for The Leaf's Naruto10/8 c4 
3Detsella Morningdew
Love this.
Still, "Fuinjutsu: Activate" is a little silly when the canon exclamation is usually "Fuin!" Which just means "Seal."
Or something else along those lines would work. Explosives also have something similarly short. ("Katsu!")
I always had the headcanon that long justu names were said because they took a long time to execute. For a quick activation, it seems silly.
(Unlike some, I don't mind jutsu names. Anime style stuff isn't terrible. I just like keeping them a little more realistic.)
3Detsella MorningdewLove this.
Still, "Fuinjutsu: Activate" is a little silly when the canon exclamation is usually "Fuin!" Which just means "Seal."
Or something else along those lines would work. Explosives also have something similarly short. ("Katsu!")
I always had the headcanon that long justu names were said because they took a long time to execute. For a quick activation, it seems silly.
(Unlike some, I don't mind jutsu names. Anime style stuff isn't terrible. I just like keeping them a little more realistic.)
9/24 c12 Guest
I’m out. This is beyond needlessly complicated and the number of absolutely retarded decisions is staggering. I can’t tolerate the overwhelming stupidity this writer drowns his story in.
I’m out. This is beyond needlessly complicated and the number of absolutely retarded decisions is staggering. I can’t tolerate the overwhelming stupidity this writer drowns his story in.
9/24 c11 Guest
I’m out. Naruto is too fucking stupid. Naruto should never have brought blood any blood near hidan, he knows this, even commented on it, and still did it. Unforgivably stupid and the writer did this for drama. Idiotic writer.
I’m out. Naruto is too fucking stupid. Naruto should never have brought blood any blood near hidan, he knows this, even commented on it, and still did it. Unforgivably stupid and the writer did this for drama. Idiotic writer.
9/10 c23 chattytricks
I've been reading fanfiction for a couple weeks, and I can safely say this is probably my favourite story so far. It is very unfortunate that the author abandoned it though. Still, amazing fanfiction and thank you for writing this for us to enjoy.
I've been reading fanfiction for a couple weeks, and I can safely say this is probably my favourite story so far. It is very unfortunate that the author abandoned it though. Still, amazing fanfiction and thank you for writing this for us to enjoy.
7/22 c23 22AEC1990
I started rereading this a few days ago when I was in the mood for nostalgia and Naruto time travel/redo fic. I hadn’t realized I read this before until I got to the point of Shino. There is so much potential here! There are so many things that are either midmotion or just beginning with this chapter. I wish there were more, but it’s been long enough that this probably won’t ever be complete, and that’s fine. Just wanted to let you know I enjoyed this. Thanks for the years you put into this!
22AEC1990I started rereading this a few days ago when I was in the mood for nostalgia and Naruto time travel/redo fic. I hadn’t realized I read this before until I got to the point of Shino. There is so much potential here! There are so many things that are either midmotion or just beginning with this chapter. I wish there were more, but it’s been long enough that this probably won’t ever be complete, and that’s fine. Just wanted to let you know I enjoyed this. Thanks for the years you put into this!
7/4 c23 natthan.velasquez
To bad that this story will likely never be finish. I knew it would end like this as many other stories do sadly.
To bad that this story will likely never be finish. I knew it would end like this as many other stories do sadly.
1/1 c1 Kurtulmak
This was an excellent story, and I know it's been 8 years since its last chapter and 2 since any other story updated, but I've followed this just in case of a one in a million chance of continuation or sequel.
This was an excellent story, and I know it's been 8 years since its last chapter and 2 since any other story updated, but I've followed this just in case of a one in a million chance of continuation or sequel.
12/12/2022 c8 3SirMoe
Someday, all these lies will catch up Naruto; I just know. Can’t wait for the Kurama talk. I do find it weird, however, how Naruto sometimes refers to Kurama as the Kyubi and other times as his name.
Looking forward to reading Chapter 9!
3SirMoeSomeday, all these lies will catch up Naruto; I just know. Can’t wait for the Kurama talk. I do find it weird, however, how Naruto sometimes refers to Kurama as the Kyubi and other times as his name.
Looking forward to reading Chapter 9!
12/12/2022 c7 SirMoe
Yes, I’m really enjoying that changes to the timeline are starting to show effects. Absolutely brilliant! Wonder who attacked Sasuke…
Yes, I’m really enjoying that changes to the timeline are starting to show effects. Absolutely brilliant! Wonder who attacked Sasuke…
12/12/2022 c5 SirMoe
There’s way too much exposition this chapter. You wrote this in 2012–people know full well all this information, so I don’t know what use there is in going over it throughly. Very boring. Also, why did you change Rasa’s name to Daiki?
All in all, I’m enjoying, but I hope the plot picks up soon. You’re doing well with him meeting the Kazekage, but stop showing us Naruto in Konoha doing team stuff
There’s way too much exposition this chapter. You wrote this in 2012–people know full well all this information, so I don’t know what use there is in going over it throughly. Very boring. Also, why did you change Rasa’s name to Daiki?
All in all, I’m enjoying, but I hope the plot picks up soon. You’re doing well with him meeting the Kazekage, but stop showing us Naruto in Konoha doing team stuff
11/22/2022 c23 Guest
ur fic is useless
ur fic is useless
8/9/2022 c23 Guest
Really liked this one
Really liked this one