for My Unintentional Saviour8/13/2012 c1 iaminlovewithcoffee
Great first chapter! The only grammatical error I saw was that you sometimes skipped punctuation at the end of dialogue. Gotta be careful about that. Update soon!
Great first chapter! The only grammatical error I saw was that you sometimes skipped punctuation at the end of dialogue. Gotta be careful about that. Update soon!
8/7/2012 c1 Guest
I think it's a really interesting beginning to a story. Update soon! Just keep an eye out for punctuation at the end of dialogue. There should always be a comma, period, question mark, exclamation point, or dash, before the ending quotation mark. Example: "Thirteen miles west" vs "Thirteen miles west,"
That's all! I look forward to the next chapter :)
I think it's a really interesting beginning to a story. Update soon! Just keep an eye out for punctuation at the end of dialogue. There should always be a comma, period, question mark, exclamation point, or dash, before the ending quotation mark. Example: "Thirteen miles west" vs "Thirteen miles west,"
That's all! I look forward to the next chapter :)
8/4/2012 c1 Delete Me Forever 3333333
Interesting start. No opinion on the spelling, just go with the way you like it. I do the longer "o" sound expressed by Kikyou, personally. Looking forward to more.
Interesting start. No opinion on the spelling, just go with the way you like it. I do the longer "o" sound expressed by Kikyou, personally. Looking forward to more.
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