow your dialogue during the Reaping, since you used a lot of pronouns in sequence. This made it difficult to know which girl or boy was talking since it was just "she" or "he".
Grammar: There were some grammar mistakes here, but not significant ones. Once, you were writing a sentence and has the word "the" then a space and it dropped of into a comma. I know you meant to put a word there, I believe it was when you were describing the process of how things work in the very beginning. Also, the word instead is one word, not in stead.
Enjoyment: I enjoyed this; I wasnt on the edge of my seat, but it was a fun, lighthearted chapter that had a new idea and concept. I think you could have put mores suspense, there was hardly no suspense whatsoever because you basically know that all the character's from the books are going to be Reaped.
Alright, I grant this chapter a...B! With some fixing it could become an A and don't take me wrong, it was really good!
TK
8/14/2012 c1 26District11-Olive
Hey great first chapter! Here is my review for the Game:
Opening: Okay I think this opened up pretty well but I think you could have given a bit more information about what is going on because I still feel kind of confused. But I do like that Peeta and Katniss are together, I am guessing that foreshadows something?
Dialogue: I think that your use of dialogue was good but I wish th\t you would have explained more about the character's thoughts about what was being said. If you know what I mean by that, but otherwise I liked how you used it.
Characters: First off I love how Rue and Prim are friends, that is so cute. I would say that I would like more descriptions of the characters (even though we know them its nice to see those) but I assume that will be included later.
Enjoyment: I really did enjoy this idea and I think it will be interesting to see how this whole thing plays out. I like the idea with the 13 islands which I assume is based off the 13 districts? Well either way I did enjoy reading this :)
26District11-OliveHey great first chapter! Here is my review for the Game:
Opening: Okay I think this opened up pretty well but I think you could have given a bit more information about what is going on because I still feel kind of confused. But I do like that Peeta and Katniss are together, I am guessing that foreshadows something?
Dialogue: I think that your use of dialogue was good but I wish th\t you would have explained more about the character's thoughts about what was being said. If you know what I mean by that, but otherwise I liked how you used it.
Characters: First off I love how Rue and Prim are friends, that is so cute. I would say that I would like more descriptions of the characters (even though we know them its nice to see those) but I assume that will be included later.
Enjoyment: I really did enjoy this idea and I think it will be interesting to see how this whole thing plays out. I like the idea with the 13 islands which I assume is based off the 13 districts? Well either way I did enjoy reading this :)