for Black Rock Shooter Stella's New Home10/23/2012 c3 Dark Neko Master
Hiya! I felt too lazy to log in to my fanfic account so I just reviewed like this. I like your story a lot. You got a nice plot there & I love your OCs especially the twins. Hope you continue soon *gives you cookie*
Hiya! I felt too lazy to log in to my fanfic account so I just reviewed like this. I like your story a lot. You got a nice plot there & I love your OCs especially the twins. Hope you continue soon *gives you cookie*
9/15/2012 c3 
19The Black Maiden
Nya! Things are getting exciting! Some of the OC's you told me about have showed up, good to see them.
Wait, so Stella is considered the twins' mom? And she's in high school? Huh...
Cool chapter!
19The Black MaidenNya! Things are getting exciting! Some of the OC's you told me about have showed up, good to see them.
Wait, so Stella is considered the twins' mom? And she's in high school? Huh...
Cool chapter!
9/14/2012 c3 5rst64tlc
you're alive! I don't really see any mistakes this time and things are getting interesting. great job. I wonder how Mato and Stella are going to react when they met. Keep up the good work.
5rst64tlcyou're alive! I don't really see any mistakes this time and things are getting interesting. great job. I wonder how Mato and Stella are going to react when they met. Keep up the good work.
9/2/2012 c2 Fallenangel
Will black rock appear ?
Will black rock appear ?
8/22/2012 c2 2Mister House
Not bad, I sort of see some vibe from Life in here, but it's made in your own way, so that's good. There are grammar mistakes here and there, not to mention, the entire second chapter is in bold. I would suggest going over your future chapters first to locate some mistakes in grammar and punctuation. Other than that, keep up the good work.
Mister House
2Mister HouseNot bad, I sort of see some vibe from Life in here, but it's made in your own way, so that's good. There are grammar mistakes here and there, not to mention, the entire second chapter is in bold. I would suggest going over your future chapters first to locate some mistakes in grammar and punctuation. Other than that, keep up the good work.
Mister House
8/18/2012 c2 19The Black Maiden
Sorry I haven't reveiwed until now. This whole thing looks great! (Glad you used my idea of Grey working in a frozen yogurt shop)
The twins are so cute! I'm glad to have been of help! Post more soon, nee?
19The Black MaidenSorry I haven't reveiwed until now. This whole thing looks great! (Glad you used my idea of Grey working in a frozen yogurt shop)
The twins are so cute! I'm glad to have been of help! Post more soon, nee?
8/18/2012 c2 8The Kunoichi
I loved the part about Dead Master's dream, that was hilarious! Good Job, I can't wait to see what happens next! :)
8The KunoichiI loved the part about Dead Master's dream, that was hilarious! Good Job, I can't wait to see what happens next! :)
8/18/2012 c2 5rst64tlc
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! you used Chibi Rock in this, EPIC! I alos love the these parts: "THIS IS ISN'T FUNNY! THIS IS AN INTERNATIONAL CRISIS" and "You killed their fantasies". I'm definatly going to remember these part for a long time.
Ok the chapter rant: As soon as I read to the point of the Over-world had a change, I was kind of spectial about it...until I read the rest of it, the communtairy saved it. Mato also saw the twins, I can wait until she see Stella and see the reaction that follows it. Also I wonder what the other girl reaction when they find out. Great chapter.
5rst64tlcHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! you used Chibi Rock in this, EPIC! I alos love the these parts: "THIS IS ISN'T FUNNY! THIS IS AN INTERNATIONAL CRISIS" and "You killed their fantasies". I'm definatly going to remember these part for a long time.
Ok the chapter rant: As soon as I read to the point of the Over-world had a change, I was kind of spectial about it...until I read the rest of it, the communtairy saved it. Mato also saw the twins, I can wait until she see Stella and see the reaction that follows it. Also I wonder what the other girl reaction when they find out. Great chapter.
8/12/2012 c1 rst64tlc
Intresting idea youhave here. A game and TV crossover, I think your the only on to do this. Great job. Also, I noticed that even though Stella and Grey and the twins have thoses contact lens and Bracelets, how are the twins going to hide their horns? You only stated that it just dims down their power level. Anyways can't wait for the next chapter.
P.S. in the T.V. universe, what time does this take place? or are you just going to make stuff up? either doesn't matter to me, just curious.
Intresting idea youhave here. A game and TV crossover, I think your the only on to do this. Great job. Also, I noticed that even though Stella and Grey and the twins have thoses contact lens and Bracelets, how are the twins going to hide their horns? You only stated that it just dims down their power level. Anyways can't wait for the next chapter.
P.S. in the T.V. universe, what time does this take place? or are you just going to make stuff up? either doesn't matter to me, just curious.
8/10/2012 c1 11noirheart
This is a good story overall, a good idea and the flow is smooth. But sorry, I have a few complaints about your story. I'm not a good writer, so I'll try to explain from a reader's point of view
I have a feeling that this story is a bit rushed. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you did not bother to explain about how stella knew gold saw, or what is her motives to help stella, and there is an inconsistency when you said the trip to another dimension is a one way deal, but how come gold saw could make a deal to the lanlord ang going back to stella's dimension?
The other thing that I must point out is your lack of description. You did not even mention how the apartment looks like, the environment, the outfit that the group wore when blending to the real world, and lack of the character's thought. Like I want to know how grey and stella's thought all about this sudden change in their life, mirror themselves if the decision is correct, etc
This a good one, don't let my complaints demotivate you, make it as a suggestion to improve your writing style. Lastly, I'll wait for the next chapter. :)
11noirheartThis is a good story overall, a good idea and the flow is smooth. But sorry, I have a few complaints about your story. I'm not a good writer, so I'll try to explain from a reader's point of view
I have a feeling that this story is a bit rushed. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you did not bother to explain about how stella knew gold saw, or what is her motives to help stella, and there is an inconsistency when you said the trip to another dimension is a one way deal, but how come gold saw could make a deal to the lanlord ang going back to stella's dimension?
The other thing that I must point out is your lack of description. You did not even mention how the apartment looks like, the environment, the outfit that the group wore when blending to the real world, and lack of the character's thought. Like I want to know how grey and stella's thought all about this sudden change in their life, mirror themselves if the decision is correct, etc
This a good one, don't let my complaints demotivate you, make it as a suggestion to improve your writing style. Lastly, I'll wait for the next chapter. :)