for the past is never forgotten9/9/2014 c6 
12CuriosityNeko
Its a good start a bit fast in terms of of everything happening. Its still interesting tho so update when you can.
12CuriosityNekoIts a good start a bit fast in terms of of everything happening. Its still interesting tho so update when you can.
9/8/2014 c1 25AspergianStoryteller
Needs more , and . Also, when someone starts talking, put it on a new line and start with a capital letter.
25AspergianStorytellerNeeds more , and . Also, when someone starts talking, put it on a new line and start with a capital letter.
3/12/2013 c6 5Isabella1948
If you have so many ideas just split it. Like right now you have the core chapters then make two (or however many ideas you have) branches off of it like when you post it label it either story a story b story c and then each time you post it post it under which story the chapter falls under. Either way I'm really excited about this and can't wait for it to continue!
5Isabella1948If you have so many ideas just split it. Like right now you have the core chapters then make two (or however many ideas you have) branches off of it like when you post it label it either story a story b story c and then each time you post it post it under which story the chapter falls under. Either way I'm really excited about this and can't wait for it to continue!
2/23/2013 c6 Guest
Continue with this story! I like it so far and I'm kinda anxious to see how it turns out! If anything I feel that you should maybe expand on the regulars' reactions to the whole situation since they seem kind of generic. You did though do a great job of making the reader understand ryoma's emotions. Please continue!
Continue with this story! I like it so far and I'm kinda anxious to see how it turns out! If anything I feel that you should maybe expand on the regulars' reactions to the whole situation since they seem kind of generic. You did though do a great job of making the reader understand ryoma's emotions. Please continue!
2/13/2013 c6 Guest
you should continue it
you should continue it
2/13/2013 c6 Big Sis of 8
I think you should do whichever story you think is better... I mean I like this one. But I'll probably like the other too. :)
I'm not much help... You ask for us to pick one and I basically say you pick... Sorry.
I think you should do whichever story you think is better... I mean I like this one. But I'll probably like the other too. :)
I'm not much help... You ask for us to pick one and I basically say you pick... Sorry.
2/13/2013 c6 Guest
more please!
more please!
2/13/2013 c6 4aku no tensai
I was rather happy with the way things were going, so I'd like it if you continued it this way. However, this is your story and I think I'll be happy no matter how it turns out as long as it's you writing it :) And that you keep the general idea (main idea/plot line that was implied and mentioned in the summary)!
Good luck, no matter the outcome. I hope that you won't ever drop this story!
If it makes things easier too, then why don't you go with both story outcomes and just title the other one as "Alternate story to_"?
Just start with whichever one you feel more inclined to continue/start with?
Sorry, I'm TERRIBLE at explaining things ;_;
-AnT
4aku no tensaiI was rather happy with the way things were going, so I'd like it if you continued it this way. However, this is your story and I think I'll be happy no matter how it turns out as long as it's you writing it :) And that you keep the general idea (main idea/plot line that was implied and mentioned in the summary)!
Good luck, no matter the outcome. I hope that you won't ever drop this story!
If it makes things easier too, then why don't you go with both story outcomes and just title the other one as "Alternate story to_"?
Just start with whichever one you feel more inclined to continue/start with?
Sorry, I'm TERRIBLE at explaining things ;_;
-AnT
2/13/2013 c6 4Merilwen-Vendethiel
If you have new ideas for the story don't you think you should fix or rewrite your story the way you feel you like it?
4Merilwen-VendethielIf you have new ideas for the story don't you think you should fix or rewrite your story the way you feel you like it?
2/13/2013 c5 3Dragon of Despaire
I really want to know what happens but if you want to rewrite the story go for it your the author and you can do anything your heart desires..
3Dragon of DespaireI really want to know what happens but if you want to rewrite the story go for it your the author and you can do anything your heart desires..