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10/5/2012 c1 20DeathGoblin
I like the premise, though unless you're planning to continue, you should change it to complete. Also, you should read over it, because there are a few spelling mistakes and you might want to rewrite some paragraphs to vary the sentence beginning (one paragraph has all the sentence starting with She), though this is minor and didn't detract from it. Other than that, its a good story.
9/17/2012 c1 24The Last Poison Apple
Cute :D I liked it!

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