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8/6/2012 c1 15Burnzs
It's an interesting read but the big blocks of text kinda make it hard to follow.
7/25/2012 c1 6DawnoftheNutter
Ok, couple of things: don't need to caplocks every other word to make a point. Funny story, but really hard to read with the formatting (could just be my astigmatism, but things look like blocks). So can you break down the paragraphs by dialogue and related actions. Hint: read your story out loud and see if it makes sense or if it is just too damn embarrassing. Remember, sometimes things just seem cooler in your head.
7/20/2012 c1 5kidloco
oh lol, that is madness, i love that

fucking uchihas... somebodyy can throw a rock to them to them died?
7/20/2012 c1 6moonlight53
Interesting story and I like it hopefully u update soon :D
7/20/2012 c1 jgreek
great first chapter cant wait for the next

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