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4Truth Questor
I do feel rather sorry for Isamar and Dion now. If they weren't so caught up with this vendetta against Devi and Shamash, they might have had a decently happy life together. Oooh, this stuff with Antony and Sabrina is getting interesting...
4Truth QuestorI do feel rather sorry for Isamar and Dion now. If they weren't so caught up with this vendetta against Devi and Shamash, they might have had a decently happy life together. Oooh, this stuff with Antony and Sabrina is getting interesting...
7/23/2013 c34 Truth Questor
Yikes. That was abrupt. Poor Sabrina. A love triangle and an assassination attempt is a lot for one day.
Yikes. That was abrupt. Poor Sabrina. A love triangle and an assassination attempt is a lot for one day.
7/23/2013 c33 Truth Questor
Stella! Yay! Sabrina is so cute: "Yes, we hugged." And wow, Cassandra is getting naughty. I really like that Cassandra and Sabrina get along with each other enough to share these kinds of things, even though Sabrina feels overshadowed by Cassandra. It's fun to see them talk to each other and do things together.
Stella! Yay! Sabrina is so cute: "Yes, we hugged." And wow, Cassandra is getting naughty. I really like that Cassandra and Sabrina get along with each other enough to share these kinds of things, even though Sabrina feels overshadowed by Cassandra. It's fun to see them talk to each other and do things together.
7/23/2013 c31 Truth Questor
I'm finally getting around to reading the latest chapters! Nice foreshadowing.
I'm finally getting around to reading the latest chapters! Nice foreshadowing.
12/12/2012 c18 Truth Questor
Hahaha! Koume and Kotake have been arguing about their ages all this time! It's cool to see them more developed here.
Hahaha! Koume and Kotake have been arguing about their ages all this time! It's cool to see them more developed here.
12/11/2012 c6 Truth Questor
A brilliant way to tie "Ocarina of Time" and "Majora's Mask" together, and to expand on the history behind Hyrule and Termina.
A brilliant way to tie "Ocarina of Time" and "Majora's Mask" together, and to expand on the history behind Hyrule and Termina.
12/11/2012 c5 Truth Questor
Finally getting back to reading this now that the semester is just about over. Great job with the fight scene at the end. I could hear the music... You know what music I'm talking about. ;)
Finally getting back to reading this now that the semester is just about over. Great job with the fight scene at the end. I could hear the music... You know what music I'm talking about. ;)
11/24/2012 c28 FairyTailNatsuandLucy
Genkl, I'm still aw-strucked with your story, I cant believe Isamar is pregnant, with Dion's child! And you're still describing it perfectly,like usual :) And I thought Sabrina would be reincarnated Majora, but Cassandra might actually be Majora reincarnated, oh gosh, now you've got me wondering! :) Great job like always, cant wait for the next chapter! Dark Garrett
A.K.A. Chibi Zant! :D
Genkl, I'm still aw-strucked with your story, I cant believe Isamar is pregnant, with Dion's child! And you're still describing it perfectly,like usual :) And I thought Sabrina would be reincarnated Majora, but Cassandra might actually be Majora reincarnated, oh gosh, now you've got me wondering! :) Great job like always, cant wait for the next chapter! Dark Garrett
A.K.A. Chibi Zant! :D
11/11/2012 c27 FairyTailNatsuandLucy
This story is long and interesting, please keep writing more of it, I enjoyed reading all the chapters to this point! :D
This story is long and interesting, please keep writing more of it, I enjoyed reading all the chapters to this point! :D
10/28/2012 c26 MissRandom
Wow. I just found this story and I really, REALLY like it! It would be a neat movie! Please continue!
Wow. I just found this story and I really, REALLY like it! It would be a neat movie! Please continue!
10/22/2012 c6 Agato - The Hadou Inari
Their immortals you dumbass, death isn't a factor for them. Christ your stupid. -_-
Their immortals you dumbass, death isn't a factor for them. Christ your stupid. -_-
10/20/2012 c25 Unicorn
Wonderful as always! The descriptions are great and status in the royal courts are very detailed! Good job!
Wonderful as always! The descriptions are great and status in the royal courts are very detailed! Good job!
10/6/2012 c24 SDFLVNJSDFKVSNDFVKL
The story compared to most of the fanfiction i have ever read was very well done, this review will be very critical but that does not mean that your work is bad, it means that I thought it was good enough for me to put the time in to review it. The biggest complaint I have with this story is, quite frankly, the title sucks. I really did enjoy reading this but every time I saw the title it felt like a little stab in the heart that something so well written should have such a terrible title. You didn't use enough descriptive terms either which made it very difficult for me to imagine what the setting was like. Of course since I have played all of the Zelda games I can understand exactly what you are talking about most of the time but if you ever go the route of publishing an original novel where people will not have prior experience with your settings, you may want to add more description so you don't leave people wondering what just happened.
I realize that this review I'm giving you right now is mostly criticism, don't feel bad about it, this story is still much better than most of the fanfiction I have read. I'd put this in the top 25% of stuff in the zelda category of this site. The reason I am giving you this criticism is in the hope that you'll become an even better writer because of it, nobody ever improved from just hearing a bunch of reviewers saying "good job", you have to know what you're doing wrong to improve and what you're doing right so you don't change the things that are good. Here are some things that I thought were pretty good.
- Spelling, very few errors throughout the entirety of the novel, you probably did even better on this than I did.
- Grammar, there were a few errors here and there that caught my attention but overall you beat most of 's population here
- Contiguous Story, you do a very good job of keeping the fic on track and avoiding going too far off topic, there were no errors in the story line that i was able to spot and so it looks to me like you did a very good job of keeping notes on your writing.
Hope this advice helps you, i wouldn't recommend making any changes based on my advice in a fic that is already this far along but maybe when you start your next story you might want to take some of my tips into consideration here. Keep up the good work.
-Robert Siegfried
The story compared to most of the fanfiction i have ever read was very well done, this review will be very critical but that does not mean that your work is bad, it means that I thought it was good enough for me to put the time in to review it. The biggest complaint I have with this story is, quite frankly, the title sucks. I really did enjoy reading this but every time I saw the title it felt like a little stab in the heart that something so well written should have such a terrible title. You didn't use enough descriptive terms either which made it very difficult for me to imagine what the setting was like. Of course since I have played all of the Zelda games I can understand exactly what you are talking about most of the time but if you ever go the route of publishing an original novel where people will not have prior experience with your settings, you may want to add more description so you don't leave people wondering what just happened.
I realize that this review I'm giving you right now is mostly criticism, don't feel bad about it, this story is still much better than most of the fanfiction I have read. I'd put this in the top 25% of stuff in the zelda category of this site. The reason I am giving you this criticism is in the hope that you'll become an even better writer because of it, nobody ever improved from just hearing a bunch of reviewers saying "good job", you have to know what you're doing wrong to improve and what you're doing right so you don't change the things that are good. Here are some things that I thought were pretty good.
- Spelling, very few errors throughout the entirety of the novel, you probably did even better on this than I did.
- Grammar, there were a few errors here and there that caught my attention but overall you beat most of 's population here
- Contiguous Story, you do a very good job of keeping the fic on track and avoiding going too far off topic, there were no errors in the story line that i was able to spot and so it looks to me like you did a very good job of keeping notes on your writing.
Hope this advice helps you, i wouldn't recommend making any changes based on my advice in a fic that is already this far along but maybe when you start your next story you might want to take some of my tips into consideration here. Keep up the good work.
-Robert Siegfried