for Harry & Gabrielle9/6/2012 c6 Geminorum
I highly suggest you change the rating on this story to M, it certainly should be rated so. Other then that great job.
I highly suggest you change the rating on this story to M, it certainly should be rated so. Other then that great job.
9/6/2012 c4 Slytherin66
A good chapter I liked how things are going in the war for Harry.
What a disappointment poor Gabrielle with the inevitable Mrs Potter about she will always be the favourite and Gabrielle cared for but not as loved. A Veela for a mortal enemy would be good and something I have not read before.
This is a great story and compelling read but I had hoped to avoid the usual characters while the pairing you do have is rather rare and if anyone deserved more than one lady its Harry the inclusion of Hermione does spoil things for me as Harry/Hermione has been done to death but at least there is no Weasley.
Hermione is girlfriend and Gabrielle is companion they are a trio a minute and the inequality starts already. Girlfriend is more intimate and companion seems like a friend nothing more.
Gabby was unexpected but Gabrielle does take longer to type. Religion was unexpected as well as it’s a grey area in the magical world even if faith, belief and intent would be important parts of magic I think.
A clever way for Riddle to learn of the prophecy without showing his forces even if his representative referring to him as the Dark Lord might cause concern or confirm Harry’s claims.
An upset Albus might cause him to rebel against the Ministry and Fudge as the Minister fears since Albus is used to getting his own way.
I have long thought for a happy and peaceful life Harry needed citizenship of another country not being British makes sense if the Ministry cause trouble they cause an international incident.
Apolline is sharp to notice the order of her children’s names Fleur as the eldest and Champion would usually be named first. Veela are beings of love, Apolline would be aware there is something between Harry and Hermione I am pleased that Gabrielle got to spend time with Harry just the two of them before Hermione became involved.
Good job Sirius I am so glad the Potter and Black fortune is safe as Albus and the Ministry would steal them both given the opportunity. I liked the idea of another magical bank as Goblins can’t be trusted.
Well said by Harry "Your Dark Lord, your problem. I dealt with him once that should be enough for anyone." Harry stopped him and saved the school as well more than once yet never got much for it points hard won, easily lost and an award that does not mean much really. A week in the sun or a cash reward would have been better.
Thanks for the clarification on the magical population size in the UK and number of Death Eaters.
Interesting I would love to know what “If I did you wouldn't be Molly Weasley now would you” meant did the fates try to warn Mr Weasley from marrying the harridan that is his wife. Did the Hogwart’s seer have another moment of clarity.
Hermione did spend less and less time with her parents as her schooling progressed I wonder if she memory charmed them to keep them safe and out of the way.
A nice detail to include Harry sitting between his ladies the relationship is progressing even if in seems inequitable to me.
A “vagabond existence” a brilliant work to use and perfect for Sirius.
A good chapter I liked how things are going in the war for Harry.
What a disappointment poor Gabrielle with the inevitable Mrs Potter about she will always be the favourite and Gabrielle cared for but not as loved. A Veela for a mortal enemy would be good and something I have not read before.
This is a great story and compelling read but I had hoped to avoid the usual characters while the pairing you do have is rather rare and if anyone deserved more than one lady its Harry the inclusion of Hermione does spoil things for me as Harry/Hermione has been done to death but at least there is no Weasley.
Hermione is girlfriend and Gabrielle is companion they are a trio a minute and the inequality starts already. Girlfriend is more intimate and companion seems like a friend nothing more.
Gabby was unexpected but Gabrielle does take longer to type. Religion was unexpected as well as it’s a grey area in the magical world even if faith, belief and intent would be important parts of magic I think.
A clever way for Riddle to learn of the prophecy without showing his forces even if his representative referring to him as the Dark Lord might cause concern or confirm Harry’s claims.
An upset Albus might cause him to rebel against the Ministry and Fudge as the Minister fears since Albus is used to getting his own way.
I have long thought for a happy and peaceful life Harry needed citizenship of another country not being British makes sense if the Ministry cause trouble they cause an international incident.
Apolline is sharp to notice the order of her children’s names Fleur as the eldest and Champion would usually be named first. Veela are beings of love, Apolline would be aware there is something between Harry and Hermione I am pleased that Gabrielle got to spend time with Harry just the two of them before Hermione became involved.
Good job Sirius I am so glad the Potter and Black fortune is safe as Albus and the Ministry would steal them both given the opportunity. I liked the idea of another magical bank as Goblins can’t be trusted.
Well said by Harry "Your Dark Lord, your problem. I dealt with him once that should be enough for anyone." Harry stopped him and saved the school as well more than once yet never got much for it points hard won, easily lost and an award that does not mean much really. A week in the sun or a cash reward would have been better.
Thanks for the clarification on the magical population size in the UK and number of Death Eaters.
Interesting I would love to know what “If I did you wouldn't be Molly Weasley now would you” meant did the fates try to warn Mr Weasley from marrying the harridan that is his wife. Did the Hogwart’s seer have another moment of clarity.
Hermione did spend less and less time with her parents as her schooling progressed I wonder if she memory charmed them to keep them safe and out of the way.
A nice detail to include Harry sitting between his ladies the relationship is progressing even if in seems inequitable to me.
A “vagabond existence” a brilliant work to use and perfect for Sirius.
9/6/2012 c3 Slytherin66
A really good chapter.
Well done Samuel getting something past Albus can’t be easy, Samuel should get an Order or Merlin 3rd class, his own chocolate frog or a Slytherin award for guile.
Given how bad Hogwarts was in 5th year students should have been going elsewhere all year. Snape had to tutor his Slytherin’s other wise they all would have failed DADA.
I liked the details on Beauxbatons not much is known or ever said about the school but I do think it would be a more refined school than Hogwarts that seemed to be survival of the strongest or most well connected with a group mentality needed to survive.
Hermione will enjoy sharing with only one person and would make co-habiting easier it was a good point that even with magic students lived out of their trunk at Hogwarts no doubt a hold over from the times Hogwarts could be attacked and a rapid exit would be required.
Minerva should be arrested for fraud telling lies to 11 year olds and getting the non-pure bloods hopes up. Hogwarts does seem to be a play ground for the British pure bloods paid for by the non-pure bloods.
An interesting change in Hermione but the classes at Beauxbatons would be handy and given her strong views on manners and swearing things Hermione wants to know or feels strongly about. It’s not often we see Hermione as more than a bookwork and happy without Harry or Ron, so cheers for that.
Using letters was a brilliant way to detail life at Beauxbatons quickly and how it differs from Hogwarts linking potions and Herbology makes sense. A nice detail to include a castle in the Scottish Highlands would be cold, damp and drifty, dreary was a good word to and sums up the weather perfectly.
Evening classes are an inspired idea as the magical world does seem rather lacking in entertainment and as a boarding school extra classes are possible and useful.
An excellent detail to include the Imperius Curse would be a real concern and about the only thing Hogwarts taught well its funny that it required a Death Eater to do it well. A good example to compare discipline at both schools the lack of consequences for misdeeds at Hogwarts had to demoralise the innocent and do nothing to promote unity within or outside the school.
I am glad Hermione is happy and it’s funny her roommate is a Quidditch fan girl.
I am post happy Harry is learning without depending on Hermione and is gaining the skills he needs to fight and to live as Harry in the books had no clue how to live or deal with the Ministry or the Goblins after Riddle was dead.
I hope Harry enjoyed potions as his mother was gifted at the subject and would want him to enjoy it even if he was not as good as her I think. I hope Harry uses liquid luck again to even the odds with the Death Eaters and Riddle should he have to fight them head on.
A good line “stay away from areas that would affect her future children” Gabrielle has made her intentions clear not a sister but a wife to Harry. That makes me happy if my some quirk of fate Harry’s daughter has her mothers looks and his eye colour that would be cool and Veela with any eye colour other than blue is not often done.
Harry as Minister of Magic of France would be fantastic, the British Ministry is too corrupt to bother working in unless Harry uses fiend fire on his first day and starts over.
Learning to dance would be a good way to please Gabrielle and the other ladies in Harry’s life as well. Harry not dancing in the books was painful he should have refused to go or made more of an effort if he did go.
Given how frosty or hostile things could get in Britain I so hope Fleur does not marry Bill, the Weasley’s were nasty to her as was Hermione but I think she will be less of a shrew now. Fleur is not safe in the UK and no Veela would want to be known as a Weasley I think. I did wonder about Fleur and what was going on with her Bill as an Order member could cause problems.
Companion is an excellent work to use it can mean much and different things but it all depends on Harry and Gabrielle and what they want to be. I like it that Harry missed her and was not shy in complementing her and showing his affection towards her. A shy Harry does get old quickly.
A good point Harry’s biggest problems in the UK were he was ignorant and isolated its no wonder he did not do as well as he could have in dealing with the public and his status when he did not understand what was happening and why.
A nice gesture by Harry to make his relationship with Gabrielle public and to ask her father. I liked the line “you were already my companion when we were at Hogwarts” the hugs were nice too.
Harry dealt with a potential conflict well and it showed some insight into the relationship between him and Gabrielle. Magical co-operation would be important and a powerful department I often wonder if events at the Tournament caused other nations to get ready to deal with Riddle should he cause trouble outside the UK or if Hogwarts and the UK caused an international incident by having two champions.
An interesting line “He was defending my daughter who is his Companion” not our daughter but it makes sense Veela would bond more closely with other Veela rather than perhaps their father like a non-Veela daughter might. Harry with a Companion would be a big feather in the cap so to speak of the Veela I wonder if Harry has allies with all Veela or just Appoline Riddle, Albus and Molly could get more than they bargained for if they try to hurt or spilt up Harry and Gabrielle.
Given the small size of the magical economy “catering to Riddle’s powerbase” makes good business sense and I think most magical people are too afraid to fight back. Hermione should write to all muggleborns about how good France is, Hogwarts class size would shrink and the pure bloods would get what they want.
The Grangers could not have been pleased when Hermione married Ron of all people. Hermione must really love Harry is she is thinking of sharing him but I hope it remains Harry/Gabrielle while I am always pleased Hermione does not end up with Ron, Hermione will complicate things between Harry and Gabrielle and just those two is a rare pairing.
I am pleased Harry is taking steps to expand his options it was such a disappointment Harry continued to take Divination knowing how useless the subject was all because Ron was a bad influence and friend to Harry. Care of Magical Creatures was not that helpful also and Hagrid while nice was a constant source of problems and trouble. Runes, warding and spell creation would all hel Harry, Business would be vital and great fun.
It was unexpected but welcome that the Grangers took steps to break Hermione of her bad habits as its not often we see them parent Hermione or for her to be told she is wrong about something.
Ron’s bigotry does not surprise me Molly is a bigot and her husband views muggles as some exotic creature and knows little about muggle culture even as a Ministry expert.
A good end to the chapter I do like it when Albus does not get his own way.
A really good chapter.
Well done Samuel getting something past Albus can’t be easy, Samuel should get an Order or Merlin 3rd class, his own chocolate frog or a Slytherin award for guile.
Given how bad Hogwarts was in 5th year students should have been going elsewhere all year. Snape had to tutor his Slytherin’s other wise they all would have failed DADA.
I liked the details on Beauxbatons not much is known or ever said about the school but I do think it would be a more refined school than Hogwarts that seemed to be survival of the strongest or most well connected with a group mentality needed to survive.
Hermione will enjoy sharing with only one person and would make co-habiting easier it was a good point that even with magic students lived out of their trunk at Hogwarts no doubt a hold over from the times Hogwarts could be attacked and a rapid exit would be required.
Minerva should be arrested for fraud telling lies to 11 year olds and getting the non-pure bloods hopes up. Hogwarts does seem to be a play ground for the British pure bloods paid for by the non-pure bloods.
An interesting change in Hermione but the classes at Beauxbatons would be handy and given her strong views on manners and swearing things Hermione wants to know or feels strongly about. It’s not often we see Hermione as more than a bookwork and happy without Harry or Ron, so cheers for that.
Using letters was a brilliant way to detail life at Beauxbatons quickly and how it differs from Hogwarts linking potions and Herbology makes sense. A nice detail to include a castle in the Scottish Highlands would be cold, damp and drifty, dreary was a good word to and sums up the weather perfectly.
Evening classes are an inspired idea as the magical world does seem rather lacking in entertainment and as a boarding school extra classes are possible and useful.
An excellent detail to include the Imperius Curse would be a real concern and about the only thing Hogwarts taught well its funny that it required a Death Eater to do it well. A good example to compare discipline at both schools the lack of consequences for misdeeds at Hogwarts had to demoralise the innocent and do nothing to promote unity within or outside the school.
I am glad Hermione is happy and it’s funny her roommate is a Quidditch fan girl.
I am post happy Harry is learning without depending on Hermione and is gaining the skills he needs to fight and to live as Harry in the books had no clue how to live or deal with the Ministry or the Goblins after Riddle was dead.
I hope Harry enjoyed potions as his mother was gifted at the subject and would want him to enjoy it even if he was not as good as her I think. I hope Harry uses liquid luck again to even the odds with the Death Eaters and Riddle should he have to fight them head on.
A good line “stay away from areas that would affect her future children” Gabrielle has made her intentions clear not a sister but a wife to Harry. That makes me happy if my some quirk of fate Harry’s daughter has her mothers looks and his eye colour that would be cool and Veela with any eye colour other than blue is not often done.
Harry as Minister of Magic of France would be fantastic, the British Ministry is too corrupt to bother working in unless Harry uses fiend fire on his first day and starts over.
Learning to dance would be a good way to please Gabrielle and the other ladies in Harry’s life as well. Harry not dancing in the books was painful he should have refused to go or made more of an effort if he did go.
Given how frosty or hostile things could get in Britain I so hope Fleur does not marry Bill, the Weasley’s were nasty to her as was Hermione but I think she will be less of a shrew now. Fleur is not safe in the UK and no Veela would want to be known as a Weasley I think. I did wonder about Fleur and what was going on with her Bill as an Order member could cause problems.
Companion is an excellent work to use it can mean much and different things but it all depends on Harry and Gabrielle and what they want to be. I like it that Harry missed her and was not shy in complementing her and showing his affection towards her. A shy Harry does get old quickly.
A good point Harry’s biggest problems in the UK were he was ignorant and isolated its no wonder he did not do as well as he could have in dealing with the public and his status when he did not understand what was happening and why.
A nice gesture by Harry to make his relationship with Gabrielle public and to ask her father. I liked the line “you were already my companion when we were at Hogwarts” the hugs were nice too.
Harry dealt with a potential conflict well and it showed some insight into the relationship between him and Gabrielle. Magical co-operation would be important and a powerful department I often wonder if events at the Tournament caused other nations to get ready to deal with Riddle should he cause trouble outside the UK or if Hogwarts and the UK caused an international incident by having two champions.
An interesting line “He was defending my daughter who is his Companion” not our daughter but it makes sense Veela would bond more closely with other Veela rather than perhaps their father like a non-Veela daughter might. Harry with a Companion would be a big feather in the cap so to speak of the Veela I wonder if Harry has allies with all Veela or just Appoline Riddle, Albus and Molly could get more than they bargained for if they try to hurt or spilt up Harry and Gabrielle.
Given the small size of the magical economy “catering to Riddle’s powerbase” makes good business sense and I think most magical people are too afraid to fight back. Hermione should write to all muggleborns about how good France is, Hogwarts class size would shrink and the pure bloods would get what they want.
The Grangers could not have been pleased when Hermione married Ron of all people. Hermione must really love Harry is she is thinking of sharing him but I hope it remains Harry/Gabrielle while I am always pleased Hermione does not end up with Ron, Hermione will complicate things between Harry and Gabrielle and just those two is a rare pairing.
I am pleased Harry is taking steps to expand his options it was such a disappointment Harry continued to take Divination knowing how useless the subject was all because Ron was a bad influence and friend to Harry. Care of Magical Creatures was not that helpful also and Hagrid while nice was a constant source of problems and trouble. Runes, warding and spell creation would all hel Harry, Business would be vital and great fun.
It was unexpected but welcome that the Grangers took steps to break Hermione of her bad habits as its not often we see them parent Hermione or for her to be told she is wrong about something.
Ron’s bigotry does not surprise me Molly is a bigot and her husband views muggles as some exotic creature and knows little about muggle culture even as a Ministry expert.
A good end to the chapter I do like it when Albus does not get his own way.
9/6/2012 c1 
2sirius009
I know that this was written in '08, and is complete so there is really nothing to review.. However, this whole chapter is rushed; things are glossed over, and there isn't any hook.
2sirius009I know that this was written in '08, and is complete so there is really nothing to review.. However, this whole chapter is rushed; things are glossed over, and there isn't any hook.
9/6/2012 c2 Slytherin66
An excellent chapter and most enjoyable read.
A really clever way to keep Harry’s location secret I had wondered why the Delacour’s had not picked Harry up.
Very sly of Hermione to remove the tracking on her wand it would explain her skill with a wand and how she is able to read so much and still do the practical part of her studies. It shows the kind of friend she is that she did not share this information with Harry which would have greatly improved his quality of life I bet Hermione was only able to get into the restricted section because of her time turner, Harry cloak and map. Hermione does not like to be the best or upstaged by anyone even her friends.
I have always thought Hogwarts was a really bad school academically and in terms of safety and well being. Many classes are poorly done, lots of danger happens even without Harry’s adventures there is still Hagrid and other magical creatures and the widespread bullying and bigotry would put many non-pure bloods off magical education or take the lustre of magic altogether.
A valid concern maybe Sirius should visit a Veela Healer and Sirius could die of shock or envy if Harry is large enough to please a Veela.
Harry’s fixation on Quidditch always confused me why play on the House team eating up hour of free time when he has a Dark Lord’s and their minions intent on killing him after Tom and Albus is dead Harry has the fame and talent to play on any team he wants. I was always so disappointed that Harry put more effort into winning Quidditch than he did killing Riddle.
Hermione as Mrs Potter would be a disaster it would not last she would boss Harry about and use him to achieve all her goals and help her causes all while Harry would be miserable and a puppet manipulated into doing what Hermione wants using her knowledge and his need to be loved. Hermione does act like a female Dumbledore when it comes to Harry.
Given the blind loyalty people have to Albus he could use the elves and Snape to potion the students. The Slytherin’s I think would be sharp enough to take steps to avoid this.
A good line "Short I need to use a bathroom." The sigh from Gabrielle was good too its not often Harry is appreciated for his appearance beyond he needs feeding or a hug.
A nice name and term of endearment “My little waif dancer” I liked the banter between mother and daughter. It a welcome change for Harry to grow in size rather than Gabrielle to remain small because Harry usually is while a little Veela would be cute Fleur was tall and Appoline is as well.
A nice choice of words “gravitates to her without thought” I think all men would be drawn to a Veela but her chosen companion more than most. I liked the subtle influence Gabrielle has on Harry behaviour as usually he is so passive or shy and never possessive when considering how little he has had and unloved he has been the opposite would be true.
I liked the idea of Harry claiming Gabrielle it seems appropriate given Veela do everything fully with no half measures and Harry showing his commitment and desire to be with her is great as he does not often say and act on what he wants rather he does what is expected.
When I think of a Veela I think of the moon something beautiful, not of this world yet admired and beyond the reach of most so “gravitates” is a good word to use thanks for that.
I liked how Harry included Gabrielle’s family name and his own the Potter name comes with considerable issues and baggage having two names would be easier and allow both Potter’s the option of only using the name when absolutely necessary. I wonder if the Potter name has any merit beyond inherited wealth which is rather unclear as to how much that is given that Harry is the last of his line any political or social influence the Potter’s might have had is gone or usurped by others with the death of Harry’s family at such a young age.
Well spoken by Harry to Sirius the man even without time in Azkaban would be rude or crude.
Home schooling is perfect for Harry and very amusing for Albus, Tom and Fudge to deal with. With no Harry all their plans are for not and Harry has little reason to return to the UK and Albus will be the sole focus of the Ministry’s endeavours to discredit him. I think Albus feared Harry leaving the UK and Hogwarts above all else. The other schools had to send Harry letters I wonder how they were dealt with the same with Harry’s fan mail. If it was left unanswered without even a notice in the paper it would go some way to explaining why the magical population of the UK were so quick to think badly of him but in the end I think they have been conditioned by Albus and the Ministry to be fickle, easily to manipulate sheep.
Ron would be upset at no Harry with no famous friend who will Ron use to get attention and his family a much needed boost in wealth and status as being friends of Harry would ensure special treatment for Ron like being Prefect and discounts or free tuition for the Weasley’s which they are sure to take advantage of. I would love to know how the Weasley’s ended up so poor and their reputation so diminished, did they loose much in wars or did they do something to merit being fined or blacklisted after all to weasel out of something is usually not a good thing or trait.
Hermione will be in for a hard time with no Harry to teach DA and only Ron for company. I do feel sorry for Luna however she could remain bullied and friendless. I liked how Albus was powerless as that does not happen often or for his plans not to go as he wished.
An unexpected change in Hermione to stand up to Authority and she was clever about it. Hermione and Ron could mature and prosper without Harry to hide behind, use or his presence over power them. Ron I think is to stupid and lazy but Hermione might gain a much needed dose of reality and self confidence or the resolve to do what she has to. As I think she stuck with Harry during the Horcrux hunt because it was a job from Albus rather than her faith in Harry. Hermione in this story might have the sense to leave the UK with her parents and not look back. As UK magical society is not worth fighting for if you are muggleborn or raised.
Harry’s skill in DADA is as vital life skill I wonder if Snape is happy Harry is gone or disappointed he can’t pick on him.
A nice way to get round the mail being read by Hermione.
Head of House Rings are cool, some good insight into magical culture I wonder if Bill grew his hair long because he is the next Head of the Weasley family or if he looks the part its better for him.
I do like this Harry a valid point everybody put too much stock in the prophecy even when dealing with Riddle’s supporters would make killing him easier and thanks so much for having Harry ask about the Death Eater who informed his master it had to be one who told him and Harry should want to know who is responsible. I always hoped Harry would kill Snape for his crimes against the Potters.
Sirius was naive in think Albus would tell Harry anything based on Harry appearance and lack of knowledge as well as lack of trial for Sirius any faith or assumptions Sirius might have had or made about Albus would be long gone. Sirius has ever reason to be angry and bitter that all his friends and leader doubted him.
That is surprising Harry kept his own council so long given he seemed to tell his friends everything but trust with Harry would be a big deal and he would not want Gabrielle to be afraid for him or regret what has happened between them. I hope Harry gets some lessons on Veela culture or history or even some insight into being with one for life.
I do wonder if a prophecy orb breaks or disappears once it has been fulfilled, both Riddle and Albus would weep if there was no record of it beyond what they have been told.
An excellent chapter and most enjoyable read.
A really clever way to keep Harry’s location secret I had wondered why the Delacour’s had not picked Harry up.
Very sly of Hermione to remove the tracking on her wand it would explain her skill with a wand and how she is able to read so much and still do the practical part of her studies. It shows the kind of friend she is that she did not share this information with Harry which would have greatly improved his quality of life I bet Hermione was only able to get into the restricted section because of her time turner, Harry cloak and map. Hermione does not like to be the best or upstaged by anyone even her friends.
I have always thought Hogwarts was a really bad school academically and in terms of safety and well being. Many classes are poorly done, lots of danger happens even without Harry’s adventures there is still Hagrid and other magical creatures and the widespread bullying and bigotry would put many non-pure bloods off magical education or take the lustre of magic altogether.
A valid concern maybe Sirius should visit a Veela Healer and Sirius could die of shock or envy if Harry is large enough to please a Veela.
Harry’s fixation on Quidditch always confused me why play on the House team eating up hour of free time when he has a Dark Lord’s and their minions intent on killing him after Tom and Albus is dead Harry has the fame and talent to play on any team he wants. I was always so disappointed that Harry put more effort into winning Quidditch than he did killing Riddle.
Hermione as Mrs Potter would be a disaster it would not last she would boss Harry about and use him to achieve all her goals and help her causes all while Harry would be miserable and a puppet manipulated into doing what Hermione wants using her knowledge and his need to be loved. Hermione does act like a female Dumbledore when it comes to Harry.
Given the blind loyalty people have to Albus he could use the elves and Snape to potion the students. The Slytherin’s I think would be sharp enough to take steps to avoid this.
A good line "Short I need to use a bathroom." The sigh from Gabrielle was good too its not often Harry is appreciated for his appearance beyond he needs feeding or a hug.
A nice name and term of endearment “My little waif dancer” I liked the banter between mother and daughter. It a welcome change for Harry to grow in size rather than Gabrielle to remain small because Harry usually is while a little Veela would be cute Fleur was tall and Appoline is as well.
A nice choice of words “gravitates to her without thought” I think all men would be drawn to a Veela but her chosen companion more than most. I liked the subtle influence Gabrielle has on Harry behaviour as usually he is so passive or shy and never possessive when considering how little he has had and unloved he has been the opposite would be true.
I liked the idea of Harry claiming Gabrielle it seems appropriate given Veela do everything fully with no half measures and Harry showing his commitment and desire to be with her is great as he does not often say and act on what he wants rather he does what is expected.
When I think of a Veela I think of the moon something beautiful, not of this world yet admired and beyond the reach of most so “gravitates” is a good word to use thanks for that.
I liked how Harry included Gabrielle’s family name and his own the Potter name comes with considerable issues and baggage having two names would be easier and allow both Potter’s the option of only using the name when absolutely necessary. I wonder if the Potter name has any merit beyond inherited wealth which is rather unclear as to how much that is given that Harry is the last of his line any political or social influence the Potter’s might have had is gone or usurped by others with the death of Harry’s family at such a young age.
Well spoken by Harry to Sirius the man even without time in Azkaban would be rude or crude.
Home schooling is perfect for Harry and very amusing for Albus, Tom and Fudge to deal with. With no Harry all their plans are for not and Harry has little reason to return to the UK and Albus will be the sole focus of the Ministry’s endeavours to discredit him. I think Albus feared Harry leaving the UK and Hogwarts above all else. The other schools had to send Harry letters I wonder how they were dealt with the same with Harry’s fan mail. If it was left unanswered without even a notice in the paper it would go some way to explaining why the magical population of the UK were so quick to think badly of him but in the end I think they have been conditioned by Albus and the Ministry to be fickle, easily to manipulate sheep.
Ron would be upset at no Harry with no famous friend who will Ron use to get attention and his family a much needed boost in wealth and status as being friends of Harry would ensure special treatment for Ron like being Prefect and discounts or free tuition for the Weasley’s which they are sure to take advantage of. I would love to know how the Weasley’s ended up so poor and their reputation so diminished, did they loose much in wars or did they do something to merit being fined or blacklisted after all to weasel out of something is usually not a good thing or trait.
Hermione will be in for a hard time with no Harry to teach DA and only Ron for company. I do feel sorry for Luna however she could remain bullied and friendless. I liked how Albus was powerless as that does not happen often or for his plans not to go as he wished.
An unexpected change in Hermione to stand up to Authority and she was clever about it. Hermione and Ron could mature and prosper without Harry to hide behind, use or his presence over power them. Ron I think is to stupid and lazy but Hermione might gain a much needed dose of reality and self confidence or the resolve to do what she has to. As I think she stuck with Harry during the Horcrux hunt because it was a job from Albus rather than her faith in Harry. Hermione in this story might have the sense to leave the UK with her parents and not look back. As UK magical society is not worth fighting for if you are muggleborn or raised.
Harry’s skill in DADA is as vital life skill I wonder if Snape is happy Harry is gone or disappointed he can’t pick on him.
A nice way to get round the mail being read by Hermione.
Head of House Rings are cool, some good insight into magical culture I wonder if Bill grew his hair long because he is the next Head of the Weasley family or if he looks the part its better for him.
I do like this Harry a valid point everybody put too much stock in the prophecy even when dealing with Riddle’s supporters would make killing him easier and thanks so much for having Harry ask about the Death Eater who informed his master it had to be one who told him and Harry should want to know who is responsible. I always hoped Harry would kill Snape for his crimes against the Potters.
Sirius was naive in think Albus would tell Harry anything based on Harry appearance and lack of knowledge as well as lack of trial for Sirius any faith or assumptions Sirius might have had or made about Albus would be long gone. Sirius has ever reason to be angry and bitter that all his friends and leader doubted him.
That is surprising Harry kept his own council so long given he seemed to tell his friends everything but trust with Harry would be a big deal and he would not want Gabrielle to be afraid for him or regret what has happened between them. I hope Harry gets some lessons on Veela culture or history or even some insight into being with one for life.
I do wonder if a prophecy orb breaks or disappears once it has been fulfilled, both Riddle and Albus would weep if there was no record of it beyond what they have been told.
9/6/2012 c6 2mwinter1
I think i read this somewhere else. Are you posting this again after the FFN perg?
2mwinter1I think i read this somewhere else. Are you posting this again after the FFN perg?
9/6/2012 c6 MiFo71
Nice story, will it end at chapter 6, or will there be hope for more?
Thanks for sharing anyway.
Nice story, will it end at chapter 6, or will there be hope for more?
Thanks for sharing anyway.
9/6/2012 c1 Slytherin66
An excellent chapter I do love Harry with a Veela and Harry/Gabrielle is still rather rare.
A great line “"I was you dolt. Now shut up and leave us be. We are not ready to get up." I liked Harry’s thinking as well as a Champion what is the worst they can do disqualify him which he would want I think.
I always wondered about Gabrielle’s age 8 or 9 would be too young to take to Hogwarts and magical UK does not treat non-humans well so she would be in danger and be able to defend herself. I am pleased Gabrielle got to know Harry as she is the one girl he saved he did not know well in the books.
A good name for Hogwarts “mausoleum of a castle”
Harry’s thoughts on the points loss was funny, Minerva always seemed rather harsh on Harry, his head of house needs a good man and still drink perhaps to help her relax. At least Harry’s reputation got a boost from his visitor and there are worse things to loose points over.
Harry’s impulse to reach for Gabrielle was a nice detail to include. A funny line “"What did I do this time?"
I liked the details on Veela their traits do seem dominant and for all the fuss made about the power of love and Harry’s capacity for it I am glad he has a Veela for a companion he would need and deserve the love of a Veela to make up for his fate and lack of love so far in his life.
A pity Draco’s hair or crotch was not set on fire.
It good Harry is not telling Hermione everything as really its not her business and her need to know everything would get irritating quickly especially as she does not tell him everything.
Thanks for doing something with the Basilisk as its often forgotten about and Harry should profit from his heroics and he did save the school again and did not get much for it considering the accomplishment.
Snape unhappy is always a good thing and his reputation as a potion master would be diminished given his teaching methods.
Hermione does harp on and is very much like Molly, Bossy, convinced she is right and determined to get her own way.
A well done twist to end the third task and deal with the scar Horcrux if Albus tries to send Harry to his death this time Gabrielle will set his beard on fire and he might have to duck fireballs every time he notices blond hair.
It makes sense for a Veela to be protected from memory charms and other mind magic as they would be prime targets for them.
It was welcome but unexpected so many students would defend Harry given his reputation in the school, Ron’s prat like behaviour and Hermione’s devotion to Authority.
I am pleased Harry was given hugs and talked to after the task a crushing hug and potion really did not deal with Harry’s emotions and he needs lots of nice hugs considering he did not get any growing up.
It’s very rare for anyone with power to defend or protect Harry but it was good of Gabrielle's father to do so. French citizenship would be ideal for Harry as he would never be left alone in the UK.
Joseph would need to be a good man or a formidable man to be worthy of a Veela wife I always enjoy it when Albus, Snape and Fudge can’t use or bully Harry. I did wonder how the Tournament was reported in France.
It does not surprise me the Hogwarts students would attack Harry and the French students why Harry ever fought and died for such a fickle people I don’t know as I expected Harry to be killed or sent to Azkaban after he killed Riddle in the books.
A very effective way to deal with the Dursley’s and the Order is rather useless.
It’s good that Harry is expressing his feelings more, I did think when he woke up he would have a companion again.
I have always liked Appoline and a French Veela would have fabulous taste in clothing, British magical fashion sense seemed to go from Black to Albus with little in between. A shopping trip for Harry is a must and it would do wonders for his self confidence.
A great point about Ludo Bagman I always wondered if he really was a Death Eater as well.
It was a nice turn of phrase from Sirius and I liked the play on word considering his animal form "Mr. Black!" brought Sirius to heel. I could picture Sirius being trained to be a good dog by a Veela.
A really clever way to combine the change in Gabrielle to giving Harry a much needed growth spurt. I am always pleased when a way is found to help Harry recover from the abuse the Dursley’s inflicted on him. They really should be jailed or Riddle does his one good deed and kills them not that the blood wards are worthless given Tom took Harry’s blood and Harry being absent.
A funny father moment from Joseph having a Veela daughter would be hard on a father.
A great ending to the chapter the reaction of Gabrielle protecting Harry was a funny I wonder if Fleur or Appoline would need to dodge fire balls also.
An excellent chapter I do love Harry with a Veela and Harry/Gabrielle is still rather rare.
A great line “"I was you dolt. Now shut up and leave us be. We are not ready to get up." I liked Harry’s thinking as well as a Champion what is the worst they can do disqualify him which he would want I think.
I always wondered about Gabrielle’s age 8 or 9 would be too young to take to Hogwarts and magical UK does not treat non-humans well so she would be in danger and be able to defend herself. I am pleased Gabrielle got to know Harry as she is the one girl he saved he did not know well in the books.
A good name for Hogwarts “mausoleum of a castle”
Harry’s thoughts on the points loss was funny, Minerva always seemed rather harsh on Harry, his head of house needs a good man and still drink perhaps to help her relax. At least Harry’s reputation got a boost from his visitor and there are worse things to loose points over.
Harry’s impulse to reach for Gabrielle was a nice detail to include. A funny line “"What did I do this time?"
I liked the details on Veela their traits do seem dominant and for all the fuss made about the power of love and Harry’s capacity for it I am glad he has a Veela for a companion he would need and deserve the love of a Veela to make up for his fate and lack of love so far in his life.
A pity Draco’s hair or crotch was not set on fire.
It good Harry is not telling Hermione everything as really its not her business and her need to know everything would get irritating quickly especially as she does not tell him everything.
Thanks for doing something with the Basilisk as its often forgotten about and Harry should profit from his heroics and he did save the school again and did not get much for it considering the accomplishment.
Snape unhappy is always a good thing and his reputation as a potion master would be diminished given his teaching methods.
Hermione does harp on and is very much like Molly, Bossy, convinced she is right and determined to get her own way.
A well done twist to end the third task and deal with the scar Horcrux if Albus tries to send Harry to his death this time Gabrielle will set his beard on fire and he might have to duck fireballs every time he notices blond hair.
It makes sense for a Veela to be protected from memory charms and other mind magic as they would be prime targets for them.
It was welcome but unexpected so many students would defend Harry given his reputation in the school, Ron’s prat like behaviour and Hermione’s devotion to Authority.
I am pleased Harry was given hugs and talked to after the task a crushing hug and potion really did not deal with Harry’s emotions and he needs lots of nice hugs considering he did not get any growing up.
It’s very rare for anyone with power to defend or protect Harry but it was good of Gabrielle's father to do so. French citizenship would be ideal for Harry as he would never be left alone in the UK.
Joseph would need to be a good man or a formidable man to be worthy of a Veela wife I always enjoy it when Albus, Snape and Fudge can’t use or bully Harry. I did wonder how the Tournament was reported in France.
It does not surprise me the Hogwarts students would attack Harry and the French students why Harry ever fought and died for such a fickle people I don’t know as I expected Harry to be killed or sent to Azkaban after he killed Riddle in the books.
A very effective way to deal with the Dursley’s and the Order is rather useless.
It’s good that Harry is expressing his feelings more, I did think when he woke up he would have a companion again.
I have always liked Appoline and a French Veela would have fabulous taste in clothing, British magical fashion sense seemed to go from Black to Albus with little in between. A shopping trip for Harry is a must and it would do wonders for his self confidence.
A great point about Ludo Bagman I always wondered if he really was a Death Eater as well.
It was a nice turn of phrase from Sirius and I liked the play on word considering his animal form "Mr. Black!" brought Sirius to heel. I could picture Sirius being trained to be a good dog by a Veela.
A really clever way to combine the change in Gabrielle to giving Harry a much needed growth spurt. I am always pleased when a way is found to help Harry recover from the abuse the Dursley’s inflicted on him. They really should be jailed or Riddle does his one good deed and kills them not that the blood wards are worthless given Tom took Harry’s blood and Harry being absent.
A funny father moment from Joseph having a Veela daughter would be hard on a father.
A great ending to the chapter the reaction of Gabrielle protecting Harry was a funny I wonder if Fleur or Appoline would need to dodge fire balls also.
9/6/2012 c6 11Herne-of-the-lantern
I like it. Is this complete? If so, you might want to change the satus to complete.
11Herne-of-the-lanternI like it. Is this complete? If so, you might want to change the satus to complete.