for These Silent Moments9/8/2012 c1 
17ILikeShorts
Like you pretty much said yourself, it does fit the mold of the typical Volkner/Jasmine story. The lighthouse, the sea... all the usual stuff is there. But I think that sort of atmosphere is a huge part of why so many people find this pairing so romantic and just generally perfect, so, in a way, it almost makes sense to write it like that.
In short, yes, it's a cliche, but it's a cliche that works, and I don't particularly mind reading more of it. That's my take on it, anyway. And you did a lovely job with the descriptions, so the whole concept comes across quite well here. So, not the most original thing in the world, but enjoyable nonetheless. :)
Also, one little correction that jumped out at me: Sunyshore has one N. (I know, it totally looks like it should have two, doesn't it?)
17ILikeShortsLike you pretty much said yourself, it does fit the mold of the typical Volkner/Jasmine story. The lighthouse, the sea... all the usual stuff is there. But I think that sort of atmosphere is a huge part of why so many people find this pairing so romantic and just generally perfect, so, in a way, it almost makes sense to write it like that.
In short, yes, it's a cliche, but it's a cliche that works, and I don't particularly mind reading more of it. That's my take on it, anyway. And you did a lovely job with the descriptions, so the whole concept comes across quite well here. So, not the most original thing in the world, but enjoyable nonetheless. :)
Also, one little correction that jumped out at me: Sunyshore has one N. (I know, it totally looks like it should have two, doesn't it?)
7/15/2012 c1 1TheLoadingScreen
Meh, it's fine, but Morty was mentioned kinda randomly, and no explanation was given for Volkner being at the lighthouse.
Jasmine was in character, but Volkner was a little OOC, since...you know, I thought he was more energetic than that, but never mind.
Lucky it didn't end with them kissing...THAT would be cliched. But the story ended kind of open...
Okay story. Read a lot of fluff, never actually wrote any though.
:)
1TheLoadingScreenMeh, it's fine, but Morty was mentioned kinda randomly, and no explanation was given for Volkner being at the lighthouse.
Jasmine was in character, but Volkner was a little OOC, since...you know, I thought he was more energetic than that, but never mind.
Lucky it didn't end with them kissing...THAT would be cliched. But the story ended kind of open...
Okay story. Read a lot of fluff, never actually wrote any though.
:)
7/3/2012 c1 5Pure Gamer
To me, this was pretty good. The description was very deep. It was impressive.
I think you did a good job of connecting them, that's something I have failed to do time and time again.
Although one thing confused me, you called Volkner a Steel Type Leader, and then later Electric Type Leader. I'm assuming that was an error?
Keep writing, this was great.
5Pure GamerTo me, this was pretty good. The description was very deep. It was impressive.
I think you did a good job of connecting them, that's something I have failed to do time and time again.
Although one thing confused me, you called Volkner a Steel Type Leader, and then later Electric Type Leader. I'm assuming that was an error?
Keep writing, this was great.