for Lightning and Servant: Assassin8/19/2012 c1 
15Fangking2
Too simple for a beginning. Add more length to the fic and make more scenes to reach the point of summoning. Also, did it have to be her? Why not a normal Assassin or Hundred Face? I personaly thing the Hundred Face Assassin is the best of all considering the advantage in multiple spies in any anime world. Also Jack the Ripper has personality problem that might to difficult to right about. Hunfdred Face is easy since they are mor elike effective system to perfrom duties...Jack the Ripper got mother problem and harsh childhood for you to recreate and remind.
15Fangking2Too simple for a beginning. Add more length to the fic and make more scenes to reach the point of summoning. Also, did it have to be her? Why not a normal Assassin or Hundred Face? I personaly thing the Hundred Face Assassin is the best of all considering the advantage in multiple spies in any anime world. Also Jack the Ripper has personality problem that might to difficult to right about. Hunfdred Face is easy since they are mor elike effective system to perfrom duties...Jack the Ripper got mother problem and harsh childhood for you to recreate and remind.