for Lightning and Servant: Assassin10/31/2012 c1 A simple fool
I didn't expect to find something as good as this here but I did so please update soon.
I didn't expect to find something as good as this here but I did so please update soon.
10/31/2012 c1 
4Farmer Kyle
Interesting. I look forward to seeing who else you decide to summon. I thought your description of Assassin was fine compared to your own. You managed to get all the details while I skimmed over some, like the scars and tattoos. On the other hand, I was able to get the major ones quickly while you got a little too wordy. Again, looking forward to updates!
Good Luck in Life and Writing!
Farmer Kyle
4Farmer KyleInteresting. I look forward to seeing who else you decide to summon. I thought your description of Assassin was fine compared to your own. You managed to get all the details while I skimmed over some, like the scars and tattoos. On the other hand, I was able to get the major ones quickly while you got a little too wordy. Again, looking forward to updates!
Good Luck in Life and Writing!
Farmer Kyle
10/24/2012 c1 1Toby860
in this story lightning and servant assassin I think you should pair him with a slytherin maybe Daphne Greengrass or Tracy Davis. sommoning a servant would be a slytherin type of move as it is crafty and cunning. when you plan to do the story where he summons are Ryder classes survant I would pair him with rider herself as Medusa.
1Toby860in this story lightning and servant assassin I think you should pair him with a slytherin maybe Daphne Greengrass or Tracy Davis. sommoning a servant would be a slytherin type of move as it is crafty and cunning. when you plan to do the story where he summons are Ryder classes survant I would pair him with rider herself as Medusa.
10/4/2012 c1 3MWkillkenny84
Harry... and F/A's Assassin, called in the fandom Loli!Jack?
Oh poor Death Eathers, I pity them, seriously!
Umh... not to ruin your AN, but I can see Caster/Medea bond with Harry (given her past as both mother and witch). And go Mama Bear on the fools that will TRY to harm him...
I suggest Harry/Hermione and/or Harry/Luna (I'm a Lunar Harmony fan) for the parings, for now.
Can I suggest Extra!Caster aka Tamamo-no-Mae for the Caster class and FSN!Rider/Medusa for the Rider class?
Vote: 10
3MWkillkenny84Harry... and F/A's Assassin, called in the fandom Loli!Jack?
Oh poor Death Eathers, I pity them, seriously!
Umh... not to ruin your AN, but I can see Caster/Medea bond with Harry (given her past as both mother and witch). And go Mama Bear on the fools that will TRY to harm him...
I suggest Harry/Hermione and/or Harry/Luna (I'm a Lunar Harmony fan) for the parings, for now.
Can I suggest Extra!Caster aka Tamamo-no-Mae for the Caster class and FSN!Rider/Medusa for the Rider class?
Vote: 10
9/9/2012 c1 manakel
this is not bad, the diary gives a really dramatic side of history serving, Jack the Ripper and more a serving than I prefer, I expected to see more.
this is not bad, the diary gives a really dramatic side of history serving, Jack the Ripper and more a serving than I prefer, I expected to see more.
8/27/2012 c1 Falvern
Interesting story and choice for Harry's Servant. I'm not very familiar with the Nasuverse, and only recently have I gotten hooked on it. But I've looked up quite a few things on the Type Moon wiki. Imagine my surprise when I found out that Jack the Ripper was a young girl instead of a full grown man. But she's a rather fitting choice for Harry in this story. Both as an individual and as a Servant of the Assassin class.
Pairing wise, I'm not sure. While I am greatly relieved that this won't be a Yaoi story (which is overwhelmingly frequent in the Harry Potter crossover archive), I don't really want to see him end up with anyone from Harry Potter canon either. Is there any chance of pairing him with someone from the Nasuverse? Or are you only taking certain elements and characters from it and not making it a full crossover?
Anyway, I'll be sure to keep an eye on this story. There really are too few Harry Potter/Fate Stay night crossovers for my taste. Hopefully I'll get around to writing my own, because I have a few ideas in mind. In any case, I look forward to your next update.
Interesting story and choice for Harry's Servant. I'm not very familiar with the Nasuverse, and only recently have I gotten hooked on it. But I've looked up quite a few things on the Type Moon wiki. Imagine my surprise when I found out that Jack the Ripper was a young girl instead of a full grown man. But she's a rather fitting choice for Harry in this story. Both as an individual and as a Servant of the Assassin class.
Pairing wise, I'm not sure. While I am greatly relieved that this won't be a Yaoi story (which is overwhelmingly frequent in the Harry Potter crossover archive), I don't really want to see him end up with anyone from Harry Potter canon either. Is there any chance of pairing him with someone from the Nasuverse? Or are you only taking certain elements and characters from it and not making it a full crossover?
Anyway, I'll be sure to keep an eye on this story. There really are too few Harry Potter/Fate Stay night crossovers for my taste. Hopefully I'll get around to writing my own, because I have a few ideas in mind. In any case, I look forward to your next update.
8/25/2012 c1 68michelous
Fate/Apocrypha wasn't canceled well the game was but it will be a novel series now
68michelousFate/Apocrypha wasn't canceled well the game was but it will be a novel series now
8/23/2012 c1 Phoenix Dragoon
Great story i love the idea and Jackie just dosent get used enough.
Also harry's british not Japanese so right here:
"Harry tried to ignore her outfit and the voice in his head that was accusing him of being a lolicon to take a better look on her physical appearance instead"
Should be pedifile not lolicon.
Great story i love the idea and Jackie just dosent get used enough.
Also harry's british not Japanese so right here:
"Harry tried to ignore her outfit and the voice in his head that was accusing him of being a lolicon to take a better look on her physical appearance instead"
Should be pedifile not lolicon.
8/19/2012 c1 Blinded in a bolthole
TYPE-moon certainly knows how to twist everything to fit the cruel and vicious world of magic the picture, an example being ending of Kiritsugu's drea, or the broken girl that is Jack the Ripper.
Good start. Though summoning a servant without a Holy Grail to back the ritual needs an absurd amount of mana, so am I right to assume there is a Holy War going on?
If yes, then consider bringing or at least mentioning Einzberns, after all they are the ones responsible for making a host for the Grail.
Keep it up!
TYPE-moon certainly knows how to twist everything to fit the cruel and vicious world of magic the picture, an example being ending of Kiritsugu's drea, or the broken girl that is Jack the Ripper.
Good start. Though summoning a servant without a Holy Grail to back the ritual needs an absurd amount of mana, so am I right to assume there is a Holy War going on?
If yes, then consider bringing or at least mentioning Einzberns, after all they are the ones responsible for making a host for the Grail.
Keep it up!
8/19/2012 c1 1EienNoSetsuna
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one! For the other servants, I think for the Saber class it would be:
Arturia Pendragon (Fate/Stay Night): Both her and Harry are bounded to duties that they have no say into, she believes in loyalty, duty, and courage thus making her a ideal sister figure and servant for him.
Nero Claudius (Fate/Extra): She represents lions and they both are disliked by the people they are protecting even though they are just doing their duties (Although Nero did execute anyone who tried to escape her Dominus Arena)
And for the Rider class, it would be:
Medusa (Fate/Stay Night): She represents snakes, they are both hated and abused by the people who they trust and they are manipulated by a certain person (For Medusa, it was Poseidon and for Harry, it was Dumbledore).
1EienNoSetsunaGreat chapter! Can't wait for the next one! For the other servants, I think for the Saber class it would be:
Arturia Pendragon (Fate/Stay Night): Both her and Harry are bounded to duties that they have no say into, she believes in loyalty, duty, and courage thus making her a ideal sister figure and servant for him.
Nero Claudius (Fate/Extra): She represents lions and they both are disliked by the people they are protecting even though they are just doing their duties (Although Nero did execute anyone who tried to escape her Dominus Arena)
And for the Rider class, it would be:
Medusa (Fate/Stay Night): She represents snakes, they are both hated and abused by the people who they trust and they are manipulated by a certain person (For Medusa, it was Poseidon and for Harry, it was Dumbledore).
8/19/2012 c1 13fg7dragon
Very nice story. I rather enjoy the "Harry summons a Servant" fanfics since they have an enormous amount of room for plot development as Harry, while mostly a wimp in cannon, has a lot of untapped potential mentioned since his sorting: "Difficult. Very difficult. Plenty of courage, I see. Not a bad mind either. There's talent, A my goodness,yes - and a nice thirst to prove yourself, now that's interesting..."
So there are plenty of facets of his personality to focus on.
Here are my suggestions for other Servants and some reasons for it:
-Playable Caster (Fate/Extra) AKA Misukume - she uses witchcraft, has been hunted a good portion of her life, and mot importantly in death she transformed into the Killing Stone (殺生石, Sesshouseki);
-Rider (Fate/stay night) AKA Medusa - she is, in a way, a female equivalent of Voldemort and something that Harry himself could have become due to all the hatred he grew up with;
-Berserker (Fate/Extra Rani route) AKA Arcueid Brunestud - destined since before birth to be a weapon against Dead Apostles just as Harry was to be against Voldemort, and later unwillingly led to the annihilation of her race, she is still rather naive in regards of the world;
-Saber (Fate/stay night) AKA Arturia Pendragon - bound by her duty to her country just as Harry is bound by the prophecy and morals to stop Voldemort, unable to die due to Avalon just as Harry is kept alive by the blood anchor Voldemort himself became through his return to physical form, she values honor, friendship and courage above all else in a person, much like Harry;
-Playable Saber (Fate/Extra) AKA Nero Claudius Caesar Augustus Germanicus - well, she likes lions a lot and... and she was poisoned at birth... yep, that's all I have to related her to Harry. Mostly, she would be a breath of fresh air with her personality, if one can look beyond the universe-sized ego. And she's hot, can't forget that.
I've suggested these servants with the additional potential to be paired with Harry. A good Archer would be EMIYA since he's suborn as hell just like Harry, and a good Lancer would be Cú Chulainn.
13fg7dragonVery nice story. I rather enjoy the "Harry summons a Servant" fanfics since they have an enormous amount of room for plot development as Harry, while mostly a wimp in cannon, has a lot of untapped potential mentioned since his sorting: "Difficult. Very difficult. Plenty of courage, I see. Not a bad mind either. There's talent, A my goodness,yes - and a nice thirst to prove yourself, now that's interesting..."
So there are plenty of facets of his personality to focus on.
Here are my suggestions for other Servants and some reasons for it:
-Playable Caster (Fate/Extra) AKA Misukume - she uses witchcraft, has been hunted a good portion of her life, and mot importantly in death she transformed into the Killing Stone (殺生石, Sesshouseki);
-Rider (Fate/stay night) AKA Medusa - she is, in a way, a female equivalent of Voldemort and something that Harry himself could have become due to all the hatred he grew up with;
-Berserker (Fate/Extra Rani route) AKA Arcueid Brunestud - destined since before birth to be a weapon against Dead Apostles just as Harry was to be against Voldemort, and later unwillingly led to the annihilation of her race, she is still rather naive in regards of the world;
-Saber (Fate/stay night) AKA Arturia Pendragon - bound by her duty to her country just as Harry is bound by the prophecy and morals to stop Voldemort, unable to die due to Avalon just as Harry is kept alive by the blood anchor Voldemort himself became through his return to physical form, she values honor, friendship and courage above all else in a person, much like Harry;
-Playable Saber (Fate/Extra) AKA Nero Claudius Caesar Augustus Germanicus - well, she likes lions a lot and... and she was poisoned at birth... yep, that's all I have to related her to Harry. Mostly, she would be a breath of fresh air with her personality, if one can look beyond the universe-sized ego. And she's hot, can't forget that.
I've suggested these servants with the additional potential to be paired with Harry. A good Archer would be EMIYA since he's suborn as hell just like Harry, and a good Lancer would be Cú Chulainn.