for Harry & Gabrielle10/24/2022 c4 crashthisnow
I'm very disappointed, harry is not some f u ... Toy and this was seemingly leading into a romantic story with Gabriel not Hermione and in such a cold and uncaring way to boot.
I'm very disappointed, harry is not some f u ... Toy and this was seemingly leading into a romantic story with Gabriel not Hermione and in such a cold and uncaring way to boot.
9/24/2022 c2 Guest
Vt
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8/22/2022 c6 
2shadewatcher
*cackles* who knew the power he knew not was a wand with a hair from Harry Potter as it mixed core wielded by a cousin of his father. Love it!
2shadewatcher*cackles* who knew the power he knew not was a wand with a hair from Harry Potter as it mixed core wielded by a cousin of his father. Love it!
6/28/2022 c2 1Fellbane
I will never understand authors that create their Harry as this strange dichotomy of conflicting traits. He is a 6ft tall, handsome, muscled Adonis with more magical power than an active volcano and has an incredibly beautiful Veela who wants nothing more than to sleep with him yet he’s also emotionally stunted, rather slow to catch on, blushes when holding hands and has zero self confidence.
It is, in a word, infuriating.
1FellbaneI will never understand authors that create their Harry as this strange dichotomy of conflicting traits. He is a 6ft tall, handsome, muscled Adonis with more magical power than an active volcano and has an incredibly beautiful Veela who wants nothing more than to sleep with him yet he’s also emotionally stunted, rather slow to catch on, blushes when holding hands and has zero self confidence.
It is, in a word, infuriating.
5/15/2022 c2 4Khatix
I hope Harry doesn't grow his hair long like Sirius described but gets the ring. Wearing his hair long like that is a Pureblood thing and his parents died fighting a war against a man who wanted Pureblood supremacy.
4KhatixI hope Harry doesn't grow his hair long like Sirius described but gets the ring. Wearing his hair long like that is a Pureblood thing and his parents died fighting a war against a man who wanted Pureblood supremacy.
4/24/2022 c2 Raven
Way to butcher the Grangers first
Thier names are Emma Granger and Daniel Granger.
Nobody in thier right name would call them anything would you like it if someone called your parents Mary and Herbert?
Way to butcher the Grangers first
Thier names are Emma Granger and Daniel Granger.
Nobody in thier right name would call them anything would you like it if someone called your parents Mary and Herbert?
4/23/2022 c1 Gaius
She would be 13 as she is the same age as Ginny and Luna and Astoria Harry is 14 so is Ron and Hermione. Read the story book.
She would be 13 as she is the same age as Ginny and Luna and Astoria Harry is 14 so is Ron and Hermione. Read the story book.
4/23/2022 c1 Sandy
This should be a 56 chapter story. You ended it way too soon.
This should be a 56 chapter story. You ended it way too soon.
2/22/2022 c3 Guest
I thought this was called, "Harry & Gabrielle", not "Mary Sue Mudblood plus Harry & Gabrielle".
I thought this was called, "Harry & Gabrielle", not "Mary Sue Mudblood plus Harry & Gabrielle".
2/21/2022 c3 wtf
kill that fucking mudblood granger with a ak dumb fucking bush bitch
kill that fucking mudblood granger with a ak dumb fucking bush bitch
10/4/2021 c4 majere4
Wow... so, he's praying for her every night, but doesn't even write her to let her know where he is for 9 months? bleh
Ok, I'm over it, I won't belabor the point.
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"Can you determine where they would be going?" Harry asked drawing a roll of the eyeballs from Hermione. "Sorry my girlfriend has informed me that was a stupid question.
"
He certainly accepted the 'bond' easily enough...
I love that they are blowing off the Brits, "your dark lord..." and all that, loved it.
annnnd, bam, they're married. Triad... whatever. You never even gave us a scene of Harry with either girl doing anything remotely romantic or emotionally intimate. It's like you went from a detailed story to an overview, not even worth being called a Cliff's Notes version of events.
Wow... so, he's praying for her every night, but doesn't even write her to let her know where he is for 9 months? bleh
Ok, I'm over it, I won't belabor the point.
"
"Can you determine where they would be going?" Harry asked drawing a roll of the eyeballs from Hermione. "Sorry my girlfriend has informed me that was a stupid question.
"
He certainly accepted the 'bond' easily enough...
I love that they are blowing off the Brits, "your dark lord..." and all that, loved it.
annnnd, bam, they're married. Triad... whatever. You never even gave us a scene of Harry with either girl doing anything remotely romantic or emotionally intimate. It's like you went from a detailed story to an overview, not even worth being called a Cliff's Notes version of events.
10/4/2021 c3 majere4
I'm really confused. Why would we think that Hermione is important to Harry? He didn't so much as consider writing her for the better part of a year and now, suddenly she's his mate? Ridiculous.
You don't dismiss a person completely from your mind so easily unless they are literally not worth the time to think about. Again, I realize that he's a teenaged boy and he's been through a ton of changes, but if Hermione (or Ron, Neville, Mrs. Weasley, etc...) were of any importance to him, wouldn't he want to share those experiences with them? Obviously not.
You've done a wonderful job with the characters and the storytelling, but you dropped the ball - and ran it over - with this plot failure.
I'm really confused. Why would we think that Hermione is important to Harry? He didn't so much as consider writing her for the better part of a year and now, suddenly she's his mate? Ridiculous.
You don't dismiss a person completely from your mind so easily unless they are literally not worth the time to think about. Again, I realize that he's a teenaged boy and he's been through a ton of changes, but if Hermione (or Ron, Neville, Mrs. Weasley, etc...) were of any importance to him, wouldn't he want to share those experiences with them? Obviously not.
You've done a wonderful job with the characters and the storytelling, but you dropped the ball - and ran it over - with this plot failure.
10/4/2021 c2 majere4
Loving the details, some 'revisionist history' that fills in the gaps and makes perfect sense for why magical Britain is so backward.
I'm a bit disappointed with Harry, he never gave so much as a passing thought to Hermione. I know that he's been busy, but I thought, perhaps, that she meant more to him (in this story) but that's obviously not the case.
Loving the details, some 'revisionist history' that fills in the gaps and makes perfect sense for why magical Britain is so backward.
I'm a bit disappointed with Harry, he never gave so much as a passing thought to Hermione. I know that he's been busy, but I thought, perhaps, that she meant more to him (in this story) but that's obviously not the case.
10/4/2021 c1 majere4
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After several moments Harry replied, "I would like to avoid that if possible but I trust Gabrielle's father to act in my best interest."
Joseph sat back for a moment himself. This was the first time he could recall being addressed not as Joseph Delacour head of one of the more secretive departments in the French Ministry of Magic, nor Apolline's husband as the Veela nation addressed him, Harry trusted him as Gabrielle's father. Joseph figured that ranked as high as Apolline's husband and both were far above anything else. "Mr. Potter you honor me," he finally said rising and taking his wife's hand led her and Harry to the door while telling their daughters to wait.
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I am very happy with the way you write your characters and this impressed me enough that I just had to mention it.
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Sirius took a sip of wine muttering to himself, "The poor kid can't catch a break. He's in bed with a Veela and he's unconscious."
"
While this gave me a laugh, the whole 'SuperVeela!Harry' thing makes me cringe. I hope he isn't too over-the-top powerful.
Also, you haven't mentioned anything about the fact that the Aurors arriving in the graveyard saw tom, the rat and/or junior's testimony, or the change in the cattle brand.
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After several moments Harry replied, "I would like to avoid that if possible but I trust Gabrielle's father to act in my best interest."
Joseph sat back for a moment himself. This was the first time he could recall being addressed not as Joseph Delacour head of one of the more secretive departments in the French Ministry of Magic, nor Apolline's husband as the Veela nation addressed him, Harry trusted him as Gabrielle's father. Joseph figured that ranked as high as Apolline's husband and both were far above anything else. "Mr. Potter you honor me," he finally said rising and taking his wife's hand led her and Harry to the door while telling their daughters to wait.
"
I am very happy with the way you write your characters and this impressed me enough that I just had to mention it.
"
Sirius took a sip of wine muttering to himself, "The poor kid can't catch a break. He's in bed with a Veela and he's unconscious."
"
While this gave me a laugh, the whole 'SuperVeela!Harry' thing makes me cringe. I hope he isn't too over-the-top powerful.
Also, you haven't mentioned anything about the fact that the Aurors arriving in the graveyard saw tom, the rat and/or junior's testimony, or the change in the cattle brand.
8/13/2021 c1 jesmith2095
Good Day,
Not sure if you are still getting reviews, but I just wanted to share my thoughts about your story. I LOVED the twist at the end, with Harry's "hand", unknown to all, helping to end Voldermort. The story was well written and I enjoyed it from start to finish.
Jeff
Good Day,
Not sure if you are still getting reviews, but I just wanted to share my thoughts about your story. I LOVED the twist at the end, with Harry's "hand", unknown to all, helping to end Voldermort. The story was well written and I enjoyed it from start to finish.
Jeff