
7/2/2024 c9 AprilDH
Baja is NOT California Mexico! Baja IS Mexico.
Again, story would be good if A LITTLE researcheducation) had been accomplished beforehand.
Baja is NOT California Mexico! Baja IS Mexico.
Again, story would be good if A LITTLE researcheducation) had been accomplished beforehand.
7/2/2024 c7 AprilDH
“Scopolamine”? Is a motion sickness medication!
If you are going to write fiction, at least make up a drug!
“Scopolamine”? Is a motion sickness medication!
If you are going to write fiction, at least make up a drug!
7/2/2024 c2 AprilDH
“Disguised”?
I think you meant DISTINGUISHED.
This could be a really good story if only the spelling, grammar and flow came together…unfortunately, it doesnt.
I feel I can say these things because I have a Bachelors degree in English and Creative Writing- take it for what it is worth- an editor is needed on these stories before being allowed to submit.
If you have beta-readers, they are NOT doing their job!
“Disguised”?
I think you meant DISTINGUISHED.
This could be a really good story if only the spelling, grammar and flow came together…unfortunately, it doesnt.
I feel I can say these things because I have a Bachelors degree in English and Creative Writing- take it for what it is worth- an editor is needed on these stories before being allowed to submit.
If you have beta-readers, they are NOT doing their job!
7/1/2024 c1 AprilDH
I’m sorry, but what what is a “Coronal”? It does not even sound out to anything…in English.
I’m sorry, but what what is a “Coronal”? It does not even sound out to anything…in English.
8/5/2022 c12 Guest
Love the story idea but so many errors in spelling & grammar and inconsistencies in content make it extremely hard to follow.
Love the story idea but so many errors in spelling & grammar and inconsistencies in content make it extremely hard to follow.
1/14/2019 c1 Lori
Will you be writing more HMR stories? I loved this show and these stories.
Will you be writing more HMR stories? I loved this show and these stories.
1/16/2015 c12 Guest
Fantastic! I hope you will continue where this story ends and let the other shoe drop! Can't wait to read more! :)
Fantastic! I hope you will continue where this story ends and let the other shoe drop! Can't wait to read more! :)
4/12/2014 c11 ashton01
Great chapter! Hoping you'll continue adding to the story...
Great chapter! Hoping you'll continue adding to the story...
4/12/2014 c11 Guest
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3/23/2014 c10 Guest
I have just reread the entire series. They rcduch good stories. Thanks for writing. Could use more matt hurt and drama though. Thanks
I have just reread the entire series. They rcduch good stories. Thanks for writing. Could use more matt hurt and drama though. Thanks