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If you want to learn how to write proper fanfiction go over to Star wars section in fanfiction you'll see how Papa fanfiction is actually done what a bad name for Naruto's children cringe-worthy and they suck as well that's why you only got two chapters.
If you want to learn how to write proper fanfiction go over to Star wars section in fanfiction you'll see how Papa fanfiction is actually done what a bad name for Naruto's children cringe-worthy and they suck as well that's why you only got two chapters.
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1/25/2016 c1 Leonard
Its good but you have to make a little bit longer I mean be on the page itself and then make story itself a little bit longer looking forward to read the rest of the story but I'm hoping you can expand on it but I don't do a little bit longer cuz he got only two pages at first you might want in the first place a little bit longer you don't know me alright thanks for your story have a good evening
Its good but you have to make a little bit longer I mean be on the page itself and then make story itself a little bit longer looking forward to read the rest of the story but I'm hoping you can expand on it but I don't do a little bit longer cuz he got only two pages at first you might want in the first place a little bit longer you don't know me alright thanks for your story have a good evening
8/13/2015 c2 
31MisoSparkz
You should really continue doing this, I don't know why you stopped, anyway its your story you can do what you want. xD
31MisoSparkzYou should really continue doing this, I don't know why you stopped, anyway its your story you can do what you want. xD
5/10/2014 c2 11Timberwolfe
A great start to the great potential of a story. You have already changed Sakura's name to Hikari and one can see an evil Danzo in the way of the greater good. You have separated the future from the past and I can only wait to read what you have planned next. Keep it up! Howl!
11TimberwolfeA great start to the great potential of a story. You have already changed Sakura's name to Hikari and one can see an evil Danzo in the way of the greater good. You have separated the future from the past and I can only wait to read what you have planned next. Keep it up! Howl!
1/25/2014 c2 32Little Kunai
danzo if you dare to sniff around those kids not only will sakura knock you into next year but tsunade will add another five years to it. I guarantee it
32Little Kunaidanzo if you dare to sniff around those kids not only will sakura knock you into next year but tsunade will add another five years to it. I guarantee it
1/25/2014 c1 Little Kunai
well that's quite a thing to say to your younger self and frankly...it's not something I'd wanna from my older self
well that's quite a thing to say to your younger self and frankly...it's not something I'd wanna from my older self
10/6/2013 c2 Cloud Ex-SOLDIER
An interesting concept.
The names, I would shorten their names since they are much too long. I understand Naruto and Sakura wish to honor their parents and teachers but it is a bit ridiculous.
Knowing the future or at least a possible one definitely presents potential for the plot for Team 7.
An interesting concept.
The names, I would shorten their names since they are much too long. I understand Naruto and Sakura wish to honor their parents and teachers but it is a bit ridiculous.
Knowing the future or at least a possible one definitely presents potential for the plot for Team 7.
9/10/2013 c2 Nanai
Please update your story it's really good to read and am I hoping that sakura could be reunited back to naruto :)
Please update your story it's really good to read and am I hoping that sakura could be reunited back to naruto :)