6/30/2012 c1 Guest
Okay I'm going to be honest I think that the way you started the story is a little rushed, maybe you should have started with a more in depth description of their thoughts before the play started, and in the next chapter, or later on in the same chapter the events after the play...just saying, also when writing the thoughts of a person you might want to write them in only italics not bold with italics, it gives the thoughts too much attention, when it's only supposed to differentiate the thoughts from the conversation, nevertheless I really like the plot and I hope you continue this story :) -Lulu