for The disappearance of Eyeshield 218/10/2012 c5 Raven
Nice chapter! And longer Idont really know whats wrong with your paragraphs (because it looks fine on mobile) so cant say anything about it xP
Nice chapter! And longer Idont really know whats wrong with your paragraphs (because it looks fine on mobile) so cant say anything about it xP
8/8/2012 c5 
9ShinigamiinPeru
Sweet chapter, I put my opinion on the normal story. Anyways, loved it and update soon! :)
9ShinigamiinPeruSweet chapter, I put my opinion on the normal story. Anyways, loved it and update soon! :)
8/8/2012 c5 63Glassed Loner
Straight please, I can't handle Yaoi, or Shonen-ai. *shudders* By the way, the paragraph is 'too' crowded. It gave me a 'little' trouble reading it. But so far, great story. :)
63Glassed LonerStraight please, I can't handle Yaoi, or Shonen-ai. *shudders* By the way, the paragraph is 'too' crowded. It gave me a 'little' trouble reading it. But so far, great story. :)
8/6/2012 c1 Guest
The plot is great but piece of advice: if you can make lobger chapters:) i think it attracts readers
The plot is great but piece of advice: if you can make lobger chapters:) i think it attracts readers
7/28/2012 c4 Glassed Loner
Good enough, but the paragraph(s) are a 'bit' crowded. (For my taste) But, good plot so far :)
Good enough, but the paragraph(s) are a 'bit' crowded. (For my taste) But, good plot so far :)
7/27/2012 c1 Guest
I recommend, if you can, to make the chapters longer as they're interesting. Puts more life into it :) keep it up!
I recommend, if you can, to make the chapters longer as they're interesting. Puts more life into it :) keep it up!
7/27/2012 c1 Mikurin
Evil, simply evil! I really hope you continue this and don't drop it...the story is good!
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-mikurin
Evil, simply evil! I really hope you continue this and don't drop it...the story is good!
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-mikurin
7/25/2012 c3 Guest
I like the new girl XD i wanna know if Sena (knight) protects her without hesitation if the others do something...
I like the new girl XD i wanna know if Sena (knight) protects her without hesitation if the others do something...
7/25/2012 c3 Guest
Suspense!
Suspense!
7/23/2012 c3 ShinigamiinPeru
It's soo cool! Love it and for the second chapter's a/n at the end, I vote a guy named Shadow! It was at the top of my head and you don't have to use him if you don't want to, just some random guy. Anyway, update soon! :3
It's soo cool! Love it and for the second chapter's a/n at the end, I vote a guy named Shadow! It was at the top of my head and you don't have to use him if you don't want to, just some random guy. Anyway, update soon! :3
7/1/2012 c1 Guest
O.O...
Seriously. What happened to Kobayakawa Sena? Gosh, i want to know o_o
Please update soon, i will be waiting TwT
O.O...
Seriously. What happened to Kobayakawa Sena? Gosh, i want to know o_o
Please update soon, i will be waiting TwT
7/1/2012 c1 Fumetsu Kaji
Ok I will bite, it does sounds interesting. I look forward to longer chapters. : )
Ok I will bite, it does sounds interesting. I look forward to longer chapters. : )