for love prevails6/15/2013 c2 cynthia2012
Hey... Hey! Kyo! Ritsuka! Of course the baby looks like you! Seimei and you are brothers and you both look similar! I think it's not possible for the children to be Ritsuka's. Also is Seimei still alive?
Hey... Hey! Kyo! Ritsuka! Of course the baby looks like you! Seimei and you are brothers and you both look similar! I think it's not possible for the children to be Ritsuka's. Also is Seimei still alive?
8/17/2012 c2 Baka
this was a great improvement :) I'm honored that you'd take my advice.
The POVs were great and I couldn't stop reading! The second where Ritsuka almost didn't make it...fantastic. I'm thinking... "no way! he's either gonna make it by the skin of his teeth...or he's the Martyr of the story."
Anyways...fantastic improvement. Can't wait until the next chapter (_)
Baka
this was a great improvement :) I'm honored that you'd take my advice.
The POVs were great and I couldn't stop reading! The second where Ritsuka almost didn't make it...fantastic. I'm thinking... "no way! he's either gonna make it by the skin of his teeth...or he's the Martyr of the story."
Anyways...fantastic improvement. Can't wait until the next chapter (_)
Baka
7/16/2012 c2 Baka
not what I had expected, but I still loved it! :)
Maybe in the next chapters you might want to add more emotion. Like...express Soubi's fear and Ritsuka's anger. Maybe even how Kio feels at seeing his closest friend in that situation.
I can't wait to read how Soubi and Akatsuki will act around the others. Remember, the emotion is what matters. Soubi's fear, Ritsuka's anger and devotion, Akatsuki's confusion and protection over his 'mother'. These are the most important aspects of the story.
Anyways...i'm sure the next chapter will be great!
Baka
not what I had expected, but I still loved it! :)
Maybe in the next chapters you might want to add more emotion. Like...express Soubi's fear and Ritsuka's anger. Maybe even how Kio feels at seeing his closest friend in that situation.
I can't wait to read how Soubi and Akatsuki will act around the others. Remember, the emotion is what matters. Soubi's fear, Ritsuka's anger and devotion, Akatsuki's confusion and protection over his 'mother'. These are the most important aspects of the story.
Anyways...i'm sure the next chapter will be great!
Baka
7/9/2012 c1 Baka
I can only hope that you put as much drama and description into the rest of the story as you have in this chapter. But I do love it so far :)
I can only hope that you put as much drama and description into the rest of the story as you have in this chapter. But I do love it so far :)
7/9/2012 c1 baka
i really like this idea :) and you're doing a great job so far! i really hope you continue.
baka
i really like this idea :) and you're doing a great job so far! i really hope you continue.
baka