1/4/2013 c1 29Edhla
Disclaimer: not familiar with the book, sorry!

This is a really interesting and well-written little piece, and I think you've chosen a great prompt to start it all off with (not know the rest of the context, of course.)

You write fluently and confidently, and your characters are great. I can't speak for whether they're in character or not but they're certainly engaging, particularly Victoria ("Love is stupid", indeed!)

There were a couple of minor typos- for example, "Not once in her life, experienced love." They're not a big deal, but if you're like me you'll want to correct them :)

I thought that sometimes your narrative strayed into telling rather than showing (e.g. "not for her parents...",) but I don't think it overwhelms your narrative, and as someone who is unfamiliar with this world, I kind of needed it.

Great dialogue, too. Very natural. Well done on this one.