for The Rise of Jane5/31/2013 c1 magiclollyl
Have you posted this on Wattpad? If not, please could you because I would prefer to read it on that! :) xxx
Have you posted this on Wattpad? If not, please could you because I would prefer to read it on that! :) xxx
10/13/2012 c20 
10Katsudonfataledeactivated
Wow. It was amazing. I am surprised that there is only so few reviews. The storyline was original and the relationships between the characters were very intriguing. Not to mention you have probably taken your time doing some research on history and stuff. You have shown us the extravagant beauty and glamour of the Vantican as well as the era. I am really glad I decided to read this fic. It was amazing.
10KatsudonfataledeactivatedWow. It was amazing. I am surprised that there is only so few reviews. The storyline was original and the relationships between the characters were very intriguing. Not to mention you have probably taken your time doing some research on history and stuff. You have shown us the extravagant beauty and glamour of the Vantican as well as the era. I am really glad I decided to read this fic. It was amazing.
9/22/2012 c20 Jazzy
I love the sneakpeek! Best luck to you! Please tell me the name of the sequel so I can read it. Thanks so much!
I love the sneakpeek! Best luck to you! Please tell me the name of the sequel so I can read it. Thanks so much!
9/15/2012 c20 Jazzy
I can't wait for the sequel. I will try to leave more reviews. Good luck on the next story, and I know I will love it.
I can't wait for the sequel. I will try to leave more reviews. Good luck on the next story, and I know I will love it.
9/4/2012 c15 Jazzy
I would just like to let you know that I start school tomorrow. I will always come back to read your updates and will try very hard to leav reviews and help you with your story if you would like. Thanks so much.
I would just like to let you know that I start school tomorrow. I will always come back to read your updates and will try very hard to leav reviews and help you with your story if you would like. Thanks so much.
9/4/2012 c15 Jazzy
I thought this part of the story wonderful, just like the previous parts. I was wondering that if my assumptions are correct and Jane turns out to love Julio, if I could help you get some ideas on the part where they confess their love for each other and maybe kiss. I will be thinking of some ideas and if you would like, I could help you. However, if you decide not to, I would not feel
disappointed at all, I assure you. You have excellent potential to become an author and I am certain your ideas would be exceedingly better than mine. Thanks, and I hope to read more of the story soon. Thanks.
I thought this part of the story wonderful, just like the previous parts. I was wondering that if my assumptions are correct and Jane turns out to love Julio, if I could help you get some ideas on the part where they confess their love for each other and maybe kiss. I will be thinking of some ideas and if you would like, I could help you. However, if you decide not to, I would not feel
disappointed at all, I assure you. You have excellent potential to become an author and I am certain your ideas would be exceedingly better than mine. Thanks, and I hope to read more of the story soon. Thanks.
9/3/2012 c14 Jazzy
I will always be checking up on your story. You have not disappointed me at all. I love your story and will always. I cannot wait for more information about Ascanio, Julio, Jane, and the countless other characters. This suspense is clawing at me. I promise to leave reviews every time I come back to read more updates on your story. Best luck on working on the next section of the story!
I will always be checking up on your story. You have not disappointed me at all. I love your story and will always. I cannot wait for more information about Ascanio, Julio, Jane, and the countless other characters. This suspense is clawing at me. I promise to leave reviews every time I come back to read more updates on your story. Best luck on working on the next section of the story!
9/1/2012 c13 Jazzy
Once again, I enjoyed your story. I cannot wait until you update again. You are truly a talented person who can become a famous author with many followers. Thank you, and I cannot wait until other parts of the story come out. Thank you so much.
Once again, I enjoyed your story. I cannot wait until you update again. You are truly a talented person who can become a famous author with many followers. Thank you, and I cannot wait until other parts of the story come out. Thank you so much.
8/27/2012 c10 Jazzy
I enjoy reading your story. Sometimes, the terms are so mature and like a real author's that I start to believe that this is a real published novel. If it was, I would give it a 5 star rating. I understand that you are busy since I have once experienced the feeling. However, if you could write more of the story, I would definitely love it. This is a remarkable story. I would definitely come back and continue to look for more of the story. This ending of the chapter is extremely suspenseful! I will love to have more to read. You are a wonderful writer! I would enjoy to hear more of you writing this story!
I enjoy reading your story. Sometimes, the terms are so mature and like a real author's that I start to believe that this is a real published novel. If it was, I would give it a 5 star rating. I understand that you are busy since I have once experienced the feeling. However, if you could write more of the story, I would definitely love it. This is a remarkable story. I would definitely come back and continue to look for more of the story. This ending of the chapter is extremely suspenseful! I will love to have more to read. You are a wonderful writer! I would enjoy to hear more of you writing this story!
8/25/2012 c9 whirlwinds of watercolours
A very nice chapter, although I did find one missing full stop at the end of a paragraph...
A very nice chapter, although I did find one missing full stop at the end of a paragraph...
8/15/2012 c7 whirlwinds of watercolours
Unless I am very much mistaken (I don't study English in the 14th century), there should be a comma after the "Dear Jane" and "With love".
As I said, I'm not very sure. Do tell me if I'm wrong!
Unless I am very much mistaken (I don't study English in the 14th century), there should be a comma after the "Dear Jane" and "With love".
As I said, I'm not very sure. Do tell me if I'm wrong!
8/6/2012 c4 whirlwinds of watercolours
I like this chapter, but I discovered a little problem.
In the English language, colons are used mainly before lists or explanations, whereas you used them inappropriately for sentences before dialogue. Also, I realised you have a punctuation error in this sentence: "Congratulations on your victory," It's supposed to be a full stop and not a comma.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
I like this chapter, but I discovered a little problem.
In the English language, colons are used mainly before lists or explanations, whereas you used them inappropriately for sentences before dialogue. Also, I realised you have a punctuation error in this sentence: "Congratulations on your victory," It's supposed to be a full stop and not a comma.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
8/3/2012 c3 2Jinjing
I really love this story. It's easy to see how much work you put into it and I love that effort. I also love history in general so this story just hedfskfhwk amazing. Your setting and plot is very different than what I usually see on this site. It's really refreshing and in my view you captured Jane very well.
I'm not going to say anything about grammar because I'm not very good at catching mistakes for that. Going over a second time, I did see that Basilica in the third paragraph is not capatalized but later on it is always capitalized. Just one minor mistake that doesn't detract from the story at all.
Keep updating!
2JinjingI really love this story. It's easy to see how much work you put into it and I love that effort. I also love history in general so this story just hedfskfhwk amazing. Your setting and plot is very different than what I usually see on this site. It's really refreshing and in my view you captured Jane very well.
I'm not going to say anything about grammar because I'm not very good at catching mistakes for that. Going over a second time, I did see that Basilica in the third paragraph is not capatalized but later on it is always capitalized. Just one minor mistake that doesn't detract from the story at all.
Keep updating!