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10/23/2012 c7 Guest
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Ok, this is in no way a flame, because I like the idea, but this story is a jumbled mess of words!
I find it impossible to know who's speaking, and all the words started to blur together
Firstly you need gaps between each speaker, a new line
Also, characters need to have their first letter to be a capital letter, otherwise some people may have trouble telling them apart from normal words
I hope you find this helpful, and if not, oh well
10/23/2012 c7 32Princess Of Flames
Buaaaahhhh, so sad. How touchy! Oh I so loved it.
P.s there were grammatical errors
10/23/2012 c7 98's girl
neh neh its sooooooooooo sad!
10/22/2012 c7 Raifka2011
I cry...
Why I cry?!
Come on...
This is too sad...
At final all that you did in your life is what matters...
Not how long did you lived...
I am asking you...
It's going to be another chap... If yes then upload soon... If not then it was a beautiful story...
Good luck... On next time.
10/14/2012 c6 Raifka2011
Sooooo sad...
Keep writing...
Awesome chap...
On next time.
9/14/2012 c5 34AyasumiMamera
Sugar-cham wrote another sweet chapter again!
I'm so proud!
9/14/2012 c5 98's girl
i see triangle love in your story sis
9/14/2012 c5 Raifka2011
Again there are no word to describe this.
Keep writing.
On next time.
9/12/2012 c4 AyasumiMamera
That was so cute!
I really loved how you putted my OC down there.
It was so spot-on!
I can't wait to read more!
Update soon!
Lots of love!
xoxo Mamera
9/12/2012 c4 Raifka2011
So beautiful, so Kawai, so... I don't know...
Now keep writing and I read.
On next time!
9/9/2012 c1 32Princess Of Flames
Vanilla chan, what did you mean by accepting romance?
9/9/2012 c3 Raifka2011
Ohh Heat you fall sooooo in love ( like everyone else ) and what her sister is invisible or what . Come on has to be a boy who like her more then her angelic sister .
Well that's everything to upload soon , because I had to know what will happen and ...
Anyway on next time
9/2/2012 c1 3Mercury Poison
Kawai but the end is so sad still I love it
8/29/2012 c1 34AyasumiMamera
I love it already!
Teehee, I need ROMANCE!
8/29/2012 c1 Raifka2011
what means only few days to live !
anyway i expected new action
OK that all on next time !
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