for Tales of the World: Legendary hero of Kudo family9/5/2012 c3 
12Gay-critical-passion
Personally I think you should just stick to an omniscient third person Point of View, which saves the trouble of saying who's eyes we're looking through and you can transition into different scenes more smoothly. This is just me nit-picking.
12Gay-critical-passionPersonally I think you should just stick to an omniscient third person Point of View, which saves the trouble of saying who's eyes we're looking through and you can transition into different scenes more smoothly. This is just me nit-picking.
8/13/2012 c1 Gay-critical-passion
You might want to read through again for grammar, there are several sentences that are missing words or have the wrong word.
You might want to read through again for grammar, there are several sentences that are missing words or have the wrong word.