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1/29/2013 c4 justjoe
I'm sorry, but this story is all over the place and, frankly doesn't make much sense. There is no context to what is going, just action. I don't know who any of the characters are besides their names. I have no emotional attachment to anything that is going on.

I find myself not caring about anything going on. Moreover, the Minbari would have no chance against those three powers. So, how could this war be compelling?

So I ask you, what is the purpose of this story? I'm surprised that you even mentioned AlbertG's work, as that's in another universe compared to this.
1/22/2013 c7 27King Hawke
this is a very detailed, militarily sound story with much research put into it. It is possible to get lost in all the technical details, but if one does not, then they can enjoy the story immensely. the Enterprise touch was well done. you are starting to use more well-known names, so that helps keep the story cohesive & interesting. It will be interesting to see how the Dark reacts to everything. keep up the good work.
1/22/2013 c7 3MWkillkenny84
MAI sottovalutare il sadismo umano, o potrebbe essere l'ultima cosa che fai in vita tua!
Bel capitolo ed ottima entrata in scena degli alleati alieni locali.
Penso che, se il Consiglio dei Grigi riesce a rientrare a Minbar, gli addetti dell'Intelligence riceveranno UN ALTRO carico di legnate per il loro pessimo lavoro.
Noto una certa ironia nel fatto che la nave che ha dato il colpo di 'addio' alla flotta Minbari abbia il nome Gun God...
Voto: 10
1/21/2013 c7 4Major Simi
Well looks like the EA got some more allies in the fight against the minbari , anyway great chapter Iran the details of the fight and ships, well done
1/11/2013 c6 3MWkillkenny84
Ok, i Minbari qua hanno iniziato a farsi furbi.
Peccato solo che gli avversari abbiano più esperienza in merito.
Ok, a quando le BRUTTE sorprese (tipo le torpedini al plasma Romulane)?
Voto: 10
12/25/2012 c5 4darkplayer35
Very interesting take on the Babylon 5/ Star Trek crossover. I look forward to seeing how it develops further. Keep up the great work and it has a ton of potential. Please update soon.
12/15/2012 c5 3MWkillkenny84
BWHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHA!
Oddei, quasi mi dispiace per i Minbari... ho detto QUASI.
Una domanda: quanti scienziati Federali, Klingon e Romulani si stanno godendo lo spettacolo tramite il Guardiano del Sempre?
Ancora meglio: potrebbero le azioni dei Vorlon far inc*zzare il Guardiano e farlo attivare (o far incazzare Guinan, il che è peggio)?
Voto: 10
12/13/2012 c2 Trife
Well I have to say that with the Romulans, Klingons, and the Federation all at war against the Mimbari the EA might as well sit back and watch the show how ever short that will be.

The sheer power of the weapons they will be gunning for the Mimbar will destroy any ship it hits. Specially the torpedoes.

Trife
11/18/2012 c2 13Olaf74
I have just 2 words "SIMPLY FANTASTIC!"!MORE!
11/16/2012 c4 3MWkillkenny84
Bel capitolo.
E Brammer ridusse (o fece ridurre) a nà monnezza ANCHE gli ufficiali della cosiddetta Intelligenza Militare (che già il titolo di per sè è un ossimoro) Minbari.
Una domanda: li hanno ancora i progetti per i computer militari M-5 quelli della Federazione, così, per far venire crisi di nervi ai Minbari?
Altra cosa: qualcuno farà notare che, anche se i Klingon le navi le costruiscono relativamente male, i loro vascelli sono COMUNQUE dei tremendi incassatori (ci sono voluti ALMENO quattro siluri fotonici, da parte di Enterprise ed Excelsior, prima che il Bird of Prey di Chang venisse distrutto)?
Voto: 10
10/26/2012 c3 orionastro
grat story , so far now with Tech abble to breach the stealth of the Minbar, Eart force will be abble to hold them back , and start ofensive operations against the Minbari, cant ardly wait for the next chapter
10/8/2012 c3 mwjen
Great story so far, hope to read more. Thanks for posting.
10/4/2012 c3 MWkillkenny84
E Neroon ridusse Ramoon ad una monnezza...
NON lo compatisco.
Altri 'discorsi' di Kirk nel prossimo futuro su ipocrisia, ironia o simili da parte (o contro) i Minbari?
Voto: 10
9/20/2012 c2 MWkillkenny84
Bel capitolo.
Hanno attaccato Ael in persona?
Condoglianze.
Brenmar ordinerà lo sterminio del clan Wind Swords per la c*zzata che hanno combinato?
Pooooovero ex-ambasciatore... spero che i Klingon non lo facciano soffrire TROPPO.
Voto: 10
9/13/2012 c1 AlbertG
Not bad for a start. But I believe you are referring to ST:'Final Frontier not the 'Last Frontier'. If that is true, then there has to be a correction. There was no Romulan-Federation alliance. Whatsoever. Ever. There was an association in which the Romulans participated in the planet of galactic peace experiment, or whatever it was called. But never ever an alliance. The Romulans considered it a waste time but at the same time, a possible source of intelligence. The same thing in 'Undiscovered country'. The Romulans participated in Federation debates etc as representativwes of the Romulan Star Empire, but were not part of the Federation just as Russia wasn't a part of the UN but would still have a presence there-maybe. Same thing in ‘The Voyage home’. Romulan representatives were there but they were not part of any alliance and no one trusted them. By the same token, there were no Federation presences in any of the Romulan senate debates etc. It just wasn’t done. They were not trusted and for good reason.

Next: You might want to change your rating as it blocks your story from casual view unless you search for it by changing the Fiction Rating.

Lastly, I was about to say that even a somewhat modified Hyperion could barely dent Minbari armor, however I have to change that belief. The reason is because of Jankowsky’s original damage to the Valen’tha that was running non-stealth at the time. The ship was not destroyed but damaged enough to kill Dukhat who was deep inside the bowels of the vessel. And that vessel was Shaggotti/Modified Sharlin class. The Medea may have enough to seriously damage a Shaggotti but not kill one unless it had the time to do so. Theoretically it could. Realistically I suspect it wouldn’t have enough time to do so before return fire took it out.

I shall watch to see how this goes. Good luck. AG
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