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10/28/2024 c43 Roostertheking
It was very interesting story but was very disappointed to see after 43 chapters..it's not been updated...I hope the writer comes back to update thus soon...
It was very interesting story but was very disappointed to see after 43 chapters..it's not been updated...I hope the writer comes back to update thus soon...
10/7/2024 c16 meadowpraire
hello dear writer. I've been reading your work since 2018 and had changed my life. Now I am re reading and I came to notice that you edit this specific chapter. I understand that many peaple had complained back then about the explicit nature of this chapter. But you see... I always felt deeply touched by the original version. Being a victmin of Child S.A the description didin't offend me... but the edit broke my heart, because before seeing that you weren't afraid to voice the pains of r*pe, I stoped feeling dirty for saying that I was not a virgin anymore... when harry said in the original( i remember because it changed me foreverUnicorns like women and virgins and I'm neither" I felt that it was ok to not sugar coated what had been done to me, and to many children... having sex when you are a child changes you... but your work showed me that that change was not something disgusting that should be hidden from discussion. I know that are many sensible peaple reading HP fan work because it is for children but you always put warnnings so Im just kind of heart broken that this chapter was edit from its old and raw openess. The rap* scene from Harry's uncle didin't scandalized me... Because... and also It was a way of showing the horrors of it... the shook that could ignite fire from peaples apathic hearts about this issue. All of this to say that... thank you for wrinting what you wrote. thank you for helping me... and I do understand why you did it. but if theres a way that you could share the original beautifully truthfull work with me... even if from email could you please do? I won't show it to anyone. You do mean a lot to me. Because I belive that when we read books we don't simply connect with the story but with the soul of the one who wrote it... So in the end you are the one who brought me peace and strength. Thank you. Thank you.
my email for contact is meadowpraire gmail
hello dear writer. I've been reading your work since 2018 and had changed my life. Now I am re reading and I came to notice that you edit this specific chapter. I understand that many peaple had complained back then about the explicit nature of this chapter. But you see... I always felt deeply touched by the original version. Being a victmin of Child S.A the description didin't offend me... but the edit broke my heart, because before seeing that you weren't afraid to voice the pains of r*pe, I stoped feeling dirty for saying that I was not a virgin anymore... when harry said in the original( i remember because it changed me foreverUnicorns like women and virgins and I'm neither" I felt that it was ok to not sugar coated what had been done to me, and to many children... having sex when you are a child changes you... but your work showed me that that change was not something disgusting that should be hidden from discussion. I know that are many sensible peaple reading HP fan work because it is for children but you always put warnnings so Im just kind of heart broken that this chapter was edit from its old and raw openess. The rap* scene from Harry's uncle didin't scandalized me... Because... and also It was a way of showing the horrors of it... the shook that could ignite fire from peaples apathic hearts about this issue. All of this to say that... thank you for wrinting what you wrote. thank you for helping me... and I do understand why you did it. but if theres a way that you could share the original beautifully truthfull work with me... even if from email could you please do? I won't show it to anyone. You do mean a lot to me. Because I belive that when we read books we don't simply connect with the story but with the soul of the one who wrote it... So in the end you are the one who brought me peace and strength. Thank you. Thank you.
my email for contact is meadowpraire gmail
3/26/2024 c1 Killerpickle
Review / Issues With Story Areas And Ways To Fix - Read To Chapter 43
Issues:
1) Unnecessary angst/abuse
2) Lack of Understanding of psychology & Procedures
- With how people react to being subjected to it
- How someone goes about treating trauma, plus when new Traumas are introduced (Lucius)
3) Unrealistic Characterization:
- Characters always being extremes super evil or super good i.e Lucius, Mihai for bad and Harry, Draco for good
- Lucius being angst/black and white evil - raping Harry and letting him live (with you know how there are so many ways to prove he did something like that, and he wouldn't be able to wave away the accusation with how high profile Harry is)
- Harry doesn't act like someone who has been abused and only does when the 'plot' demands it, people who have suffered abuse are more likely to draw solace in each other and share their experiences (an interesting idea would of been to have Harry show his scars to Star, Dobby etc)
- Harry Never Acts with any form of wisdom which is meant to be the point, the closest we get is when he refuses to punish those that deserve it be it legal or otherwise.
4) Overinflated Cast:
- The inclusion of so many people is fine but there is not enough time exploring them and to much is covered in such a short period of time that characters become useless/in the way
- No progress on plot, No Progress in studying magic (which you would think being the apprentice of Flamel...)
- Ron and Hermione's inclusion don't actually add anything to the story and to be blunt subtract from it as not enough time is spent on the 'main cast' and these 'extras' plot lines do the exact same.
- The story description really doesn't represent the story, Harry doesn't showcase any wisdom or such
5) Lack Of Plot:
- The story just follows the original canon timeline but is rushed through which doesn't help with the 'inflated cast'
- Not enough time is spent with your original ideas/concepts/plot lines which leaves them not being explored enough to make them matter
- The original ideas etc should of had more importance to the story so they affect the original canon timeline
- The whole subplot with Hermione and Harry being friends is incredibly forced and removes from Harry's growth as an individual from the abuse he suffered
6) Plot Holes:
- Lucius Malfoy kidnapping Harry as he did would lead to him being thrown in jail due to witnesses for starters, Harry telling people, Harry's Elves telling people, Flamel/Dumbledore finding out through Harrys Occulmency training...
- Harry just always seems to know stuff and things Vastly above his age level, some can be explained but without any formal training his expansive knowledge that leaves experts stumped dosen't make sense i.e The people who wanted to experiment on his dragon.
- Not Dealing with situations and allowing them to continue i.e Lucius Malfoy, Mihai
- Ginny simply believing in herself should not of been enough to be able to stop the possession/life drain as the magic involved was incredibly complex and BINDING!
7) All magic cast is literally almost always the same spells like Flipendo which gets used by far the most
Ways To Improve:
1) Remove some of the abuse/sexual assault.
2) Look up some psychological trauma lectures, watch 'Good Will Hunting'/a break down of the psychological stuff.
3) Don't make characters black and white, Give nuance layers of grey
- Lucius for starters not getting into a pissing contest with a child, or attacking him over the most smallest thing. Not doing things that would get him thrown in jail straight away
- Don't have Harry act like a normal child for 90% of the time and that last 10% having unrealistic abuse responses
- Have Harry be more quite, reserved etc but more understanding of the world being more responsible (then maybe cause some friction with his friends about it so that when Harry has 'healed' enough he shares his trauma at least in part with them then he can finally start to feel like a child)
- Don't make characters do stupid things just for the Wow factor
4) Spend more time exploring important aspect of the story and stop including things that don't add anything to the story i.e So much time spent on Harry's friends and how they want to feel worthy or good enough for him (which doesn't make sense as he hasn't done anything to make them feel that way).
- Get rid of certain characters/compress the main cast by giving the remaining characters the others plot lines etc.
- Make every moment of a characters onscreen time useful (as a good 40-50% of the story could be cut and nothing would change, it would probably actually make the story more streamline and better).
5) Have the story more reflect the actual description.
- Have Harry act with more wisdom.
- Have Harry actually grow to have the weight of the past be something he has to move on from and bear its crushing weight but through understanding he is made all the stronger for it.
- Have Harry learn more about the World, magic, ways of life, people etc to help broaden his knowledge then in turn make him more wise.
- Don't just follow the canon plot, explore your own ideas i.e instead of the chamber of secrets have Harry be learning with Flamel and how they go out into the greater magical world during Harry's tutelage (you could even have Harry's apprenticeship be he spends half his time at hogwarts each week and the other with Flamel) and the chamber of secrets doesn't need to happen because Lucius knows that Harry isn't there.
- Have your original ideas at least take up a majority of the story Over having the canon story with a few minor changes with the cast and scenes with how it is now.
6) Plot Holes:
- Don't have Lucius act like a 2 bit villain, Don't have him cast spells on people in public or kidnap someone.
- Spend time on Harry actually learning things i.e practicing magic, reading/using what he has read (thinking back to what the book said)
- Spend time on Harry being taught and not just through flashbacks
- Having characters actually deal with situations properly and not leaving them so they become even worse i.e Lucius
Review / Issues With Story Areas And Ways To Fix - Read To Chapter 43
Issues:
1) Unnecessary angst/abuse
2) Lack of Understanding of psychology & Procedures
- With how people react to being subjected to it
- How someone goes about treating trauma, plus when new Traumas are introduced (Lucius)
3) Unrealistic Characterization:
- Characters always being extremes super evil or super good i.e Lucius, Mihai for bad and Harry, Draco for good
- Lucius being angst/black and white evil - raping Harry and letting him live (with you know how there are so many ways to prove he did something like that, and he wouldn't be able to wave away the accusation with how high profile Harry is)
- Harry doesn't act like someone who has been abused and only does when the 'plot' demands it, people who have suffered abuse are more likely to draw solace in each other and share their experiences (an interesting idea would of been to have Harry show his scars to Star, Dobby etc)
- Harry Never Acts with any form of wisdom which is meant to be the point, the closest we get is when he refuses to punish those that deserve it be it legal or otherwise.
4) Overinflated Cast:
- The inclusion of so many people is fine but there is not enough time exploring them and to much is covered in such a short period of time that characters become useless/in the way
- No progress on plot, No Progress in studying magic (which you would think being the apprentice of Flamel...)
- Ron and Hermione's inclusion don't actually add anything to the story and to be blunt subtract from it as not enough time is spent on the 'main cast' and these 'extras' plot lines do the exact same.
- The story description really doesn't represent the story, Harry doesn't showcase any wisdom or such
5) Lack Of Plot:
- The story just follows the original canon timeline but is rushed through which doesn't help with the 'inflated cast'
- Not enough time is spent with your original ideas/concepts/plot lines which leaves them not being explored enough to make them matter
- The original ideas etc should of had more importance to the story so they affect the original canon timeline
- The whole subplot with Hermione and Harry being friends is incredibly forced and removes from Harry's growth as an individual from the abuse he suffered
6) Plot Holes:
- Lucius Malfoy kidnapping Harry as he did would lead to him being thrown in jail due to witnesses for starters, Harry telling people, Harry's Elves telling people, Flamel/Dumbledore finding out through Harrys Occulmency training...
- Harry just always seems to know stuff and things Vastly above his age level, some can be explained but without any formal training his expansive knowledge that leaves experts stumped dosen't make sense i.e The people who wanted to experiment on his dragon.
- Not Dealing with situations and allowing them to continue i.e Lucius Malfoy, Mihai
- Ginny simply believing in herself should not of been enough to be able to stop the possession/life drain as the magic involved was incredibly complex and BINDING!
7) All magic cast is literally almost always the same spells like Flipendo which gets used by far the most
Ways To Improve:
1) Remove some of the abuse/sexual assault.
2) Look up some psychological trauma lectures, watch 'Good Will Hunting'/a break down of the psychological stuff.
3) Don't make characters black and white, Give nuance layers of grey
- Lucius for starters not getting into a pissing contest with a child, or attacking him over the most smallest thing. Not doing things that would get him thrown in jail straight away
- Don't have Harry act like a normal child for 90% of the time and that last 10% having unrealistic abuse responses
- Have Harry be more quite, reserved etc but more understanding of the world being more responsible (then maybe cause some friction with his friends about it so that when Harry has 'healed' enough he shares his trauma at least in part with them then he can finally start to feel like a child)
- Don't make characters do stupid things just for the Wow factor
4) Spend more time exploring important aspect of the story and stop including things that don't add anything to the story i.e So much time spent on Harry's friends and how they want to feel worthy or good enough for him (which doesn't make sense as he hasn't done anything to make them feel that way).
- Get rid of certain characters/compress the main cast by giving the remaining characters the others plot lines etc.
- Make every moment of a characters onscreen time useful (as a good 40-50% of the story could be cut and nothing would change, it would probably actually make the story more streamline and better).
5) Have the story more reflect the actual description.
- Have Harry act with more wisdom.
- Have Harry actually grow to have the weight of the past be something he has to move on from and bear its crushing weight but through understanding he is made all the stronger for it.
- Have Harry learn more about the World, magic, ways of life, people etc to help broaden his knowledge then in turn make him more wise.
- Don't just follow the canon plot, explore your own ideas i.e instead of the chamber of secrets have Harry be learning with Flamel and how they go out into the greater magical world during Harry's tutelage (you could even have Harry's apprenticeship be he spends half his time at hogwarts each week and the other with Flamel) and the chamber of secrets doesn't need to happen because Lucius knows that Harry isn't there.
- Have your original ideas at least take up a majority of the story Over having the canon story with a few minor changes with the cast and scenes with how it is now.
6) Plot Holes:
- Don't have Lucius act like a 2 bit villain, Don't have him cast spells on people in public or kidnap someone.
- Spend time on Harry actually learning things i.e practicing magic, reading/using what he has read (thinking back to what the book said)
- Spend time on Harry being taught and not just through flashbacks
- Having characters actually deal with situations properly and not leaving them so they become even worse i.e Lucius
3/26/2024 c14 Killerpickle
Are you actually retarded? like seriously for starters what did the rape actually accomplish... Nothing on top of that it doesn't make any sense with How Lucius Malfoy went about doing it then with how he was let go.
Are you actually retarded? like seriously for starters what did the rape actually accomplish... Nothing on top of that it doesn't make any sense with How Lucius Malfoy went about doing it then with how he was let go.
12/17/2023 c35 Bookwrym
The sudden and inexplicable appearance of the sorting hat in this chapter threw me. You have been very good about setting up circumstances or reasons for an event to happen a certain way. Thanks for writing.
The sudden and inexplicable appearance of the sorting hat in this chapter threw me. You have been very good about setting up circumstances or reasons for an event to happen a certain way. Thanks for writing.
12/14/2023 c43 DarkRavie
I really like this story. It's an excellent read and I look forward to reading what happens in your next chapter.
I really like this story. It's an excellent read and I look forward to reading what happens in your next chapter.
11/26/2023 c43 Home World Security
A beautiful story. I can’t wait to see more. Keep up the great work.
A beautiful story. I can’t wait to see more. Keep up the great work.
10/12/2023 c2 Guest
Poor dog. Gave his life for a bitch who cares more about his abusers than his savior and only friend.
Poor dog. Gave his life for a bitch who cares more about his abusers than his savior and only friend.