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9/19/2014 c4 John Smith
Huh, kinda reminds of Clear Vision 5 (or simply Clear Vision in the mobile versions). Its about some idiot who quit his job as a janitor by punching his boss and then looks for a job and end getting rejected by all of them. Then, henfonds sniper rifle which is propably a replica or a toy because it doesn't the same as his first rifle. After several hits he gets a visit by a man in a fedora and the protagonist tries to grab his gun from the pillow only to have him say "looking
for this" instead of trying to hire him he shouted his friend Ron and tries to kill hi (take note he is a mobster not an agent) but they end up killing his nice land lord instead (unlike here where Leo's landlady is like a typical bitch)

Not to mention in the original flash game of Clear Vison w being found by an government agency who'll kill or arrest you if you don't accept their generous offer. Also, this is smilar to the other fic "Beneath the Mask" where Leo became a serial killer and assassin for personal reason not financial.

I'm not saying your story is a rip-off because I actually enjoy it. I'm just pointing out its similarities to other crap i saw. I'm patiently waiting for the next chapter and its almost two years but I understand why you can't update personal shit and all. Keep up the good work.
8/26/2013 c1 Guest
2/23/2013 c7 eddy
im giving you advice on another story and its about bleach (leo a soul reaper and arise normal, she doesnt know about it yet when leo was acting weird, dangerasly wierd). and put some romance in it to if you seen the show you know what i mean about the weird "Hollow leo" arise got scared when she found his body with no heart beat so he wasnt in there at the moment
2/14/2013 c7 eddy
1/27/2013 c7 eddy
still waiting for the next chapter
1/6/2013 c7 eddy
I'm giving you an idea "leo (AKA Agent smile) has to kill a mob boss or a snitch", he has to go undercover or something and give leo some silencer's (I dont know what their call to do a silent kill) for his gun when he kills him. Plus, after a couple of chapters or how long it would be, aeris would fine out and some drama went down like she call the cops or he try's to convince her to not to freak out. I dont have much to say so add stuff to it. It's a cool story
12/30/2012 c6 eddy
this is like the game and movie hitman im just waiting for the next chapter
11/4/2012 c6 PhillGood
I really like this story and the darkness sorrounding it, also I have noticed you have a little difficulty in punctuation and spelling and maybe I could proof-read this for you.

sincerely- :3
7/2/2012 c1 Guest
WHERE IS CHAPTER 4 but the other ones were awsome too
6/21/2012 c2 sweet
Awesome story. Can't wait for the next chapter D
6/20/2012 c2 Amon-Equalist
Not a bad start, although i felt you somewhat rushed the story, for example: how leo decides to become a hitman pretty quickly.

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