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337/4/2012 c1 Guest
So far it's good. But you keep referring to Jane as the "good doctor", Jane is the cop and Maura is the doctor. Also, the first line might be better as, "I had threatened. . .", I'm only suggesting that since the next sentence is "admirable".
Christine
So far it's good. But you keep referring to Jane as the "good doctor", Jane is the cop and Maura is the doctor. Also, the first line might be better as, "I had threatened. . .", I'm only suggesting that since the next sentence is "admirable".
Christine
6/20/2012 c1 Author's Tune
Short but definitely with potential. I look forward to more.
Short but definitely with potential. I look forward to more.