for Squad 7 Meisters7/24/2012 c2 NameMissing
Better. Defiantly not as rushed, still feels a little jumbled together but if you keep writing you should find a flow. The only part that really bothered me was the "with a flat screen television"... at least you didn't do what I have seem some authors do and put a X-Box or PS3 there too. Keep up the good work.
Better. Defiantly not as rushed, still feels a little jumbled together but if you keep writing you should find a flow. The only part that really bothered me was the "with a flat screen television"... at least you didn't do what I have seem some authors do and put a X-Box or PS3 there too. Keep up the good work.
7/22/2012 c1 
8The Keeper of Worlds
You are a comical genius-I #$%ING LOVE IT!-Keep it up and continue this story, definetly a solid build for a Naru/Saku you have set up, work with it-AND FOR NARUTO'S LOVE OF RAMEN, HOW IS KUSHINA ALIVE!-You are so going to need to make the next chapter VERY long my friend.
8The Keeper of WorldsYou are a comical genius-I #$%ING LOVE IT!-Keep it up and continue this story, definetly a solid build for a Naru/Saku you have set up, work with it-AND FOR NARUTO'S LOVE OF RAMEN, HOW IS KUSHINA ALIVE!-You are so going to need to make the next chapter VERY long my friend.
7/10/2012 c1 Guest
Not great, not terrible... I need to see more to be sure. Try not to shoehorn in things that don't fit just because you think it will get a cheap laugh or because its in Soul Eater. A cross-over does not mean you need to copy characters from one over characters from another. Try to mix personalities and traits or even not change some. Also this seemed a bit rushed with the whole plot, try slowing it down and finding a flow. Till I can see more, keep up the good work.
Not great, not terrible... I need to see more to be sure. Try not to shoehorn in things that don't fit just because you think it will get a cheap laugh or because its in Soul Eater. A cross-over does not mean you need to copy characters from one over characters from another. Try to mix personalities and traits or even not change some. Also this seemed a bit rushed with the whole plot, try slowing it down and finding a flow. Till I can see more, keep up the good work.
7/10/2012 c1 NameMissing
Not great, not terrible. You need to make sure not to shoehorn in anything for cheap laughs or because that is what a Soul Eater characters would do. Try to not copy and paste characters from one over onto another. Try to mix personalities and traits or even don't change some. A lot of cross-overs fail because they believe that each character must be equivalent to one from the cross-over. Also try to slow down your plot development it seemed rushed in this chapter. Try to find a nice steady flow and rhythm. Also original bloodline ability don't work out well normally too unbalanced or a blatant copy of one or more existing ones. Till I can see more, keep up the good work.
Not great, not terrible. You need to make sure not to shoehorn in anything for cheap laughs or because that is what a Soul Eater characters would do. Try to not copy and paste characters from one over onto another. Try to mix personalities and traits or even don't change some. A lot of cross-overs fail because they believe that each character must be equivalent to one from the cross-over. Also try to slow down your plot development it seemed rushed in this chapter. Try to find a nice steady flow and rhythm. Also original bloodline ability don't work out well normally too unbalanced or a blatant copy of one or more existing ones. Till I can see more, keep up the good work.
7/8/2012 c1 4the DragonBard
Not bad.
Has a few minor elements I disagree with, and some grammar mistakes (you forgot to capitalize Shinigami and Hokage a few times.)
Main thing I disagree with is the spiral eye you're giving Naruto. Why not give him either the Rinnegan, or the eye the Juubi had instead of this original kekkai genkai?
4the DragonBardNot bad.
Has a few minor elements I disagree with, and some grammar mistakes (you forgot to capitalize Shinigami and Hokage a few times.)
Main thing I disagree with is the spiral eye you're giving Naruto. Why not give him either the Rinnegan, or the eye the Juubi had instead of this original kekkai genkai?