for Two Is Better Than One8/2/2012 c1 natalie
it was rather good short but good, i would like some more
it was rather good short but good, i would like some more
7/25/2012 c1 okits
I LIKE IT
I LIKE IT
7/14/2012 c1 
180Thorn In Your Side
Eating three slices of bread because he's too lazy to make himself a sandwich seems very Shou, nice touch.
There are an awful lot of dialogue tags at parts where the dialogue could flow by itself though. You could lose some.
I've never read a 1st person POV of Shou's, and you seem to have his character down pretty well so I'm looking forward to the rest of this story.
180Thorn In Your SideEating three slices of bread because he's too lazy to make himself a sandwich seems very Shou, nice touch.
There are an awful lot of dialogue tags at parts where the dialogue could flow by itself though. You could lose some.
I've never read a 1st person POV of Shou's, and you seem to have his character down pretty well so I'm looking forward to the rest of this story.
7/12/2012 c1 Corloquitur ADME
I really love this story really I love this sho I think maybe even more then ren because ren never tries to make a move on Kyoko I get it that he has problems from his past and he doesnt think he deserves but still grow some balls ren
Anyway I really like your story please continue it .
I really love this story really I love this sho I think maybe even more then ren because ren never tries to make a move on Kyoko I get it that he has problems from his past and he doesnt think he deserves but still grow some balls ren
Anyway I really like your story please continue it .
7/10/2012 c1 Voidy
actually theres another shoxkyoko m rated fanfics but only shos fantasy or imagination. oh... and I surprised you make sho admit his past just like that in front of his producer and his marketing agent. I mean... hes not the type to admit his wrong or sorry. but, well... and your writing is quite good. blunt. Love You Chord
actually theres another shoxkyoko m rated fanfics but only shos fantasy or imagination. oh... and I surprised you make sho admit his past just like that in front of his producer and his marketing agent. I mean... hes not the type to admit his wrong or sorry. but, well... and your writing is quite good. blunt. Love You Chord