for The Day of War8/3/2012 c4 
12BrokenSky49
Aahhhhhhhh this chapter was sooooo good! He has eyeballs in him! (Wow, I never thought I would end up saying that, anywhere. Hahahaha) that darn cliff hanger too! Can't wait for the next update!
12BrokenSky49Aahhhhhhhh this chapter was sooooo good! He has eyeballs in him! (Wow, I never thought I would end up saying that, anywhere. Hahahaha) that darn cliff hanger too! Can't wait for the next update!
8/2/2012 c3 Guest
Just wanted to say this is a great story! The suspense is awesome and the entire concept is just really interesting! The characters are well-depicted and i like the way you have all of the characters interacting with each other-it makes them very easy to connect and respond to. The story isn't marked complete so I'm soooo hoping there is an update soon! Great job! :)
Just wanted to say this is a great story! The suspense is awesome and the entire concept is just really interesting! The characters are well-depicted and i like the way you have all of the characters interacting with each other-it makes them very easy to connect and respond to. The story isn't marked complete so I'm soooo hoping there is an update soon! Great job! :)
7/31/2012 c3 Guest
Finally a story about Hal!
Finally a story about Hal!
7/30/2012 c3 Haley
Good work! Please update a chapter 4 ;) please please please! :D
Good work! Please update a chapter 4 ;) please please please! :D
7/21/2012 c3 20marinawings
Man, this just gets more and more intense! I can totally see Tom reacting like this, all protective of his son. Warms the heart!
Poor Hal! I hope they find a way to save him from whatever has happened to him!
Keep up the excellent work!
20marinawingsMan, this just gets more and more intense! I can totally see Tom reacting like this, all protective of his son. Warms the heart!
Poor Hal! I hope they find a way to save him from whatever has happened to him!
Keep up the excellent work!
7/21/2012 c2 marinawings
This story is so intense! I read it with my eyes inches from the computer monitor, and I think I read both chapters in about a minute.
You're doing a great job with the characters. They really seem like themselves. And now the plot thickens!
I really look forward to reading the next chapter. I see that it's up, but I thought I'd stop and review the first two.
This story is so intense! I read it with my eyes inches from the computer monitor, and I think I read both chapters in about a minute.
You're doing a great job with the characters. They really seem like themselves. And now the plot thickens!
I really look forward to reading the next chapter. I see that it's up, but I thought I'd stop and review the first two.
7/19/2012 c3 Guest
Please will can you have some Hal and lourdes. I wish they were together I think they would be amazing. This story is really really good, ( even better If they were together) :L
Please will can you have some Hal and lourdes. I wish they were together I think they would be amazing. This story is really really good, ( even better If they were together) :L
7/19/2012 c3 Guest
WOW. This is so well written, and now I'm feeling really emotional! Poor Hal. Poor everyone else. I love this, please keep writing as quickly as possible - I get so excited when I see this in my inbox :D
WOW. This is so well written, and now I'm feeling really emotional! Poor Hal. Poor everyone else. I love this, please keep writing as quickly as possible - I get so excited when I see this in my inbox :D
7/19/2012 c3 Sirnonenath
The best chapter yet. So many great things in this chapter!
1.) Tom's bittersweet return was well done - how he was at first elated to be back with the group but then realized that Hal wasn't there to greet him... and then why that was so. *My poor heart*, it aches for the Masons.
2.) Ben in tears just gutted me. It just speaks to how bad the situation is.
3.) Tom going to see Hal was my favorite bit of the chapter. Great job with the physicality of it (Tom trying to warm up his hand, Matt kissing Hal's forehead, the Masons all sleeping around him).
5.) "Throughout the time she had spent with the Mason family she had fallen in love with all of them" Fantastic insight into Anne. I think this is true. I wish the show would explore thing angle more with Anne.
6.) Horrifying section with "Hal" attacking Ben and threatening the 2nd Mass. Yay Anthony though for taking action!
7.) And then it gets worse (or at least sadder) when Weaver orders Hal put in the crate.
Thanks for the update. Sorry for all my squee about everything; I just love this fic so much!
The best chapter yet. So many great things in this chapter!
1.) Tom's bittersweet return was well done - how he was at first elated to be back with the group but then realized that Hal wasn't there to greet him... and then why that was so. *My poor heart*, it aches for the Masons.
2.) Ben in tears just gutted me. It just speaks to how bad the situation is.
3.) Tom going to see Hal was my favorite bit of the chapter. Great job with the physicality of it (Tom trying to warm up his hand, Matt kissing Hal's forehead, the Masons all sleeping around him).
5.) "Throughout the time she had spent with the Mason family she had fallen in love with all of them" Fantastic insight into Anne. I think this is true. I wish the show would explore thing angle more with Anne.
6.) Horrifying section with "Hal" attacking Ben and threatening the 2nd Mass. Yay Anthony though for taking action!
7.) And then it gets worse (or at least sadder) when Weaver orders Hal put in the crate.
Thanks for the update. Sorry for all my squee about everything; I just love this fic so much!
7/18/2012 c3 Guest
Fantastic! I love this story so much! Poor Matt and Tom, having to come back and see that...
Fantastic! I love this story so much! Poor Matt and Tom, having to come back and see that...
7/18/2012 c3 Guest
Just wanted to say that this is a great story and I am intrigued by where you have taken this. This is a well-written story with a solid and intriguing plot line and I can't wait to read more! :)
Just wanted to say that this is a great story and I am intrigued by where you have taken this. This is a well-written story with a solid and intriguing plot line and I can't wait to read more! :)
7/18/2012 c2 Guest
I...can't...nope...too much feels...
Hal talking to his 'mom' ! That was so sad and it got even worse with Ben...these guys have had to give up and lose so much...
I...can't...nope...too much feels...
Hal talking to his 'mom' ! That was so sad and it got even worse with Ben...these guys have had to give up and lose so much...
7/18/2012 c2 Guest
holy crap...that's bad
But Hal and Maggie yay
holy crap...that's bad
But Hal and Maggie yay
7/16/2012 c2 20TroubledxEyes
Ohmygod. That seriously excelled any expectations I had about your story. I don't know what to say other than it was awesome and I can't wait for the next chapter and I just love it so much and Oh yeah my second chaper will be up thursday because thats when I get my computer and Ill stay up all night and spend all day writing it, I swear on the amazingness that was yesterday's episode.
20TroubledxEyesOhmygod. That seriously excelled any expectations I had about your story. I don't know what to say other than it was awesome and I can't wait for the next chapter and I just love it so much and Oh yeah my second chaper will be up thursday because thats when I get my computer and Ill stay up all night and spend all day writing it, I swear on the amazingness that was yesterday's episode.
7/16/2012 c2 skylar
This is awesome! You follow the characters personalities very well and the story itself is crazy suspenseful and good. Looking forward to the next post! :)
This is awesome! You follow the characters personalities very well and the story itself is crazy suspenseful and good. Looking forward to the next post! :)